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-	I like the suicide idea with the father in the Troll arc. It gives the father an honorable end in a Japanese kind of way. So he redeems his wrongs by honorably ending his life. Making Faust king would also be good as he would face some hesitation with all the newfound responsibility being young and all. This kind of crisis would be great for character  development. I can see a situation where while fucking Adria, she confesses to him that her father employed her crew to kill the princess and Faust. When he goes to confront his father about this, it is he who discovers his apparent suicide. He then finds a note in which his father apologizes for his dis-honorable actions. This is accompanied by a will in which his father bestows the kingdom and all of his processions (including the harem haha) to Faust.	+	Hey just a few things this time.
-	As to the princess, I can see her becoming a queen bee type in Faust's bedroom. As in during Faust's orgies, as long as she feels like the center of attention, its all good. Because as pointed out earlier in the story, the women are accustomed to male infidelity. She could have her own private chambers and only come to Faust when he demands it, she is still submissive after all. That way I think she can retain that certain level of royal bitchiness while still conforming to the overall tradition of male dominance. She will still look down on Faust's harem and see it as a challenge to compete for Faust's love. Which will make the sex even better haha.	+	1. So where do you see the the mercenary arc playing out? Is he gonna become a regular mercenary, rising through the ranks? Will he really fight for Hysta, because they seem like the villains, or will he confront that Acrom dude and lead like a mercenary revolt, becoming the hero of Ugarit?
-	I also want to add detail to your pages as well, if thats alright of course. I just really like long detailed writing, and I generally keep it from getting dry, because I don't like that either haha Tell me what you think.	+	2. Why send Lyna into the princess's chambers alone? I mean I know that you know what you're doing, I was just wondering if you could fill me in?
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		+	3. And Alamedia. How do you see that playing out? I for one cannot wait to start writing about all the fun our hero will be having there hehe ;)
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		+	4. And of course let me know if there is anything wrong about the way I am doing this. I am new and respect this story too much to fuck anything up for you.
	--[[User:Ollie Williams|Ollie Williams]]		--[[User:Ollie Williams|Ollie Williams]]

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Revision as of 02:39, 27 January 2010

I am probably the last person who should write a story. I have dyslexia, I have a hard time projecting my thoughts into written material and English is not my first language. But hey! I need some way to cope with all those weird stories forming in my head every day.

I currently have two projects that I am working on. Both are in the adult category.

The Devils Daughter Is about a satanic cult member named Sharon Abrahamson who is tasked with finding tree sacrificial maidens in order to summon a demon and take over the world! Loots of mind breaking and dirty sex!

War and Sex Is an low fantasy adult story. The main character is a prince named Faust Kaladaris. Its mainly about dominance and submission in an more non consensual tone.

Bad spellers off the word, unti!

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lol Nah, I just had a lot of pressure working on it. The RPG style template was really difficult to work with, especially when it spanned several unnecessary options that would just work as a single option. That really drug me down and I just want to get to the story already! I have a great story to tell, darn it! xD

Ah, well. Hope you would read it when I get to the exciting part of the story. ;)

--OminousFlare 11:40, 29 September 2009 (PDT)

Hey just a few things this time.

1. So where do you see the the mercenary arc playing out? Is he gonna become a regular mercenary, rising through the ranks? Will he really fight for Hysta, because they seem like the villains, or will he confront that Acrom dude and lead like a mercenary revolt, becoming the hero of Ugarit?

2. Why send Lyna into the princess's chambers alone? I mean I know that you know what you're doing, I was just wondering if you could fill me in?

3. And Alamedia. How do you see that playing out? I for one cannot wait to start writing about all the fun our hero will be having there hehe ;)

4. And of course let me know if there is anything wrong about the way I am doing this. I am new and respect this story too much to fuck anything up for you. --Ollie Williams