Getting a job: Feedback

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Who ever created the first story arcs were pretty lame, lack of description in the story, so I made one that does. Now saying that, It seems readable to me, but I have no idea if others like it. Not only that, I'm not sure if I describe the sex scenes well, or if they feel short or awkward. Mind letting me what you think, or opinions on what might make it better?

XJ347


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