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SV: Speed up and ram them

2011-08-05T05:50:42Z

Gummibear123: Created page with 'Jack chooses to let this impulse take him over. He lets his foot off the gas pedal, then slams it back down. The blue minivan speeds across the road and rams the kids and dog, sp…'

Jack chooses to let this impulse take him over. He lets his foot off the gas pedal, then slams it back down. The blue minivan speeds across the road and rams the kids and dog, splattering them on the windshield. Jack's brain feels nice and a sensation of pleasure rushes through him. He knows he wants more, but he manages to calm himself down on the ride over. Jack finally arrives right on time, 7:00.

Jack looks up at Safe-T Corporation, Jack's workplace. Safe-T Corporation is a large industry that sells products designed to lower the risk of injury that may be caused by average household items. Like handles for dumbbells so you don't drop them on your foot. Jack thinks it's not a very good idea, but apparently overprotective parents like it. On top of that, it pays well. But all hiss life, Jack's wanted to burn this place to the ground.

Well?

[[SV: Begin work]]

[[SV: Burn down Safe-T Corp.]]

'''Jack's Info'''

'''Health:''' 100

'''Weapon:''' Pocket Knife

'''Syringe:''' Full

'''Time:''' 7:00 AM

'''Kill Count:''' 3

[[Category: Sadistic Violence]]

SV: Go to work

2011-08-05T05:41:33Z

Gummibear123:

Jack decides to forget about fun. He had fun when he was younger, now he has to work. Who knows? Maybe he'll end up going to that club. But right now, Jack's getting in his minivan and turning the key sideways in the ignition. He backs out of the driveway and begins his peaceful drive to work. Suddenly, two kids playing with their dogs run out onto the street ahead of you. Jack has plenty of time to stop and wait, but an impulse courses through you. He wants to kill them so much.

Choose:

[[SV: Just scare them, rev your engine]]

[[SV: Speed up and ram them]]

[[SV: Use your syringe]]

'''Jack's Info'''

'''Health:''' 100

'''Weapon:''' Pocket Knife

'''Syringe:''' Full

'''Time:''' 6:30 AM

'''Kill Count:''' 0

[[Category: Sadistic Violence]]

SV: Go to work

2011-08-05T05:41:06Z

Gummibear123:

Jack decides to forget about fun. He had fun when he was younger, now he has to work. Who knows? Maybe he'll end up going to that club. But right now, Jack's getting in his minivan and turning the key sideways in the ignition. He backs out of the driveway and begins his peaceful drive to work. Suddenly, two kids playing with their dogs run out onto the street ahead of you. Jack has plenty of time to stop and wait, but an impulse courses through you. He wants to kill them so much.

Choose:

[[SV: Stop and let the kids go by]]

[[SV: Just scare them, rev your engine]]

[[SV: Speed up and ram them]]

[[SV: Use your syringe]]

'''Jack's Info'''

'''Health:''' 100

'''Weapon:''' Pocket Knife

'''Syringe:''' Full

'''Time:''' 6:30 AM

'''Kill Count:''' 0

[[Category: Sadistic Violence]]

SV: Go to work

2011-08-05T05:40:39Z

Gummibear123: Created page with 'Jack decides to forget about fun. He had fun when he was younger, now he has to work. Who knows? Maybe he'll end up going to that club. But right now, Jack's getting in his miniv…'

Jack decides to forget about fun. He had fun when he was younger, now he has to work. Who knows? Maybe he'll end up going to that club. But right now, Jack's getting in his minivan and turning the key sideways in the ignition. He backs out of the driveway and begins his peaceful drive to work. Suddenly, two kids playing with their dogs run out onto the street ahead of you. Jack has plenty of time to stop and wait, but an impulse courses through you. He wants to kill them so much.

Choose:

[[SV: Stop and let the kids go by]]]

[[SV: Just scare them, rev your engine]]

[[SV: Speed up and ram them]]

[[SV: Use your syringe]]

'''Jack's Info'''

'''Health:''' 100

'''Weapon:''' Pocket Knife

'''Syringe:''' Full

'''Time:''' 6:30 AM

'''Kill Count:''' 0

[[Category: Sadistic Violence]]

SV: "Hell, yeah!"

2011-08-05T05:33:29Z

Gummibear123:

A wild grin spreads across Jack's face as he slams the chair down on his beloved wife, cracking her head open and killing her. Unfortunately, this also broke the chair. But now, one of the chair legs is sharp on one end, making an excellent wooden stake. The impulse dies down slowly, and Jack begins to regain his sanity. He lookes down at his wife and gets down on his knees, crying. JAck looks at the stake in his hand, begins to cry even more, and stabs the stake into his heart, killing him instantly.

(No, he's not a vampire)

'''JACK IS DEAD'''

'''Jack's Info'''

'''Health:''' 0

'''Weapon:''' Wooden Stake

'''Time:''' 6:02 AM

'''Kill Count:''' 2

[[Category: Sadistic Violence]]

SV: Try to Ignore the impulse

2011-08-04T15:43:37Z

Gummibear123:

Jack closes his eyes and breathes deeply. He pets his wife's gorgeous hair and walks out of the room. As he walks through the halls, Jack knocks on Anna and Kevin's bedroom doors.

"Wake up, you two. Breakfast." He says.

Jack trots down the stairs and approaches the kitchen. He turns on the oven and puts a frying pan on the top of the stove. Jack puts out 2 pieces of bacon and four eggs for him and his wife. And he puts some toaster pastries in the microwave for the kids. Jack heads back upstairs and puts on his clothes for work today. He grabs his phone, his pocket knife, and his syringe.

''The syringe will now be a new section on Jack's Info. Every day Jack will refill the syringe with a fluid that keeps him from lashing out. You get 1 shot per day.''

Jack makes sure everything is ready, leaves a note for his wife, saying he's going to work, and exits the house. Jack takes a look at his nice, blue Toyota, and smiles. Suddenly, Jack's phone starts to ring. He answers on the third ring.

"Hey, Jack, what's up?"

It's Jack's old college roomie, Drake. He's a little irresponsible, but they still have a great relationship. He even helps Jack with his P.I.S.

"Hi, Drake. Not much. Just headin' to work." Jack replies.

"You still work? C'mon, Man! Live a little!"

"No thanks."

"Look. I'm going to an awesome club tonight. It's gonna have ladies, beer, parties."

"You know I'm married, right?"

"Oh Yeah! Forget about the ladies. Just think about it. It's at 8:00. Be there if you wanna."

Drake hangs up and Jack puts the phone away. He thinks about what Drake said and wonders if he should just blow off work altogether.

[[SV: Blow off work, have some fun]]

[[SV: Blow off work, go on a killing spree]]

[[SV: Blow off work, stay at home]]

[[SV: Go to work]]

'''Jack's Info'''

'''Health:''' 100

'''Weapon:''' Pocket Knife

'''Syringe:''' Full

'''Time:''' 6:20 AM

'''Kill Count:''' 0

[[Category: Sadistic Violence]]

SV: Try to Ignore the impulse

2011-08-04T15:39:21Z

Gummibear123:

Jack closes his eyes and breathes deeply. He pets his wife's gorgeous hair and walks out of the room. As he walks through the halls, Jack knocks on Anna and Kevin's bedroom doors.

"Wake up, you two. Breakfast." He says.

Jack trots down the stairs and approaches the kitchen. He turns on the oven and puts a frying pan on the top of the stove. Jack puts out 2 pieces of bacon and four eggs for him and his wife. And he puts some toaster pastries in the microwave for the kids. Jack heads back upstairs and puts on his clothes for work today. He grabs his phone, his pocket knife, and his syringe.

''The syringe will now be a new section on Jack's Info. Every day Jack will refill the syringe with a fluid that keeps him from lashing out. You get 1 shot per day.''

Jack makes sure everything is ready, leaves a note for his wife, saying he's going to work, and exits the house. Jack takes a look at his nice, blue Toyota, and smiles. Suddenly, Jack's phone starts to ring. He answers on the third ring.

"Hey, Jack, what's up?"

It's Jack's old college roomie, Drake. He's a little irresponsible, but they still have a great relationship. He even helps Jack with his P.I.S.

"Hi, Drake. Not much. Just headin' to work." Jack replies.

"You still work? C'mon, Man! Live a little!"

"No thanks."

"Look. I'm going to an awesome club tonight. It's gonna have ladies, beer, parties."

"You know I'm married, right?"

"Oh Yeah! Forget about the ladies. Just think about it. It's at 8:00. Be there if you wanna."

Drake hangs up and puts the phone away. He thinks about what Drake said and wonders if he should just blow off work altogether.

[[SV: Blow off work, have some fun]]
[[SV: Blow off work, go on a killing spree]]
[[SV: Blow off work, stay at home]]
[[SV: Go to work]]

'''Jack's Info'''

'''Health:'''100

SV: Try to Ignore the impulse

2011-08-04T15:19:54Z

Gummibear123: Created page with 'Jack closes his eyes and breathes deeply. He pets his wife's gorgeous hair and walks out of the room. As he walks through the halls, Jack knocks on Anna and'

Jack closes his eyes and breathes deeply. He pets his wife's gorgeous hair and walks out of the room. As he walks through the halls, Jack knocks on Anna and

SV: "Hell, yeah!"

2011-08-02T18:57:50Z

Gummibear123:

A wild grin spreads across Jack's face as he slams the chair down on his beloved wife, cracking her head open and killing her. Unfortunately, this also broke the chair. But now, one of the chair legs is sharp on one end, making an excellent wooden stake. The impulse dies down slowly, and JAck begins to regain his sanity. He lookes down at his wife and gets down on his knees, crying. JAck looks at the stake in his hand, begins to cry even more, and stabs the stake into his heart, killing him instantly.

(No, he's not a vampire)

'''JACK IS DEAD'''

'''Jack's Info'''

'''Health:''' 0

'''Weapon:''' Wooden Stake

'''Time:''' 6:02 AM

'''Kill Count:''' 2

[[Category: Sadistic Violence]]

SV: "Hell, yeah!"

2011-08-02T18:56:54Z

Gummibear123: Created page with 'A wild grin spreads across Jack's face as he slams the chair down on his beloved wife, cracking her head open and killing her. Unfortunately, this also broke the chair. But now, …'

A wild grin spreads across Jack's face as he slams the chair down on his beloved wife, cracking her head open and killing her. Unfortunately, this also broke the chair. But now, one of the chair legs is sharp on one end, making an excellent wooden stake. The impulse dies down slowly, and JAck begins to regain his sanity. He lookes down at his wife and gets down on his knees, crying. JAck looks at the stake in his hand, begins to cry even more, and stabs the stake into his heart, killing him instantly.

(No, he's not a vampire))

'''JACK IS DEAD'''

'''Jack's Info'''

'''Health:''' 0

'''Weapon:''' Wooden Stake

'''Time:''' 6:02 AM

'''Kill Count:''' 2

[[Category: Sadistic Violence]]

SV: The chair

2011-08-02T18:50:59Z

Gummibear123: Created page with 'Jack decides to use the old oak chair they keep in their room to kill with. He picks it up by the armrests and holds it above his head, looking down at his wife. Are you sure? …'

Jack decides to use the old oak chair they keep in their room to kill with. He picks it up by the armrests and holds it above his head, looking down at his wife.

Are you sure?

[[SV: "Hell, yeah!"]]

[[SV: "Maybe not..."]]

'''Jack's Info'''

'''Health:''' 100

'''Weapon:''' Wooden Chair

'''Time:''' 6:01 AM

'''Kill Count:''' 0

[[Category: Sadistic Violence]]

SV: Go on a killing spree

2011-08-02T18:49:31Z

Gummibear123:

Jack looks around and see three items he could kill with in the room.

Choose:

[[SV: The lamp]]

[[SV: The chair]]

[[SV: The clothes hanger]]

'''Jack's Info'''

'''Health:''' 100

'''Weapon:''' None

'''Time:''' 6:01 AM

'''Kill Count:''' 0

[[Category: Sadistic Violence]]

SV: Go on a killing spree

2011-08-02T18:45:33Z

Gummibear123:

Jack looks around and see three items he could kill with in the room.

Choose:

[[The lamp]]

[[The chair]]

[[The clothes hanger]]

'''Jack's Info'''

'''Health:''' 100

'''Weapon:''' None

'''Time:''' 6:01 AM

'''Kill Count:''' 0

[[Category: Sadistic Violence]]

Category:Sadistic Violence

2011-08-02T18:44:06Z

Gummibear123:

This is a C.Y.O.A. about the man you play as, Jack Phillips. Jack is 28 years old, has a wife named Jessica, a daughter named Anna, and a son named Kevin. A while back, Jack suffered from P.I.S. (Personality Impulse Syndrome) and began to bully people. Around his 18th birthday, he got a therapist to help him with his problem. By his 20th birthday, Jack was good as new. But lately, Jack's been feeling strange impulses. Whenever even slightly provoked, he clenches his fists and thinks about the many ways to kill that person. But that doesn't mean his P.I.S. is back right?

So, here we are in real time. Jack is just waking up. He punches the alarm clock and looks over at his wife, Jessica. She is as beautiful as ever. Her black curly hair running down to her back. Her beautiful, admiring eyes, closed in sleep. Your eyes narrow as you notice her luscious body, partly hidden under the covers. Her breasts are a perfect size. She's always interested in sex when you both want it. Suddenly, your brain tingles and you suddenly feel like ripping her to shreds.

What will Jack do?

[[SV: Try to Ignore the impulse]]

[[SV: Go on a killing spree]]

'''Jack's Info'''

'''Health:''' 100

'''Weapon:''' None

'''Time:''' 6:00 AM

'''Kill Count:''' 0

Category:Sadistic Violence

2011-08-02T18:43:05Z

Gummibear123: Created page with 'This is a C.Y.O.A. about the man you play as, Jack Phillips. Jack is 28 years old, has a wife named Jessica, a daughter named Anna, and a son named Kevin. A while back, Jack suff…'

This is a C.Y.O.A. about the man you play as, Jack Phillips. Jack is 28 years old, has a wife named Jessica, a daughter named Anna, and a son named Kevin. A while back, Jack suffered from P.I.S. (Personality Impulse Syndrome) and began to bully people. Around his 18th birthday, he got a therapist to help him with his problem. By his 20th birthday, Jack was good as new. But lately, Jack's been feeling strange impulses. Whenever even slightly provoked, he clenches his fists and thinks about the many ways to kill that person. But that doesn't mean his P.I.S. is back right?

So, here we are in real time. Jack is just waking up. He punches the alarm clock and looks over at his wife, Jessica. She is as beautiful as ever. Her black curly hair running down to her back. Her beautiful, admiring eyes, closed in sleep. Your eyes narrow as you notice her luscious body, partly hidden under the covers. Her breasts are a perfect size. She's always interested in sex when you both want it. Suddenly, your brain tingles and you suddenly feel like ripping her to shreds.

What will Jack do?

SV: Try to Ignore the impulse

SV: Go on a killing spree

Jack's Info

Health: 100

Weapon: None

Time: 6:00 AM

Kill Count: 0

SV: Go on a killing spree

2011-08-02T18:42:40Z

Gummibear123: Created page with 'You look around and see three items you could kill with in the room. Choose: The lamp The chair The clothes hanger '''Jack's Info''' '''Health:''' 100 '''Weapo…'

You look around and see three items you could kill with in the room.

Choose:

[[The lamp]]

[[The chair]]

[[The clothes hanger]]

'''Jack's Info'''

'''Health:''' 100

'''Weapon:''' None

'''Time:''' 6:01 AM

'''Kill Count:''' 0

[[Category: Sadistic Violence]]

Sadistic Violence

2011-08-02T18:38:53Z

Gummibear123:

''This is a C.Y.O.A. about the man you play as, Jack Phillips. Jack is 28 years old, has a wife named Jessica, a daughter named Anna, and a son named Kevin. A while back, Jack suffered from P.I.S. (Personality Impulse Syndrome) and began to bully people. Around his 18th birthday, he got a therapist to help him with his problem. By his 20th birthday, Jack was good as new. But lately, Jack's been feeling strange impulses. Whenever even slightly provoked, he clenches his fists and thinks about the many ways to kill that person. But that doesn't mean his P.I.S. is back right?''

So, here we are in real time. Jack is just waking up. He punches the alarm clock and looks over at his wife, Jessica. She is as beautiful as ever. Her black curly hair running down to her back. Her beautiful, admiring eyes, closed in sleep. Your eyes narrow as you notice her luscious body, partly hidden under the covers. Her breasts are a perfect size. She's always interested in sex when you both want it. Suddenly, your brain tingles and you suddenly feel like ripping her to shreds.

What will Jack do?

[[SV: Try to Ignore the impulse]]

[[SV: Go on a killing spree]]

'''Jack's Info'''

'''Health:''' 100

'''Weapon:''' None

'''Time:''' 6:00 AM

'''Kill Count:''' 0

[[Category: Sadistic Violence]]

Sadistic Violence

2011-08-02T18:38:08Z

Gummibear123: Created page with '''This is a C.Y.O.A. about the man you play as, Jack Phillips. Jack is 28 years old, has a wife named Jessica, a daughter named Anna, and a son named Kevin. A while back, Jack su…'

''This is a C.Y.O.A. about the man you play as, Jack Phillips. Jack is 28 years old, has a wife named Jessica, a daughter named Anna, and a son named Kevin. A while back, Jack suffered from P.I.S. (Personality Impulse Syndrome) and began to bully people. Around his 18th birthday, he got a therapist to help him with his problem. By his 20th birthday, Jack was good as new. But lately, Jack's been feeling strange impulses. Whenever even slightly provoked, he clenches his fists and thinks about the many ways to kill that person. But that doesn't mean his P.I.S. is back right?''

So, here we are in real time. Jack is just waking up. He punches the alarm clock and looks over at his wife, Jessica. She is as beautiful as ever. Her black curly hair running down to her back. Her beautiful, admiring eyes, closed in sleep. Your eyes narrow as you notice her luscious body, partly hidden under the covers. Her breasts are a perfect size. She's always interested in sex when you both want it. Suddenly, your brain tingles and you suddenly feel like ripping her to shreds.

What will Jack do?

[[Try to Ignore the impulse]]

[[Go on a killing spree]]

'''Jack's Info'''

'''Health:''' 100

'''Weapon:''' None

'''Time:''' 6:00 AM

'''Kill Count:''' 0

[[Category: Sadistic Violence]]

Category:World of Wizards

2011-06-09T23:13:16Z

Gummibear123: Created page with '''This story will hopefully be made correctly. Sadly, I have yet to make a story that hasn't been removed. Let's hope for the best!'' You live in the small town of Riverdale. It…'

''This story will hopefully be made correctly. Sadly, I have yet to make a story that hasn't been removed. Let's hope for the best!''

You live in the small town of Riverdale. It is a peaceful place with a lot of exotic plants and animals. You are a wizard who lives in here in your mother's house. Today, you hope to finally leave the house, find a wife, and become a legendary wizard. The only problem is: you suck at beating up monsters. you need to use your strategy to defeat one and to woo a woman.

You wake up in your usual room. Usual bed. Usual closet. Usual smell of burning flesh. Burning flesh? You wake up and see smoke coming from downstairs. You hear a maniacal laughter coming from down there, too. Seems awfully eerie.

What should you do?

*[[WoW: Go downstairs]]
*[[WoW: Get ready for the day]]
*[[WoW: Sneak out the window]]

'''Location''': Your room

'''Health''': 100

'''Level''': 1

'''Inventory''': Footy PJs

[[Category: World of Wizards]]

WoW: Go downstairs

2011-06-09T23:12:18Z

Gummibear123: Created page with 'You hop out of bed and venture down the stairs to see what the heck is making that rotten smell. You get down and see your best friend, Lionel, cooking something. "What are ya c…'

You hop out of bed and venture down the stairs to see what the heck is making that rotten smell. You get down and see your best friend, Lionel, cooking something.

"What are ya cookin' there, Lionel?" You ask, kind of scared to find out.

Lionel turns around and holds up a plate of burnt bacon. He frowns.

"I was going to make you bacon, but I burnt it by mistake. I'm such a loser."

You can't say he's wrong about it. Lionel really is a loser. He can't even tie his shoes without losing a finger. But you're a good person, right? You'll try to help him feel better, right? You aren't some jerk, right?

I hope not, but you choose.

*[[WoW: Cheer Lionel up]]
*[[WoW: Agree with Lionel]]
*[[WoW: Ignore Lionel and leave]]

'''Location''': Your Kitchen

'''Health''': 100

'''Level''': 1

'''Inventory''': Footy PJs

[[Category: World of Wizards]]

World of Wizards

2011-06-09T23:05:12Z

Gummibear123:

World of Wizards

2011-06-09T22:56:49Z

User talk:Platypus

2011-06-04T20:53:18Z

Gummibear123: /* Apologies */

Since this page has become rather cluttered, I've moved old discussions to the archive page below. Feel free to leave new messages here. I'll get back to you ASAP!

[[User talk:Platypus/Archive1]]

>Add new comments below.

=Missing category=

Hey Platypus, you replied to my story. I'm still new at this, so you want to help me with my story?--Nousherwan

Sorry about that, still new at this. Thanks for the fix. --[[User:Sisauq|Sisauq]] 16:31, 2 April 2011 (UTC)

I'll start to add categories in the future as well, feel free to help edit my story. I could use someone whos a "grammar nazi" --[[User:BFEL|BFEL]] 19:47, 2 April 2011 (UTC)

Hey, Platypus. You've been sending me messages about categories and i'm sorry because i'm new at this. Please tell me how to make a category in every page. I will not continue my CYOA until I find out. --[[User:Gummibear123|Gummibear123]] 16:49, 4 June 2011 (UTC)

=Article Tags=

I can't help but notice some heavy abuse of the article tagging system. I was wondering if the TagNimbus system had some sort of way to edit the tags on an article because there's been many times that I've seen things that are out of place and could use removing. Take the tags for the Sandbox for example... --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 03:39, 6 April 2011 (UTC)

=Hello, Platypus!=

Hello again Platypus!

Oh dear. I see what you mean now and I feel really silly.
I will ensure that it does not happen again! I will also go to scour my posts and fix them in case you didn't already. Thank you for telling me; criticism goes a long way in helping me get better!

[[User_talk:NeonxXxLights|NeonxXxLights]] 8:51pm, 3 May 2011 (-5GMT Eastern)

=Whose adventure?=

I'll not do that again, then (at least within the scope of SSR as it's your baby) - to be fair, though, I have seen plenty of published CYOA stuff that has a similar situation of you-the-reader choosing things that are completely outside you-the-character's control, though to be honest it did always feel a bit weird to me at the time. --[[User:Sisauq|Sisauq]] 20:45, 4 May 2011 (UTC)

== Hi platypus im new ==

Hi platypus im new here and everyone is saying u help us out So any advice or anything

Vinnievu141: Hi platypus, I have just received your notice and would like you to tell me how to make the status bar that I added on Smutty Sex Romp. Thank you for realizing my error.

== Thanks keep in contact ==

Ok thank you platypus i just woke up and ill read it and ill most likly get stumped multibule times thanks keep in contact

== Help with links ==

Uuuummmm........ Platypus i need help i dont know how to make the words links please help

== Thanks platypus ==

Your the best so whatcha want to talk about (sorry im a horrible conversation starter ohh i think thats why i dont get dates)

== Editing is fun ==

Im editing right now SO MUCH FUN thanks for teaching me platypus

== Items ==

Hey um how do you make items for people to add to there inventory in the storys

== Also ==

How do i get a story from that pit to the main i added more then 10 pages to it but its still in the pit

== Your Assistance ==

Thank you for your assistance in finding errors in my story pages. As I am new to this mistakes are bound to slip thru and as you have taken great pride in pointing out mine have more then their fair share. I welcome any tips and corrections you are willing to provide I simply and respectfully request that you keep the sarcasm to a minimum. I am working daily to improve my proof reading methods to make sure there are less and less mistakes. As diligently as I am working to that end I am only human. I know you are a contributor and editor just doing your job; you have my thanks for that. I have enjoyed my time here and hope to stay a while and continue to contribute.

== Thanks ==

Platypus, I have just gone over your latest revisions in my texts and can see where most of my mistacks are coming from and why they are not being caught by my spell and grammer check. I will continue to strive to improve the quality of my posts. As you are going through them and editing them, I hope you are also enjopying the content. Thanks again! --[[User:Blackdragon25|Blackdragon25]] 19:51, 27 May 2011 (UTC)

== Apologies ==

I am trying to figure out the system, but still am making errors. Thank you for your patience.

Sorry for making trouble for you, Platypus. I know it must be hard for you to keep track of everyone and everything on this site and I thank you for that. --[[User:Gummibear123|Gummibear123]] 16:53, 4 June 2011 (UTC)

== DON'T delete my TURNMOUSE part of my story ==

It's my story, and why did you delete it? Please tell me. If it REALLY was abandoning I abandoned the rest of my story for a while too!

User talk:Platypus

2011-06-04T20:49:46Z

Gummibear123: /* Missing category */

Since this page has become rather cluttered, I've moved old discussions to the archive page below. Feel free to leave new messages here. I'll get back to you ASAP!

[[User talk:Platypus/Archive1]]

>Add new comments below.

=Missing category=

Hey Platypus, you replied to my story. I'm still new at this, so you want to help me with my story?--Nousherwan

Sorry about that, still new at this. Thanks for the fix. --[[User:Sisauq|Sisauq]] 16:31, 2 April 2011 (UTC)

I'll start to add categories in the future as well, feel free to help edit my story. I could use someone whos a "grammar nazi" --[[User:BFEL|BFEL]] 19:47, 2 April 2011 (UTC)

Hey, Platypus. You've been sending me messages about categories and i'm sorry because i'm new at this. Please tell me how to make a category in every page. I will not continue my CYOA until I find out. --[[User:Gummibear123|Gummibear123]] 16:49, 4 June 2011 (UTC)

=Article Tags=

I can't help but notice some heavy abuse of the article tagging system. I was wondering if the TagNimbus system had some sort of way to edit the tags on an article because there's been many times that I've seen things that are out of place and could use removing. Take the tags for the Sandbox for example... --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 03:39, 6 April 2011 (UTC)

=Hello, Platypus!=

Hello again Platypus!

Oh dear. I see what you mean now and I feel really silly.
I will ensure that it does not happen again! I will also go to scour my posts and fix them in case you didn't already. Thank you for telling me; criticism goes a long way in helping me get better!

[[User_talk:NeonxXxLights|NeonxXxLights]] 8:51pm, 3 May 2011 (-5GMT Eastern)

=Whose adventure?=

I'll not do that again, then (at least within the scope of SSR as it's your baby) - to be fair, though, I have seen plenty of published CYOA stuff that has a similar situation of you-the-reader choosing things that are completely outside you-the-character's control, though to be honest it did always feel a bit weird to me at the time. --[[User:Sisauq|Sisauq]] 20:45, 4 May 2011 (UTC)

== Hi platypus im new ==

Hi platypus im new here and everyone is saying u help us out So any advice or anything

Vinnievu141: Hi platypus, I have just received your notice and would like you to tell me how to make the status bar that I added on Smutty Sex Romp. Thank you for realizing my error.

== Thanks keep in contact ==

Ok thank you platypus i just woke up and ill read it and ill most likly get stumped multibule times thanks keep in contact

== Help with links ==

Uuuummmm........ Platypus i need help i dont know how to make the words links please help

== Thanks platypus ==

Your the best so whatcha want to talk about (sorry im a horrible conversation starter ohh i think thats why i dont get dates)

== Editing is fun ==

Im editing right now SO MUCH FUN thanks for teaching me platypus

== Items ==

Hey um how do you make items for people to add to there inventory in the storys

== Also ==

How do i get a story from that pit to the main i added more then 10 pages to it but its still in the pit

== Your Assistance ==

Thank you for your assistance in finding errors in my story pages. As I am new to this mistakes are bound to slip thru and as you have taken great pride in pointing out mine have more then their fair share. I welcome any tips and corrections you are willing to provide I simply and respectfully request that you keep the sarcasm to a minimum. I am working daily to improve my proof reading methods to make sure there are less and less mistakes. As diligently as I am working to that end I am only human. I know you are a contributor and editor just doing your job; you have my thanks for that. I have enjoyed my time here and hope to stay a while and continue to contribute.

== Thanks ==

Platypus, I have just gone over your latest revisions in my texts and can see where most of my mistacks are coming from and why they are not being caught by my spell and grammer check. I will continue to strive to improve the quality of my posts. As you are going through them and editing them, I hope you are also enjopying the content. Thanks again! --[[User:Blackdragon25|Blackdragon25]] 19:51, 27 May 2011 (UTC)

== Apologies ==

I am trying to figure out the system, but still am making errors. Thank you for your patience.

== DON'T delete my TURNMOUSE part of my story ==

It's my story, and why did you delete it? Please tell me. If it REALLY was abandoning I abandoned the rest of my story for a while too!

HC: Run through the turn

2011-06-04T13:44:18Z

Gummibear123:

You clench your fists and run to the shar turn and pass it. Past the turn is a large hole. You manage to stop just before it. You see the hole ends not too far from you. You could attempt to jump, but you might die.

Do you:
*[[HC: Jump down the hole]]
*[[HC: Try to jump over the hole]]
*[[HC: Toss your military helmet down the hole]]

Equipment: Military armor, Loaded pistol, Bag of dust, Flashlight (Dead)

Health: 100

Whereabouts: Top Floor Hallway (Turn)

Sleepiness: 5

HC: Run through the turn

2011-06-04T13:43:56Z

Gummibear123: Created page with 'You clench your fists and run to the shar turn and pass it. Past the turn is a large hole. You manage to stop just before it. You see the hole ends not too far from you. You coul…'

You clench your fists and run to the shar turn and pass it. Past the turn is a large hole. You manage to stop just before it. You see the hole ends not too far from you. You could attempt to jump, but you might die.

Do you:
*[[HC: Jump down the hole]]
*[[HC: Try to jump over the hole]]
*[[Toss your military helmet down the hole]]

Equipment: Military armor, Loaded pistol, Bag of dust, Flashlight (Dead)

Health: 100

Whereabouts: Top Floor Hallway (Turn)

Sleepiness: 5

HC: Shoot yourself

2011-06-04T13:39:41Z

Gummibear123: Created page with 'You die. '''YOU HAVE DIED.''' Equipment: Military armor, Loaded pistol, Bag of dust, Flashlight (Dead) Health: 0 Whereabouts: Top Floor Hallway Sleepiness: 0'

You die.

'''YOU HAVE DIED.'''

Equipment: Military armor, Loaded pistol, Bag of dust, Flashlight (Dead)

Health: 0

Whereabouts: Top Floor Hallway

Sleepiness: 0

HC: Enter the storage room

2011-06-04T13:38:03Z

Gummibear123: Created page with 'You decide to enter the storage room in attempt to find something useful. The door is stuck at first, but after several pushes, you manage to break it opne. There is a single fli…'

You decide to enter the storage room in attempt to find something useful. The door is stuck at first, but after several pushes, you manage to break it opne. There is a single flickering lightbulb hanging above the room. The room, itself, is filled with boxes upon boxes. Some are open, giving you hints of what within them. You take whatever you can find. You find some old military armor, which you exchange for your hospital clothing. As you change, you hear the faint sound of a little girl's giggling. You try to ignore it as you keep searching. You find a loaded pistol, a small bag of dust, and a flashlight. Unfortunately, the flash light doesn't have batteries at the time. But you take it anyways. You look around the room some more but don't find anything else useful. You step back out into the hallway, where you continue your escape. You find out that all of the rooms, including the storage room, are gone.

Heavily armed, you:
*[[HC: Charge down the stairs]]
*[[HC: Shoot yourself]]
*[[HC: Run through the turn]]

Equipment: Military armor, Loaded pistol, Bag of dust, Flashlight (Dead)

Health: 100

Whereabouts: Top Floor Hallway

Sleepiness: 3

HC: Go into the darkness

2011-06-04T13:29:40Z

Gummibear123: Created page with 'You sneak down the hallway, heading into the darkness. Every step you take, you feel something pushing against you. Just before you enter the darkness, you hear a wild scream com…'

You sneak down the hallway, heading into the darkness. Every step you take, you feel something pushing against you. Just before you enter the darkness, you hear a wild scream coming from behind you. You look back and see a ghostly child with a wrinkled face floating towards you. You attempt to run into the darkness to get him lost, but that only gets you lost. Suddenly, you feel something cool on your face. Then, your face feels hot. You put your hands to your face and feel a gooey substance. Under that, is pure bone. You scream, realizing your face is melting, until you die.

'''YOU HAVE DIED.'''

Equipment: Textbooks, Hospital clothing

Health: 0

Whereabouts: The Darkness

Sleepiness: 0

HC: Step out into the hallway

2011-06-04T13:25:44Z

Gummibear123: Created page with 'You decide to investigate into the hallway. You pull the old door open, making it creak from the rust. You walk into the hallway and look around. To your left, you can see two ro…'

You decide to investigate into the hallway. You pull the old door open, making it creak from the rust. You walk into the hallway and look around. To your left, you can see two rooms. The rest of the hallway is shrouded in darkness. The first room says: STORAGE ROOM. The second room has a number on it. The number is illegible from this distance but it is obviously another hospital room.

To your right, you see a staircase at the very end of the hall. There is also another hospital room with another marked number. By the staircase, there is a sharp turn that leads left. you have no idea what is beyond there.

What to do? Do you:
*[[HC: Enter the storage room]]
*[[HC: Enter the hospital room to the left]]
*[[HC: Go into the darkness]]
*[[HC: Go down the staircase]]
*[[HC: Enter the hospital room on the right]]
*[[HC: Take the turn]]

Equipment: Textbooks, Hospital clothing

Health: 100

Whereabouts: Top Floor Hallway

Sleepiness: 2

HC: Explore the room you are currently in

2011-06-04T13:17:45Z

Gummibear123:

You decide to take a look around the room you're in. It's basically like any other old hospital room, except for several broken items. There is a window to the far left of the room. There is also a skylight on the ceiling, indicating you're on the top floor of this building. The door is old and barely attached to it's rusted hinges. Opening it would be simple. Strangely, the bed you had just gotten up from is now gone. You hear faint voices that sound somewhat like 5-year-olds whispering to you.

''"Open the book...Open the book..."''

Just as the voices silence, you notice a black book printed with strange markings lying in the middle of the room. You are certain it was not there earlier.

What should you do? Should you:
*[[HC: Look out the old window]]
*[[HC: Step out into the hallway]]
*[[HC: Open the book]]

Equipment: Textbooks, Hospital clothing

Health: 100

Whereabouts: Hospital Room

Sleepiness: 1
[[Category: Haunting Children]]

HC: Look out the old window

2011-06-04T13:17:07Z

Gummibear123:

You walk over to the window and rest your arms on the windowsill. You quickly remove them, realizing that dust is spread across it. Looking out the window, you see that you are very high up and that there are no people around. There is a long pathway leading away from the building and into the horizon. Suddenly, you see a flash of a wrinkled, ghostly child's face appear right in front of you. It screams at you.

''"OPEN THE BOOK! OPEN THE BOOK!"''

After that, it disappears as if nothing was ever there. You look back over to find a black book lying in the middle fo the room.Your bed is now gone. You can suddenly hear a faint crash from outside the room. It sounded not too far from your room, but the crash must have been awfully loud for you to hear it that well.

What will you do? Do you:
*[[Investigate the crash]]
*[[Open the book]]
*[[Attempt to escape through the window]]

Equipment: Textbooks, Hospital clothing

Health: 100

Whereabouts: Hospital Room

Sleepiness: 1
[[Category: Haunting Children]]

Attempt to escape through the window

2011-06-03T23:39:02Z

Gummibear123: Created page with 'You manage to pull the glass barrier of the window up. You smell the air, deeply. You cough, for the air smells of sout and ash. Gray clouds fill they sky. You hear the child's v…'

You manage to pull the glass barrier of the window up. You smell the air, deeply. You cough, for the air smells of sout and ash. Gray clouds fill they sky. You hear the child's voice again.

''"YOU WILL PERISH IF YOU JUMP!"''

Obviously, you weren't really going to jump. You were simply going to scale down the building. You put one foot out and set it on a loose brick outside the building, followed by your other foot. You work your way down three floors before you hear something. Something bad. You hear the sound of fire, burning. You look around you and see no fire. You take a sniff and smell the fire all to clearly. Suddenly, you feel a burning sensation and look at your hand. It was burning hot and once you realized it, it hurt ten times worse. You shook you hand to get the fire off, but it only spread the fire to your other hand. You shook both your hands around, trying to get the flames off. Sadly, this means you had let go of the building, sending you falling to your death. Just before you die, you hear the child's voice whisper, mockingly.

''"You never had a chance..."''

'''YOU HAVE DIED.'''

Equipment: Textbooks, Hospital clothing

Health: 0

Whereabouts: The ground

Sleepiness: 0

HC: Look out the old window

2011-06-03T23:31:14Z

Gummibear123:

HC: Look out the old window

2011-06-03T23:29:06Z

Gummibear123: Created page with 'You walk over to the window and rest your arms on the windowsill. You quickly remove them, realizing that dust is spread across it. Looking out the window, you see that you are v…'

You walk over to the window and rest your arms on the windowsill. You quickly remove them, realizing that dust is spread across it. Looking out the window, you see that you are very high up and that there are no people around. There is a long pathway leading away from the building and into the horizon. Suddenly, you see a flash of a wrinkled, ghostly child's face appear right in front of you. It screams at you.

''"OPEN THE BOOK! OPEN THE BOOK!"''

After that, it disappears as if nothing was ever there. You look back over to the black book, hesitantly. you can suddenly hear a faint crash from outside the room. It sounded not too far from your room, but the crash must have been awfully loud for you to hear it that well.

What will you do? Do you:
*[[Investigate the crash]]
*[[Open the book]]
*[[Attempt to escape through the window]]

Equipment: Textbooks, Hospital clothing

Health: 100

Whereabouts: Hospital Room

Sleepiness: 98

HC: Explore the room you are currently in

2011-06-03T23:22:35Z

Gummibear123:

HC: Explore the room you are currently in

2011-06-03T23:21:50Z

Gummibear123: Created page with 'You decide to take a look around the room you're in. It's basically like any other old hospital room, except for several broken items. There is a window to the far left of the ro…'

You decide to take a look around the room you're in. It's basically like any other old hospital room, except for several broken items. There is a window to the far left of the room. There is also a skylight on the ceiling, indicating you're on the top floor of this building. The door is old and barely attached to it's rusted hinges. Opening it would be simple. Strangely, the bed you had just gotten up from is now gone. You hear faint voices that sound somewhat like 5-year-olds whispering to you.

''"Open the book...Open the book..."''

Just as the voices silence, you notice a black book printed with strange markings lying in the middle of the room. You are certain it was not there earlier.

What should you do? Should you:
*[[HC: Look out the old window]]
*[[HC: Go out into the hallway]]
*[[HC: Open the book]]

Equipment: Textbooks, Hospital clothing

Health: 100

Whereabouts: Hospital Room

Sleepiness: 99

Haunting Children

2011-06-03T23:14:52Z

Gummibear123:

''WARNING: This story is to be based off of it's intended storyline. I will remove any edited pages that do not involve the story whatsoever. Please enjoy yourselves. Also, there is a Sleepiness Meter at the near-bottom of this page. If the meter reaches 100, you pass out in that room.''

It was a cool, fall morning. You were on your way to your university, prepared for the big test that day. Your arms swayed back and forth. Your face shining with delight and determination. You were so blinded about the fact you were going to ace the quiz, that you never noticed the red sports car driving at you. By the time you had realized what had happened, it was too late. The car smashed into you, and you blacked out in an instant.

After what seemed like hours, you woke up in a hospital room. Your eyes adjusted to the light but almost as soon as you had, the light went out. It seemed like this hospital had been abandoned for sometime now. You get out of the hospital bed and realize you are completely unharmed. Had it been a dream? If so, how did you end up in this hospital? How will you get out? Only time would tell...

First off, you:
*[[HC: Explore the room you are currently in]]
*[[HC: Look out the old window]]
*[[HC: Step out into the hallway]]
Inventory:''Textbooks, Hospital clothing

Health: 100

Whereabouts: Hospital Room

Sleepiness: 0
[[Category: Haunting Children]]

Haunting Children

2011-06-03T23:13:50Z

Gummibear123: Created page with '''WARNING: This story is to be based off of it's intended storyline. I will remove any edited pages that do not involve the story whatsoever. Please enjoy yourselves. Also, there…'

''WARNING: This story is to be based off of it's intended storyline. I will remove any edited pages that do not involve the story whatsoever. Please enjoy yourselves. Also, there is a Sleepiness Meter at the near-bottom of this page. If the meter reaches 100, you pass out in that room.''

It was a cool, fall morning. You were on your way to your university, prepared for the big test that day. Your arms swayed back and forth. Your face shining with delight and determination. You were so blinded about the fact you were going to ace the quiz, that you never noticed the red sports car driving at you. By the time you had realized what had happened, it was too late. The car smashed into you, and you blacked out in an instant.

After what seemed like hours, you woke up in a hospital room. Your eyes adjusted to the light but almost as soon as you had, the light went out. It seemed like this hospital had been abandoned for sometime now. You get out of the hospital bed and realize you are completely unharmed. Had it been a dream? If so, how did you end up in this hospital? How will you get out? Only time would tell...

First off, you:
*[[Explore the room you are currently in]]
*[[Look out the old window]]
*[[Step out into the hallway]]
Inventory:''Textbooks, Hospital clothing

Health: 100

Whereabouts: Hospital Room

Sleepiness: 0
[[Category: Haunting Children]]