Talk:A girl's life
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Okay, first, keep it age appropriate. If you want a cherry to be popped at 14, don't state the age, just let people pretend whatever age they want...I have changed it to 18 to keep within the age guidelines on this site.
Next, as I mentioned on the original author's page, stop with the run on sentences joined by and. Your sentence should not be an entire paragraph with and written as every 5th word...
For numbers in stories, the simple rule is: If a number is a single word, spell the number out. Like four instead of 4. This is a story, not a math test. Now, if your number is 139, no one expects you to write out one hundred and thirty nine. This is a very common writing rule.
Now, a few "factually challenged" notes...someone does not magically become a lesbian. If you are a lesbian, you are a lesbian, period. The difference may be you embrace the life, or you finally come to the realization yourself, or you finally come out of the closet and follow your interests, rather than societies dictates, but you do not "become a lesbian"... You always were this way, you just finally decide to live this way.
Also, what does Heather being a nudist have to do with anything? Seriously, if this is an important point, then state why it is important. Like, maybe you decide to follow her way, to try being a naturist yourself. Or maybe because it changes something else. You throw it out there like this though, it is more of a footnote. Like, "My mother married Heather, a woman who followed the naturist path, blah blah blah." See, you note it so you can use it later, but it is not the important fact. Of course, if you are claiming "nudist/naturist" = "slutty whore that has sex everywhere, with everyone", the, well, another factually challenged issue. Nudists do not live this way because they are horny. They live this way because they feel it is natural, which is why we call "nudists" "naturists". Well, they call themselves that. Nudity is not sexuality. They still have the same social concerns, they just don't have concerns with what they will wear today... It would be better if you actually studied the naturist lifestyle to find out why they are naturists, and how a naturist really behaves. Then again, it is your story, so you can write it as unrealistic as you wish...
Also, when creating new paragraphs, you need to hit enter twice so there is a blank line between your paragraphs. Otherwise, everything ends up in the same paragraph.
Sigh, so much wrong with this. Anyways, good luck on your story. For some reason, don't think I will get much out of it. Not unless you figure out ways to make it into a story, rather than "I was horny, I had sex, then I saw them have sex, and we sex, and sex, and sex. Decision: Sex this way|Sex that way. We sex that way, and then others sex this way, and everyone sexes and sexes and sexes. The sex end. Oh, and sex. Can I have that order with a side of sex? Thank you, let me sex you for that. Sex.
......... --Dirty Me 04:53, 11 August 2017 (UTC)
