User talk:Minnie May Hopkins

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Revision as of 21:28, 20 April 2015

I changed your category link on Downfall/Carefully try to cup her breast to [[Category:Downfall: Bad Ending]]. I also created the category page for you, and linked it to the main story. It just seems to make more sense to me, personally, so that it shows what story the bad ending is in. My own stories have [[Category:Dirty Me Endings]], which is a subcategory of [[Category:Dirty Me]] so that it is all linked together.

If you don't like it, you can delete it I guess.

I did want to mention though, so glad to see someone who don't need warnings about categories and options and grammar. Keep up the wonderful work ^.^ --Dirty Me 02:11, 24 March 2014 (UTC)

If you're trying to avoid cross-linking by using complex page titles, you can use the Move tab to move the pages you've already created to new titles. That might be the easiest way to go about things.--Platypus 15:24, 13 April 2014 (UTC)

Hello I'm a new User and I can't wait to read more about Julianne, Will, Kristin and Debra and how they spend their days on vacation :) As "Dirty me" told you already : Keep up this wonderful work - the last time you added some new stuff was on 9 August 2014 what's long ago...Once again : I hope you didn't stop working on it - Best regards --User:John Aaron Jones 4 October 2014

Thank you for continuing your work... I wish you merry Christmas and a happy new year :) User:John Aaron Jones 22 December 2014

Thanks for your reply and the season's greetings... First off all let me tell you, that I am not a native speaker ( if you didn't suspect it ). I've learned english "Once upon a time at School" and after that I only have listened to music and watch some movies to keep it more or less fluid. Secondly I want to tell you that your story ist refreshingly different to the most other stories on this platform ( in general and not only in this section ). It's an ordinary story ( but 99 percent of all stories are, so I hope you known what I want to say ). Maybe, they got a good idea, but don't have the capability to tell a tale ( or they don't want to, who knows ?). You are telling a smart constructed story, teasing the readers, keep it plausible and don't let the things happen to fast ( because I don't like stories, where two people see each other, take their clothes off without a reason and so on and on... Do I have any suggestions or wishes ? Not now, but let me think about it. If I got an idea ( that match ) I will tell you immediatly. Finally : It's a nice idea for Julianne's path ( but to tell the truth : I didn't expected a loss at sea, but that's not bad, quite the contrary ) I'm looking forward to see what happens next ? --User:John Aaron Jones 25 December 2014

I agree with the fact that everyone who's looking below that big black border wants to read an adult story where something happens and that a story has not slavishly follow a plausible path ( the most of the time people don't act plausible at all :), I also agree with you that the pace of "Downfall" is really fast ( 5 days are not eternity ) but you wrote a lot of things beside the main path like the feelings, needs, doubts and some background information what make it as plausible as possible and... what's really important ( for me ) this brings the characters to life ( so I got the feeling to know them a bit ) - and I think that's the way a good story works. So, if english is not your native language, which is it ? If I may ask you ? You don't have to answer if you don't want to or when feeling uncomfortable with it. Mine is german by the way. The last item for today : Julianne's branch has started :) - and I think that the beginning with the moneysaving for the vacation leads automatically to Julianne ( because she's the only one who got a job and the wish to go on vacation with her kids ) Maybe it's better to write something like "The family saved enough money during the last months to spend some days on vacation together. What do you think ? ( I know that I am a bit petty-minded ) --User:John Aaron Jones 28 December 2014

Hello again, you're really as busy as a bee - and you have made a nice correction at the beginning. Happy New Year! --User:John Aaron Jones 05 January 2015

This is great stuff I really look forward to your updates! User:Solon 21 April 2015