Arturia/Light Dress - Revision history

Reiko101 at 22:58, 1 April 2012

Reiko101 — Sun, 01 Apr 2012 22:58:27 GMT

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-	[[There's ~~noone~~ you really feel obliged to part with. Light_Dress\|There's ~~noone~~ you really feel obliged to part with]]	+	[[There's no one you really feel obliged to part with. Light_Dress\|There's no one you really feel obliged to part with]]

	[[You go to where the crowd is waiting to say their goodbyes to you.Light_Dress\|You go to where the crowd is waiting to say their goodbyes to you]]		[[You go to where the crowd is waiting to say their goodbyes to you.Light_Dress\|You go to where the crowd is waiting to say their goodbyes to you]]

Zoroastra: A light, white-blue dress, sporting an elegant blade on your hip you are ready to face whatever is to come. moved to Arturia/Light Dress

Zoroastra — Thu, 01 Mar 2012 19:55:36 GMT

A light, white-blue dress, sporting an elegant blade on your hip you are ready to face whatever is to come. moved to Arturia/Light Dress

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Chlo's-closet: changed to "Your carriage is already waiting"

Chlo's-closet — Thu, 01 Mar 2012 01:40:34 GMT

changed to "Your carriage is already waiting"

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	"Milady," he says, making a respectful bow, "Your escort party is ready and waiting for you downstairs."		"Milady," he says, making a respectful bow, "Your escort party is ready and waiting for you downstairs."

-	You nod and go down the stairs. ~~You can see your~~ carriage waiting ~~there~~, surrounded by about 60 people. You smile a little inwardly and think "Almost the army I wanted to command".	+	You nod and go down the stairs. Your carriage is already waiting, surrounded by about 60 people. You smile a little inwardly and think "Almost the army I wanted to command".

	Now, maybe you should go say your goodbyes before leaving?		Now, maybe you should go say your goodbyes before leaving?

Zoroastra at 13:48, 8 February 2012

Zoroastra — Wed, 08 Feb 2012 13:48:59 GMT

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-	{{Princess Status\|Equipment=''~~none~~''\|Health=100\|Stamina=100\|Mood=Resigned\|Gold=50\|Silver=00\|Copper=00\|Possessions=''none''}}	+	{{Princess Status\|Equipment=''Light Dress, Fine Longsword''\|Health=100\|Stamina=100\|Mood=Resigned\|Gold=50\|Silver=00\|Copper=00\|Possessions=''none''}}

	[[Category:The life of a medieval princess]]		[[Category:The life of a medieval princess]]

Zoroastra at 13:48, 8 February 2012

Zoroastra — Wed, 08 Feb 2012 13:48:31 GMT

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	"Milady," he says, making a respectful bow, "Your escort party is ready and waiting for you downstairs."		"Milady," he says, making a respectful bow, "Your escort party is ready and waiting for you downstairs."

-	You nod and go down the stairs. You can see your carriage waiting there, surrounded by about 60 people. You smile a little inwardly and think "Almost the army i wanted to command".	+	You nod and go down the stairs. You can see your carriage waiting there, surrounded by about 60 people. You smile a little inwardly and think "Almost the army I wanted to command".

	Now, maybe you should go say your goodbyes before leaving?		Now, maybe you should go say your goodbyes before leaving?
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	[[You go to where the crowd is waiting to say their goodbyes to you.Light_Dress\|You go to where the crowd is waiting to say their goodbyes to you]]		[[You go to where the crowd is waiting to say their goodbyes to you.Light_Dress\|You go to where the crowd is waiting to say their goodbyes to you]]
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		+	{{Princess Status\|Equipment=''none''\|Health=100\|Stamina=100\|Mood=Resigned\|Gold=50\|Silver=00\|Copper=00\|Possessions=''none''}}

	[[Category:The life of a medieval princess]]		[[Category:The life of a medieval princess]]

Chlo's-closet: Spelling & grammar, switch word order of dialogue to make reading flow better ("Milady..."), added "Actually, part of...etc."

Chlo's-closet — Sat, 04 Feb 2012 01:17:21 GMT

Spelling & grammar, switch word order of dialogue to make reading flow better ("Milady..."), added "Actually, part of...etc."

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-	You dress in a light dress that allows for movement and take up your blade. You'd rather be seen as a warrior than as a woman, part of you wishes you were born male. As such you would have been able to become a general of your country and wouldn't have to leave to be some other man's trophy.	+	You dress in a light dress that allows for movement and take up your blade. You'd rather be seen as a warrior than as a woman. Actually, part of you wishes you were born male. As such, you would have been able to become a general of your country and wouldn't have to leave to be some other man's trophy.

-	You still make sure you're presentable~~, it~~ would do no good to shame your father by looking inappropriate for the woman you are.	+	You still make sure you're presentable. It would do no good to shame your father by looking inappropriate for the woman you are.

-	~~resignedly~~ you walk out in the hall where you are met by one of the servants. You recognize him as Willem, you've seen him taking care of your horse before. He seems to have been waiting for you to leave your room.	+	Resignedly you walk out in the hall where you are met by one of the servants. You recognize him as Willem; you've seen him taking care of your horse before. He seems to have been waiting for you to leave your room.

-	"Milady, Your escort party is ready and waiting for you downstairs." ~~he says as he makes a respectfull bow.~~	+	"Milady," he says, making a respectful bow, "Your escort party is ready and waiting for you downstairs."

-	You nod and go down the stairs~~, you~~ can see your carriage waiting there, surrounded by about 60 people. You smile a little inwardly and think "~~almost~~ the army i wanted to command".	+	You nod and go down the stairs. You can see your carriage waiting there, surrounded by about 60 people. You smile a little inwardly and think "Almost the army i wanted to command".

	Now, maybe you should go say your goodbyes before leaving?		Now, maybe you should go say your goodbyes before leaving?

Zoroastra at 18:45, 24 January 2012

Zoroastra — Tue, 24 Jan 2012 18:45:46 GMT

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	Now, maybe you should go say your goodbyes before leaving?		Now, maybe you should go say your goodbyes before leaving?

-	~~[[There's noone you really feel obliged to part with. Light_Dress]]~~

-	[[You go to where the crowd is waiting to say their goodbyes to you.Light_Dress]]	+	[[There's noone you really feel obliged to part with. Light_Dress\|There's noone you really feel obliged to part with]]
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		+	[[You go to where the crowd is waiting to say their goodbyes to you.Light_Dress\|You go to where the crowd is waiting to say their goodbyes to you]]

	[[Category:The life of a medieval princess]]		[[Category:The life of a medieval princess]]

Zoroastra at 11:10, 21 January 2012

Zoroastra — Sat, 21 Jan 2012 11:10:06 GMT

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	Now, maybe you should go say your goodbyes before leaving?		Now, maybe you should go say your goodbyes before leaving?

-	[[There's noone you really feel obliged to part with.]]	+	[[There's noone you really feel obliged to part with. Light_Dress]]

-	[[You go to where the crowd is waiting to say their goodbyes to you.]]	+	[[You go to where the crowd is waiting to say their goodbyes to you.Light_Dress]]

	[[Category:The life of a medieval princess]]		[[Category:The life of a medieval princess]]

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Zoroastra — Sat, 21 Jan 2012 10:43:05 GMT

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You dress in a light dress that allows for movement and take up your blade. You'd rather be seen as a warrior than as a woman, part of you wishes you were born male. As such you would have been able to become a general of your country and wouldn't have to leave to be some other man's trophy.

You still make sure you're presentable, it would do no good to shame your father by looking inappropriate for the woman you are.

resignedly you walk out in the hall where you are met by one of the servants. You recognize him as Willem, you've seen him taking care of your horse before. He seems to have been waiting for you to leave your room.

"Milady, Your escort party is ready and waiting for you downstairs." he says as he makes a respectfull bow.

You nod and go down the stairs, you can see your carriage waiting there, surrounded by about 60 people. You smile a little inwardly and think "almost the army i wanted to command".

Now, maybe you should go say your goodbyes before leaving?

[[There's noone you really feel obliged to part with.]]

[[You go to where the crowd is waiting to say their goodbyes to you.]]

[[Category:The life of a medieval princess]]