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==<font color="red">The Twin Empires</font>==
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I've copied your pitch onto the [[Idea Pitches]] page. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 19:47, 11 January 2014 (UTC)
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I have this idea that I wish to turn into a story. It takes place in a fantasy world as you control a character of either gender with their own skills, backgrounds and endings. The story is about a great war between two great superpowers: The Empire of Glendia and The Ministry of Zuellni. The war lasted a few decades but in the end, both sides signed a peace treaty separating the continent of Glacia between the two superpowers. After a few years of peace. A group called "Ouroboros" along with the other problems such as the Fuerzan Bandits has begun to wreak havoc around the Ministry of Zuellni. The Ministry assumed that the group called "Ouroboros" came from the Empire and thus, is preparing for another war. Will you let the war continue or let the continent plunge into another age of chaos? What is the group called "Ouroboros" and what are their real motives? You start out in the hometown of the character you chose. As you progress, you'll eventually meet other characters, join a guild and compete in the annual Guild Wars and bring honor to your guild or foil the plan and destroy the group called Ouroboros or even join in the ranks of either superpowers and dominate the other. You can also form a party or even form your own guild. '''You can also add your own characters just send me the detail of the your character and wait for my approval'''. (Please look at the preset character for what to send)
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Here are the preset characters:
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'''Name''': Raiou<br />
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'''Gender''': Male<br />
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'''Age''': 19<br />
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'''Hometown''': Soddon (Ministry of Zuellni)<br />
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'''Abilities''': Skills of a master assassin in which he learned when he was a child and mysterious skill in which he does not know how to activate.<br />
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'''Guild''': None<br />
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'''Characteristics''': A boy with black spiky hair and amber eyes. Raiou tends to be quiet and serious and always gets to the point. He's not someone who is easily angered and will try to finish a fight as quickly as possible. Unlike most of the other characters, he wields 2 katanas. He mainly uses time magic.<br />
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'''Background''': During the Great War, his hometown is destroyed and he was taken up by an assassins' guild and at the age of 7, he was given the title "Black Wolf". After a failed attempt to assassinate Edgar, the hero of the Ministry of Zuellni. The guild has sent assassins in order to kill Raiou for his failure but Edgar managed to defeat them and decided to take Raiou as his adopted son and the adopted brother of Ritz. After the incident, for some reason, Raiou has lost his memories of his childhood.
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'''Name''': Ritz<br />
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I want to help you grow your The Twin Empires story. It's so interesting. I hope you accept my request. Thanks.
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'''Gender''': Female<br />
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[[User: Mewfeuille]]
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'''Age''': 19<br />
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'''Hometown''': Soddon<br />
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Okay.
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'''Guild''': None<br />
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[[User: Mewfeuille]] 7 Feb
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'''Characteristics''': A girl with long violet hair and red eyes. Unlike Raiou, Ritz tends to be cheerful, forceful and will try to finish a mission without a bloodshed as much as possible. She is also easily agitated. She fights with a sword like whip called an urumi and can use healing magic but mainly uses offensive magic.<br />
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'''Background''': Her mother died during the war prompting Ritz to practice the whip-sword and follow her father's footsteps. During the peaceful years, Edgar has brought Raiou to the family as an adoptive son, much to Ritz dismay but soon they got along. With Raiou training with the twin katanas and Ritz training with the urumi, both form a formidable pair. Ritz has developed lingering feelings for Raiou and wishes to know his pass.<br />
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Uh, I'm sorry but I still don't have any. If you don't mind, tell me yours first.
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Note: I could accept some names for the different town and villages and names of different characters. I'm also accepting guilds since I'm still planning one. Criticism is accepted.<br />
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[[User: Mewfeuille]] 9 Feb
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That sounds good. Mmm, I found some name that sounds good in it.
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<br>"The Ten Scroll" (consist of 1 member of each famous mage family in total of 10 members)
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<br>"The Mysterious Cult"<br/>
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What do you think?
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[[User: Mewfeuille]] 11 Feb
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It's okay if Raiou and Ritz will interact with Fred, but maybe there will be a difference between your "Fred" and my "Fred". I think I need to add chapter intervals too, but maybe in different way. I found some family names which probably sound good.
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Seyfert, Connelly, Van Ballegooijen, Killion, Hanselman, Auguste, Wiebold, Brenton, Dunstan, Weissborn, Grodberg (Or maybe you can think another names)
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But I still can't think the specialty of those families.
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Oh, if you have finished working on the outline and name of cities and their location and direction for the continent of Glacia, can I have a look at it? [[User: Mewfeuille]] 12 Feb
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Fred is nice, outgoing, and sensitive person. [[User: Mewfeuille]] 13 Feb
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Sorry for answering late. Here they are:
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Forest:
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*Jade Forest (West of Landen, near east gate of Zuellni)
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*The Forest of Thorns (South of Elfead, near the junction)
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*Achyn Forest (Between Satera and Shayford)
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*Withered Woods (Between Albarea and Crossbell)
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*Hayady Woods (Between Soddon and Rolent)
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*Rotted Woods (Between Reinford and Albarea)
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*Ilanwrtyw Forest (South of Shayford, near north gate of Zuellni)
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*Priddy Woods (West of Zuellni, near west gate of Zuellni)
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*Ravenwood Forest (Between Lenheim and Carmichael)
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Cave:
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Known as "The Quadruplets"
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*Northern Hole (Somewhere in Carmichael)
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*Western Den (Somewhere in Crossbell)
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*The Ancient Cave of Rolent/ Eastern Cave (Somewhere in Rolent)
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*The Haunted Hideout/ Southern Hideout (Somewhere in Cray)
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I haven't found any good names for passageways, sorry. How about making Zuellni lays on the top of mountain? It's better to use 2nd point of view.
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[[User: Mewfeuille]] 17 Feb
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Okay. I'll work on Fred's story. Sorry for having no much progress, but I'm very busy right now. I hope I can make 1 or 2 pages per day.
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[[User: Mewfeuille]] 18 Feb
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Fred is a teenager mage (at first he can't cast any spell, but now he can) that escape from his home to explore Glacia. Everything was alright at first, but suddenly it changed when the family wants him  back (the family hid him from the outside since he can't cast any spell, it makes lots of people don't know if he is a member of the Fiedlerson). He doesn't want to go back to the house where he was kept away from the outside. It causes "the cat and mouse game" between the family and him.
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It should be evil sounding. This is my suggestions:
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*Seven Deadly Soldiers
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*The Exiles
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[[User: Mewfeuille]] 19 Feb
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Hey, I'm QueenPrisme and find your story very intriguing and would love to help it along. Also, I've never posted a comment so i'm really not sure if I'm doing this correctly. April 13

Current revision as of 15:12, 13 April 2016

I've copied your pitch onto the Idea Pitches page. --Platypus 19:47, 11 January 2014 (UTC)

I want to help you grow your The Twin Empires story. It's so interesting. I hope you accept my request. Thanks. User: Mewfeuille

Okay. User: Mewfeuille 7 Feb

Uh, I'm sorry but I still don't have any. If you don't mind, tell me yours first. User: Mewfeuille 9 Feb

That sounds good. Mmm, I found some name that sounds good in it.
"The Ten Scroll" (consist of 1 member of each famous mage family in total of 10 members)
"The Mysterious Cult"
What do you think? User: Mewfeuille 11 Feb

It's okay if Raiou and Ritz will interact with Fred, but maybe there will be a difference between your "Fred" and my "Fred". I think I need to add chapter intervals too, but maybe in different way. I found some family names which probably sound good.

Seyfert, Connelly, Van Ballegooijen, Killion, Hanselman, Auguste, Wiebold, Brenton, Dunstan, Weissborn, Grodberg (Or maybe you can think another names)

But I still can't think the specialty of those families. Oh, if you have finished working on the outline and name of cities and their location and direction for the continent of Glacia, can I have a look at it? User: Mewfeuille 12 Feb

Fred is nice, outgoing, and sensitive person. User: Mewfeuille 13 Feb

Sorry for answering late. Here they are:

Forest:

  • Jade Forest (West of Landen, near east gate of Zuellni)
  • The Forest of Thorns (South of Elfead, near the junction)
  • Achyn Forest (Between Satera and Shayford)
  • Withered Woods (Between Albarea and Crossbell)
  • Hayady Woods (Between Soddon and Rolent)
  • Rotted Woods (Between Reinford and Albarea)
  • Ilanwrtyw Forest (South of Shayford, near north gate of Zuellni)
  • Priddy Woods (West of Zuellni, near west gate of Zuellni)
  • Ravenwood Forest (Between Lenheim and Carmichael)

Cave: Known as "The Quadruplets"

  • Northern Hole (Somewhere in Carmichael)
  • Western Den (Somewhere in Crossbell)
  • The Ancient Cave of Rolent/ Eastern Cave (Somewhere in Rolent)
  • The Haunted Hideout/ Southern Hideout (Somewhere in Cray)

I haven't found any good names for passageways, sorry. How about making Zuellni lays on the top of mountain? It's better to use 2nd point of view.

User: Mewfeuille 17 Feb

Okay. I'll work on Fred's story. Sorry for having no much progress, but I'm very busy right now. I hope I can make 1 or 2 pages per day.

User: Mewfeuille 18 Feb

Fred is a teenager mage (at first he can't cast any spell, but now he can) that escape from his home to explore Glacia. Everything was alright at first, but suddenly it changed when the family wants him back (the family hid him from the outside since he can't cast any spell, it makes lots of people don't know if he is a member of the Fiedlerson). He doesn't want to go back to the house where he was kept away from the outside. It causes "the cat and mouse game" between the family and him.

It should be evil sounding. This is my suggestions:

  • Seven Deadly Soldiers
  • The Exiles

User: Mewfeuille 19 Feb

Hey, I'm QueenPrisme and find your story very intriguing and would love to help it along. Also, I've never posted a comment so i'm really not sure if I'm doing this correctly. April 13

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