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Hey I just got back here coz i havent been active for a while though. So far I cant write story without inspiration. Well I think I can move on from that except playing computer or CF.--GUY WITHOUTBALLS
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In The Worst Ways
I know trans women don't generally get treated that way in real life, but I may be injecting a bit of my own fantasy into it. I mean, the whole thing started as my fantasies so lol. Surprisingly progressive rapists and burglars. In real life trans women struggle to get practically anyone who knows to accept them as a real woman.
But they are real women, and unless it's really necessary to the story overall I'd rather not have it be a big huge thing every time I want to write a sex scene for her. The alternative is me writing Janet being beaten or tortured by the burglars for having a dick, and I don't want to do that. Not right there, at least. Maybe in another branch and done by someone else.
As for your friend, I would ask them what to refer to them as. I'm betting she/her but it's better to ask and be sure. Then try to use those pronouns as often as possible as long as it's safe, even if they're not around. Like unless you would be revealing their transgender status to someone they want to keep it a secret to, it's best to keep using it. It may take some getting used to but it's worth it to show them you care enough about them.
They'll likely face many people who, often intentionally, will call them by the wrong pronouns. Having someone consistently use the right pronouns and name is a huge boost in confidence.
I'll see what I can do for the cafe next. I've kinda been doing things as they occur to me :v --In The Worst Ways 06:21, 26 May 2016 (UTC)
Try not to think of it in terms of you feeling like a guy. Think of it like, you feel like yourself, a woman, but your birth certificate says male, your parents raised you as a boy, you have a penis (which is not always a problem, plenty of trans women don't have a problem having a penis, it's other people that have the problem with it,) and unless you got the hint early and everybody was okay with it, you've seen a guy in the mirror your whole life. There's a lot more to it but that's the gist.
You want to look how you feel, you want people to acknowledge that you're a woman, you don't want to have the same conversations, the same questions every time someone finds out, you just went to be you, but all of this is difficult to accomplish.
Sorry about Marie's story. I kind of used her branch as a dumping ground for my darker thoughts for some reason. I was remembering pretty dark times and wanted to get those out. I was considering adding a couple of other characters once I've got more done on the ones I have on there. I have some ideas. Happier ones. Keep an eye out for those :v. --In The Worst Ways 06:53, 26 May 2016 (UTC) p.s. the answer is yes, I am, but don't tell anyone plz?.
I've considered getting a keyboard to use for my tablet, but the problem is we never have more than a couple dollars to spare. That, and my charger (which wasn't made for a tablet) uses the USB port and isn't very effective, so I have to keep it plugged in most of the time. If I had a replacement for the original charger this wouldn't be a problem, though.
It would only be a quick fix, but I would swing it if I could. Having a laptop would open up a lot more options even if it was a cheap one, and I'm hoping I can get one soon, or get the one I have to function as more than a paperweight. This tablet just generally refuses to work for making digital art, for instance.
The rules thing, I mean I can kinda understand because I guess they didn't even have a rules page for a while? But me personally I always try to find out just what's allowed somewhere before I put something up. I hate running into situations where I'm breaking rules or just generally fudging everything because I didn't know. Ran into that with the DeviantArt account I had made a long time ago for my explicit art. Which they don't allow. :v
Sorry. -- In The Worst Ways 20:52, 27 May 2016 (UTC)
Bluetooth. So, I have a wireless mouse that I wanted to see if it would pair with my tablet. Idk if the mouse is bluetooth or not but I figured I'd give it a shot. Well, after searching all through my settings, it looks like my tablet might not even be capable of Bluetooth. So, that's out I guess.
Having a chat based cyoa does sound like an interesting idea! --In The Worst Ways 19:36, 29 May 2016 (UTC)
Well, the back of it says Nextablet and I think it's android 4.1. Beyond that I'm not sure what information is important.
I've seen some terrible messages but I've never seen any quite that bad that I could still sorta tell what they were saying. I've seen some that were probably drunk at the time that, they were clearly typing something but fuck if I was ever going to learn what it was.
Makes me think of those ciphers where you're supposed to read one letter as another letter, like cddc actually means abba or ere means bob, but if they did it with whole words instead of letters. Like idk fish means cat and tree means deepthroat or something.
If you don't want to copy mine because you don't want to copy someone then it doesn't matter to me if you do. If you don't want to copy it because it's a huge pain in the ass then that's perfectly understandable, there's probably so many easier ways to do that and I just don't know them lol.
I was initially going to do mine so it looked more like AIM or YIM, which was kind of how it ended up looking the first way I did it, but your words in bubbles gave me the idea to try to make it look more like Facebook Messenger app, so I fiddled with that til it looked more or less like I wanted. Thank you for sharing that :v. -- In The Worst Ways 04:51, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
Thank you for making the template! I'll keep using that format for that conversation/that character's branch whenever chat comes up, but I think I may try something else for other characters/conversations.
I'm thinking something more along the lines of a box that looks kinda like a yahoo messenger window, especially if I can make it scroll vertically within the box. That seems like it'd be easier to reuse/make a template of, though I've never made one before personally.
I really need to get back to writing in general but IRL stuff's been on my mind. Rent stuff. -- In The Worst Ways 18:33, 6 June 2016 (UTC)
I will keep the offer in mind :v. I'm looking into a bunch of different things to hopefully keep this from happening again in the future. I completely understand not having anything left by the end of the month, not just from our current situation, pretty much my entire life has been like that with my family. We moved across the country because we couldn't afford the house we were living in. We were never able to keep a house longer than like a couple years, and we kept moving back in with my grandparents.
But yeah, if we can get through this month we're going to do everything we can to keep it from getting to this point again. Editing/proofreading definitely falls within the realm of things I can do, thank you for offering :v. -- In The Worst Ways 17:49, 13 June 2016 (UTC)
Thank you :v.
I was actually coming on here to message you. I've been thinking about the problem with the chat bubbles. I was wondering if wrapping them in a frame like a table or something might give a rightmost side for the bubble to stick to? Something kind of like the other chat window I was working on, perhaps, or at least the part that scrolls?
I barely know how to use templates, but I was thinking if there was a way to put like a template within a template or something it might be possible? Thought I'd bring it up and see what you thought. -- In The Worst Ways 04:26, 20 June 2016 (UTC)
You probably saw, but I sorted the problem with the bubbles out and made a phone template to go with them! I'm thinking about reusing the code from the bubble templates and making two more universal chat bubble templates, though.
The bubbles were pretty much entirely you, I just added some bits to make it do the thing. I didn't see any solutions for making the jc101 bubble stick to the right without ignoring the rest of the page, and only expand inward instead of off the right, so I had to make it float right, then force it to stack properly with the harukosama bubbles by giving them both a margin in the opposite direction.
It kinda feels like a cheap solution but it's the only thing I could get to work. The first time I applied the float right, all the bubbles just kind of mixed together.
Then I spent way too long obsessing over the phone template until it got to what it looks like now. Once I was done with everything I spent several minutes just scrolling the chat window up and down and giggling to myself.
I made the phone and my other chat window template to more or less be usable by whoever. Maybe it'd work for if you wanted to go with your idea for a story with texts? One thing I'm curious about though is, I only know how the phone template looks on mobile, I'm hoping the desktop version doesn't have an annoying scroll bar or anything.
I've been obsessed with coding these things since I started figuring things out but I still haven't gotten back into the swing of writing yet. Thank you for showing me it was possible to do more than just put text on a page here. Once I do get back to writing, there's so much more I still want to do. -- In The Worst Ways 06:15, 22 June 2016 (UTC) (P.S. Sorry I'm rambling. I'm just really excited.)
Thanks! I didn't know there were scroll bars in the chatroom template but that doesn't matter as much. I made the box to scroll but I didn't know if the scroll bars would be different on desktop or not. I need to rewrite the context but I was kind of going for a chat window like Yahoo Messenger and I made sure the message field and the "typing" field would scroll if the text got too long instead of stretching.
I was more worried about the smartphone text template, but I used basically the same scrolling window code for that as I used for the messenger window so I assume there is one there too. On my screen, the scroll bar is barely a sliver that only appears when I scroll up and down so it's not obtrusive, which I guess is what I'm more worried about especially with the chat bubbles on the right side. Thank you for letting me know what that looked like :v -- In The Worst Ways 09:10, 22 June 2016 (UTC)
Go right ahead :v. I was kinda hoping more people would use the templates than just me, though I might still change some things about the templates, so let me know if I break something if I do?
I'm going to experiment with a couple things. Since I know I can use {{{}}} to change parts of the code itself, I'm going to look into allowing the person using the template to change things like color schemes for the chat window and font, and I may be able to make a universal chat bubble that you can put to the left or right as needed as well as changing the color of the text and the bubble. Could make things much easier and more versatile to use :v-- In The Worst Ways 19:37, 28 June 2016 (UTC)
Sorry the new text bubble template is a bit complicated to use. I tried to make it as streamlined as possible, as in people using it not having to out in a bunch of code themselves, while still giving as many options as needed, but there were some things I just couldn't figure out how to simplify.
I might have been able to replace the short margin by making it the same variable as the alignment, so if it was set to float left or right then the 5px margin would be on the same side, but I couldn't think of a way to make the 20px margin automatically set to the opposite side, and if I removed it entirely it would just be stacked bubbles of mostly the same width which would defeat the purpose of designing them that way in the first place.
If you went to mess with the code or make the names of the variables less wordy you can totally do that though, I just gave them the first names that came to mind.
A yeah I made it so the bubbles can be told to either float left or float right, and hopefully the part of the code that says "clear: both;" will make it so that even if the bubbles are put in a larger field they won't float next to each other and I won't have to change the margins again if I try to do something like that. That's how that's supposed to work, anyway, but I'm not sure if I did it right.
I hate the 20 minute rule. It seems mostly unnecessary for it to be that long, and I haven't been able to successfully link anything at all because of it. My session keeps timing out before I can submit the captcha. Which is gonna suck if I ever want to start my planned idea for a more point and click type cyoa (not that I need another unfinished project but yknow.)
I did have an idea though for your emoticons and I was thinking it might work better for you than for me because the one website I've found that does technically work on mobile is still absolutely terrible on mobile, but there are websites that make pixel art into CSS code, you just have to figure out how to restructure the code so it works on this site. But it should be more or less the same structure as that space invader pixel art object you added to my talk page when it's done. You could make pixel art emoticons then use them instead of external images. And you can probably make those into a template, too.
I spent probably 6 hours making that phone and getting the bubbles to do what I wanted the first time around. Probably more since then. Like I'm sure you'd have figured all of this out too if you spent several hours doing virtually nothing but poking at it until it worked, but I'm sure you have other things going on in your life, and you've actually been doing other things around the site. Meanwhile, I have things I probably should be doing, but I fixate on anything but what I need to be doing instead.
I'm glad I've learned so much, and maybe it'll apply to other ends later, but the fact that I spent so much concentrated time and effort learning how to code these things for choose your own smut isn't something I feel particularly proud of lol.
However you decide to proceed with your text project, best of luck :v -- In The Worst Ways 07:09, 29 June 2016 (UTC) (P.S. sorry for such a long message.)
kushagragour.in/lab/picssel-art/ this one was the one i found that worked for pixels. The table smiley you put in my talk page, idk why but it's weirdly stretched vertically. The tool at this link puts out a code that looks a lot like that space invader you put on my talk page except using px instead of em. I don't have the patience for it because the input box is tiny and it doesn't respond if I zoom into it, so I have to be zoomed out to do everything. Would be different if I were on a computer, though. I was going to use it for something else.
I was thinking about using chyoa as well, and I might do so in the future, but at first I came here because chyoa had rules against what I had in mind for writing. I came here initially to write my ideas for Marie, and chyoa has rules against some of the things I had planned.
I don't just enjoy writing and art. If I'm not doing or haven't done something creative in some way I feel like I'm wasting my time. Even though half the time I can't will myself to even pick up my sketchbook. I don't think I'm a very good artist yet, or writer, but I keep trying because I feel like I need to, even if I never finish anything.
Writing here was a bit of a big step for me because prior to this I barely shared any of my work anywhere. Mostly because I never finish anything, though this medium kind of favors unfinished works, it would seem.
I used to play a lot of videogames, before my laptop died, before I moved and had to leave a ps3 behind. Not that I really got to use the ps3 all that much while I was there, other people kept hogging it. I'd kill to play fallout. Any fallout. Even 1 and 2.
Lately I've been stuck with Pixel Dungeon (which I both recommend playing and staying as far away from as possible. It's addictive and frustrating as hell.) and the basketball mini game that Facebook messenger has. I had fallout shelter but after a while that kinda becomes just, the same thing over and over.
For what it's worth, I haven't really noticed anything wrong with the way you write that I myself as a native English speaker wouldn't do. And I don't know any Chinese at all so you're a leg up on me there.
I'm going to bed though. I'm dead tired and I plan to do stuff tomorrow. I hope you have a good day! Sorry for the long message again. -- In The Worst Ways 08:39, 29 June 2016 (UTC)
Teejay
E-mail sent. I was offline all day today, just now had a chance to pop on.
You. You are my dirty nerdy girl. *blows kiss* -- Teejay
I know zilch about programming. Strictly an applications guy.
How many computer programmers does it take to change a light bulb joke?
100. 1 to change the joke, and 99 to submit "How many programmers does it take to change a light bulb? Incorrect, that is a hardware problem." -- Teejay
Email replied to. -- Teejay
At least they tried, and despite a few typos, I thought they did a reasonable job. It's not the best I've ever read, but it's not anywhere near the worst either. -- Teejay
You could tell that the author was young and male. But with a bit more practice, they'll learn what words to avoid and their writing will mature.
It took me a few years to get it down. This was my first successful effort: www.literotica.com/s/alexandra-1
It's not easy to write from a woman's perspective if you're male, but it is doable. -- Teejay
How about "The Best New Breasts"? -- Teejay
I don't know if I have such a hat, but I'll try.
"The Breast New Thing!" "Perfect For Breast Men!" "New Discovery -- Stay Abreast!" -- Teejay
I'll post one more option for The Exhibitionist, and hope it cheers you up. And I'll beam over nice thoughts. -- Teejay
Glad to hear it. I'll still send over nice thoughts. -- Teejay
Send the rain over here, we could use it. :) -- Teejay
Just reading that link made ME want to slice that teacher's throat. I can't stand when authority figures (of any gender) use their position to abuse vulnerable minors. -- Teejay
I know it's real. And you've been through things I don't even want to imagine. I hope you always have a loving, caring partner from now on who can help you keep what happened quelled. -- Teejay
Just read what you posted in reply to Fredhot16. And now I feel really honored. You know very well why.
P.S. -- I think you're a beautiful person. And that has nothing to do with your looks (although you are nice looking.) You've been through so much, and somehow emerged without being totally shattered. You're a terrific writer and an amazing an courageous human being. Like I've said before, I wish you and your husband and child many years of happiness together as a family. -- Teejay
I have not played any of the Fallout games.
I read your blog, remember? I know the horrors you experienced.
If I had met you while you were in high school, I would have taken you in and gotten you clean and sober. Or at least done everything possible to do so. I actually did that for the daughter of a friend when she went through her very rough high school years (both her parents were strung out on drugs.) This particular person is about 2-3 years older than you.
Like I said, you're amazing. And awesome. I wouldn't wish what you went through on my worst enemy if I had one. Any you came through it, surviving somehow. -- Teejay
Sticking to the questions you asked: you did a fantastic job of writing that. I can't write 1/10 that well. (I suppose you're particularly good at writing scenes like that because you can draw on actual memories.) -- Teejay
I see you're reviewing stories. What do you think of this one? :)
http://www.editthis.info/create_your_own_story/A_Day_At_The_Races
-- Teejay
If you want a nice, short, sane adult story to review to take your mind off The Devil's Daughter, I recommend A Big Ugly Story. -- Teejay
Your review was quite accurate. And a description of exactly what I was aiming for -- realistic physical descriptions, quick on the sex since it is in the Adult stories section. Glad I achieved my goal, even if my work on the story petered out relatively quickly. -- Teejay
Yes, there is feedback on the review. Unless you meant your review of the End of the World, in which case, i agree with your review. For my feedback on your review of my story see the comment just above this one. -- Teejay
I would not dare to insist you do anything, but I would suggest that your next story review by the completed adult story "Megan". -- Teejay
Whew! I'm finally done moving. Now I can get back online. I missed you. -- Teejay
Thank you. I'll like it a lot better once everything is unpacked and installed. :) -- Teejay
117
Hey there, got your message on my talk. Thanks for the compliments, didn't think anyone was reading, it made my day. Just remember, when you read my stories; it doesn't have to end in sex :D Do you think you could leave a link or something on my story where I went wrong? I got lost trying to find the correct story branch that I was looking for. -- 117 P.S: Still getting used to messaging people on here. 26 May 2016
There we go. I've edited it and I think that's everything. Thanks for looking out. --117 27 May 2016
Platypus
The whole pink dildo thing makes me think of the thirteen-year-olds in science class snickering because the teacher said 'Uranus'. Yes, I think this one is very young.
The idea of an invisible story is kind of amusing, though. --Platypus 16:43, 26 May 2016 (UTC)
That penis is between you & Zenclair. I'm not touching it. --Platypus 09:57, 27 May 2016 (UTC)
Your fantasy is no stranger than many of the fantasies that make up SSR, and it's possibly more normal than many. I'm sure I can find a place in SSR where it could be worked in. --Platypus 15:36, 1 June 2016 (UTC)
You new review idea looks like it's got potential, especially since the old reviewer seems to have permanently retired. --Platypus 15:46, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
I've never played any of the Fallout games, although I was in a D&D campaign where we had to save Harry Potter from the threat of Nuka-Cola, with some help from the Men In Black. --Platypus 16:55, 16 June 2016 (UTC)
Thanks for the heads up about Life of a 13 year old. I'd rather not be the site censor, but I suppose someone has to be. And the whole idea of a uterus-piercing path sounds pretty vile. --Platypus 11:26, 29 June 2016 (UTC)
Fredhot16
You might want to sit down and get comfortable. I know we haven' talked in about a month so here's a month's worth of talking. (Note: This may seem incomplete but that's because my computer is a bit wonky and what I had previously wrote disappeared when I had to close the window. I'll finish it later.)
Darky:
Sex scenes: You know what...I don't necessarily DISAGREE with you.
Think I've been here too long: Hey, remember the Adult Story CYOA "Now you're a girl!"? I found myself thinking about how the potential was wasted in the story as one could easily write the guy exploring his new body and it wouldn't even be too outlandish. The thought made me realize I've been hanging around the dark sections of Create Your Own Story for too long. And yet I can't...stop...looking... P.S The sheer scale of spelling and grammar mistakes on this website is just short of "Kill myself by setting myself on fire" depressing. Nobody even tried to double check their work and fix common mistakes. Spell checking isn't hard! Ah, well, guess there's only one thing to do: I call forth the power of Grammarskull!
Too many ideas: I think the biggest problem I have is that I have too many story ideas to work on. There's about 5 CYOSs listed on my introduction page and I have about 15-17 story ideas outside of this website. The sheer amount of content I have planned for all of these ideas is truly staggering. That's why I haven't been able to pull my weight on the collaboration with Teejay over Anime School. Also, this is the month of Ramadan so I won't be able to touch any of the Adult CYOSs until July 7 or, at the very most, July 10. Edit: Heh. You really want to compare? Just say the word.
Anime School:
Common descriptions in CYOS: I've noticed that common breast descriptions are either of the buxom variety or they are commonly described as "small and perky". Are...are small and perky breasts really that popular? Also, the habit of describing breasts by band width and cup size like 52D or 42B is WAY too common around here. Writing is supposed to help you imagine what's been written. Using measurements as descriptions doesn't help visualize breasts as I don't think most people could quickly imagine what the size of the chest is by knowing the bandwidth and cup size like that. I mean, if you're using measurements in a profile, that's...possibly acceptable but it doesn't do to be in the actual narration.
CYOS that needs some love: There's this CYOS called One Princess, Four Princes, Choices in the Mature Story section that's woefully without much content. Maybe you could give it some good old CYOS love?
--Fredhot16 17:23 (Louisiana Time), 9 June 2016
Well, if it makes you feel any better, I'd rather read about YOUR sexual adventures then the sexual adventures those fictional women with breasts the size of their heads. Also, I don't think they're really trying to learn how women work, just how BEWBS work. Eh, at least they're learning something. I'll give them that. Edit: and by them learning, I was forced to learn it as well! And knowing is half the battle! The other half, apparently, is lots of rampant sex. --Fredhot16 01:17 (Louisiana Time), 11 June 2016
Oh. Ah, well, you see, I wasn't really-I can see why you would think that but-come on, I don't really think that you don't have a life! You look like the coolest OG, yo! You know...just lying on the couch...in a dress, gown, negligee, whatever... presumably sleeping off a hangover...well, your "Winnie the Pooh" thing under the pillow looks kinda neat. That definitely proves you have a life! Also, how long until you get a better internet connection?--Fredhot16 15:57 (Louisiana Time), 12 June 2016
Hey! How do you know I'm not a girl, too?--Fredhot16 16:28 (Louisiana Time), 12 June 2016
Alright, 4 things:
A. Random question: who do you like, Wolverine or Cyclops?
B. Are the pictures you've put on your page pictures of you or just random pictures?
C.Hmmm. Could be a girl. May be I'm just a anthropomorphic "grill". What if I am? Would it matter?
D. You know, I think you just might be one of-scratch that, the only writer on this website I have a inkling of respect for because you're the only writer who actually CARES about her work, who's trying to write. You seem to put more effort in your writing then I've seen in 90% of adult CYOSs and for that, you have my regard.
--Fredhot16 12:44 (Louisiana Time), 14 June 2016 (Will finish later, busy at the moment.)
A. Huh. O.K, I get that. There's actually a explanation for why you might have heard of Wolverine much more. Here's the link: tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/WolverinePublicity He's the best at what he does and what he does is make gratuitous appearances to artificially hook in readers. I'm more of a Cyclops man but that's mostly because Cyclops gets so little love from fans, he's actually pretty cool, and I truly think that Wolverine is really fucking overrated. I mean, yeah, he deserves some respect but not the goddamn worship he's been getting. It's why I found Wolverine's part in X-Men: Apocalypse to be hilarious as it was basically a cameo!
B.
C. Uuuummmm...I'm not transgender. I'm just a dude trying to mess with you. I do that often in real life. Don't worry, I'll keep your secret. And yeah, I'm of the same mind on transgenders.
D. You're welcome. When Ramadan ends, I'll try to read your stuff for real. I'll be filling the discussion tabs with my comments and, I'll warn you, they may be a bit...caustic. I only mean well, though, and I'll try to be as fair as I can without seeming too harsh or too lenient.
E. Yeah, I'm a Fallout fan. I've played Fallout 3, Fallout New Vegas, (both on the PC) and Fallout 4 on the PS4. I'm currently playing New Vegas, which I'm really liking, and just starting Fallout 4. Edit: I cut out my previous statement because I realized that I didn't really remember what happened back then and I couldn't read your thing to be sure. But I still believe that it wouldn't really happen. It was just a mercenary and two Institute technicians. I really doubt that the Institute would waste time like that. Also, I'm afraid that my computer wouldn't let Fallout 3 play so I can't really be sure about your depiction of Moira Brown and I can't read the Wasteland Guide anyway because it's Ramadan. Look up Brown's speech about why she's doing this. It might help and even if it doesn't, it's not a bad speech. P.S. Ever thought of trying Fallout New Vegas as part of your Fallout thing? Edit: Here's Moira's speech below:
"Well, look around at the world we live in. It may be okay to you, but I've read about what it used to be like, and this isn't it. So we all need something that keeps us going, despite all the terrible things around us. For me, it's things like this book... did you ever try to put a broken piece of glass back together? Even if the pieces fit, you can't make it whole again the way it was. But if you're clever, you can still use the pieces to make other useful things. Maybe even something wonderful, like a mosaic. Well, the world broke just like glass. And everyone's trying to put it back together like it was, but it'll never come together the same way... the Wasteland Survival Guide isn't much towards that lofty goal, but it's an important one. And that's why I need your help. I don't think I can do it alone."
F. "And yes, I will be writing lots of rape scenes for it, I have been thinking about writing more of these for this site lately. Why rape? Because, you know how many stories I have read on here that the woman is raped, that make me want to scream at the author, or make me honestly a bit scared of some of the people on this site, if they actually view women the way they write? Since it is a prevalent theme in many places here, and since the fallout world would actually be a world where almost every woman would be a victim of it, I want to at least make the readers think about what it is like to be a woman in that situation. Put my readers in my shoes, so they know women are not just some random hole that exists for a penis, but are real, thinking people. That it has dramatic, traumatic effects on someone, to have their body violated. So, I write what many people on here seem to want, but my way." Go ahead. Perhaps I could direct you to some other rape scenes in other works so you could fix them? I'm unfortunately witness to more fictional rape scenes then I want to admit.
G. Erm...(clears throat) I, um, heard something about a, erm, "gangbang". (Blushes) You don't have to if you don't want but I'd like to hear about it. Not now, though. Just around the second week of July, around July 7 or 10.
H. Do swimsuits that become semi-translucent when wet exist in real life or was this a case of "pulling out of thin air for the sake of sexiness"?
I. Here's a little note about originality from TV Tropes's "So You Want To / Be Original":"The first paradox is that it is impossible to create anything truly "new". One cannot create something from nothing. Every fictional work (with a few exceptions) is based on previous works...The second paradox is to realize that unlimited creative freedom actually puts limits on one's ability to create a story. Conversely, narrowing one's creative options actually helps to make creativity unlimited...;Those who cannot remember the past are condemned to repeat it'. If you don’t see how people before you made stories, it's very likely that you will unwittingly repeat the same ideas. And even worse, you might think that you were the first to come up with those ideas." Edit: In short, --Fredhot16 13:13 (Louisiana Time), 15 June 2016
Yep. I definitely understand the average CYOS reader or at least the average CYOS writer. God, do I wish I don't. You know, sometimes I wonder, "Why? Why do I get so pissed off at Adult CYOSs? They're not actual stories, I know that they're just made for wanking so why do I care?" Four reasons: Quality concern. Concern for reputation of website. Uncomfortable reading. Love of writing. So, that's why I get so pissed off at the average Adult CYOS. When Ramadan ends, I'm going to go through a plethora of Adult CYOS and give my comments on them. I might seem a bit harsh but I ultimately mean well, for the CYOS and the website as a whole. P.S Do you mind reviewing "Escape from Syria" in the Mature Story section or "The Devil's Daughter" in the Adult Story section?--Fredhot16 11:16 (Louisiana Time), 19 June 2016
By the way, your "cum bath" fantasy isn't all that weird, even by what I've read on this website. Ever wanted to fuck a statue in a museum, try to give a BJ to cliche serial killer who just murdered your boyfriend who you were having sex with at the time, or fuck a werecat? Edit: Let me clarify, those were sexual fantasies that I had found swimming in the dark depths of the Adult CYOS section and by "werecat", I meant a guy who transformed from a human into a cat. Example: Bastet from World of Darkness. --Fredhot16 19:01 (Louisiana Time), 19 June 2016
Honestly, I think it's kinda...garbage. One of the things that piss me off is the writer's idea that seduction means flashing the guy. It's just so....you know. Simple. But hey, don't mind me. I'm just a reader with an opinion.--Fredhot16 19:01 (Louisiana Time), 19 June 2016
The statue sex comes from "Oops! You're Naked!" and from what I remember (no matter how hard I try to forget), the protagonist didn't get turned into a statue but managed to get into a threesome with a guard and the same statue she was fucking and, later on, the protagonist and the guard went to his place to fuck. And it just ends there. The protagonist, by the way, has big breasts and big hips but we know little else of what she has. I like to imagine that's all, just a talking bust and hips. It's goddamn terrifying but I'd rather be scared then bored because it's just the same thing you get in every 4 out of 5 Adult CYOSs. --Fredhot16 15:32 (Louisiana Time), 20 June 2016
Here's my two cents about "The Devil's Daughter": just as your average Adult CYOS is an exercise in hedonism, The Devil's Daughter is an exercise in depravity. --Fredhot16 15:55 (Louisiana Time), 20 June 2016
You've seen this CYOS that's been getting written a lot recently? It's called "ASOIAF Sexy Edition". --Fredhot16 15:59 (Louisiana Time), 20 June 2016
Distraction? Maybe. Don't see how it would work for someone who's right in front of you and I would expect someone trying to use their "womanly wiles" to be more subtle and more intelligent then a drunk college girl.--Fredhot16 16:24 (Louisiana Time), 20 June 2016
You mean hentai? You know, I can actually imagine The Devil's Daughter as an animated hentai but as one of the more unsettling and unholy hentais that I'd abandon once I realize what I'm getting into to. Hey, I have standards!
The bit with the doctor in Escape from Syria is a bit iffy as we didn't need the description about his...ejaculate.
Yeah, I mentioned the Bastet from World of Darkness because I was hoping you would be interested and try to look it up. You really should look up World of Darkness, it's pretty cool. There's plenty of pdfs on the internet and on Scribd.
You know, I'm not an expert on Satanism but I don't think that Satanists would approve of the protagonist's behavior. Hell, there's actually many types of Satanism like Theistic Satanism, and The Church of Satan, and the Temple of Set. None of them seem likely to enlist hedonistic monsters that try to summon real life demons by any means necessary. I don't think the writer specifies what type of Satanism the protagonist does so I actually think, from the stated goal of the protagonist and the protagonist's cruelties, that she's just enrolled in a typical evil Devil worshiping cult rather then real Satanism. You know, the type of cult that usually ends up as a C grade minor villain in a show like Supernatural or Buffy: The Vampire Slayer.
P.S Sorry for dropping The Devil's Daughter on you. I didn't know how long it was. From your notes, it looks worse then I thought from my first glance. And yet that only makes me more curious about it. Damn it.--Fredhot16 11:37 (Louisiana Time), 21 June 2016
Alright, here's another suggestion for review: The End of the World. Look up Crossed by Garth Ennis. This CYOS is inspired by it...and maybe more then "inspired". --Fredhot16 00:33 (Louisiana Time), 22 June 2016
This might seem...unusual for me to ask but would you play a card game where losing meant you had to lose a piece of clothing?--Fredhot16 10:18 (Louisiana Time), 22 June 2016
Have you ever heard of Limbo of the Lost? It's not a CYOS, it's a game. One of the greatest games ever made, if I do say so myself. --Fredhot16 20:55 (Louisiana Time), 22 June 2016
I've seen the "End of the World" review. All of your reviews, in fact. You're not doing too bad. Keep going. For your next CYOS, how about "The Life of a Medieval Princess"? It may not good but it's definitely more sane then the one you're doing right now. Sand in a vagina...for God's sake. P.S "End of the World" is more D grade in my opinion but it does have about three things above the average Adult CYOS such as "Life of a 13 Year Old": there is a story to it, it actually has some semblance of morality, and the protagonist is actually allowed to be noble, courageous, and even heroic. I gotta tel you, that is something I've learned not to expect from Adult Story CYOSs. Nothing against your review, however. I'm just a reader with an opinion, to borrow the catchphrase of an awesome reviewer named SF Debris. --Fredhot16 14:29 (Louisiana Time), 25 June 2016
So was strip poker and naked twister the only type of games you've played or have you played more games like that game where you have a conversation on the phone while having sex and you try not to give any clue that you're having sex at the moment to the person at the other end of the line? P.S. I suppose you haven't told any stories about...erm, naked twister on your blog? --Fredhot16 01:45 (Louisiana Time), 29 June 2016
Could you check on Dungeons and Dragons in the Adult CYOS section and tell me what edition it is?--Fredhot16 19:04 (Louisiana Time), 30 June 2016
Yeah, that's exactly what I needed. Thanks. So, it's about maybe a week or less until Ramadan ends. I don't how to feel about this. On the one hand, I can finally resume my calling on this website (shit-tons of edits and comments in the discussion tabs) and read your stuff. On the other hand...I know that little of the Adult CYOSs on here are worth reading even if only for erotic purposes and that I'll come back to the blasé and caustic attitude I had before Ramadan. The closest analog is, after not having food for a long time, I find a ton of horrible food and I chow it all down but soon, when I'm as full as I can be, I realize what I'm eating and don't touch until I am truly desperate. DirtyMe, I have the feeling that your stuff just might be the only adult CYOSs I'll be really reading on this website. Just five more days, at the very least. --Fredhot16 01:15 (Louisiana Time), 1 July 2016
I've heard that you may have experience with glory holes so I want to know, for my own reasons but if you ask nicely, I'll tell you, can a vagina fit on or through a glory hole?--Fredhot16 02:31 (Louisiana Time), 2 July 2016
Well. Ramadan's long over. I can now read Adult CYOSs. And I don't care about them anymore. Just...no. I just don't care. I put some serious thought into a one and I found myself wanting to take a shower. The blandness, sleaziness, and quite frankly horribleness killed any real interest I had in Adult CYOSs. Just...I don't want to endure that nonsense anymore. --Fredhot16 09:40 (Louisiana Time), 12 July 2016
Darkfry
I just wanted to thank you for the friendly help you offered me a few days ago, I am really new to writing stories in this format so it is taking me a while to get a handle on all the correct ways to link things together. It is really nice to have someone looking out for these thing. P.S. I only just figured out how to respond to a message so that's why it's taken me this long to thank you. I am really happy to take advice from people on how to do things, hope I am a good student. By the way I am not sure how the signature thing works so I hope this works... --Darkfry 13:38, 31 May 2016 (UTC)
Yes, I am over 18, I'll give some thought to your Exhibitionist story, no serious ideas right now but I am sure can think of something you would enjoy writing (; --Darkfry 08:02, 2 June 2016 (UTC)
I am not too sure how you want the option formatted, I left you an option under the link you have created on the stories front page. Hope you have fun.--Darkfry 10:36, 2 June 2016 (UTC)
That is a rather interesting piece of information, I suppose the symbolism is something I could consider working into the story, the story is supposed to be location neutral (it could be in any country), so it does need to relate to a broad variety of cultures, and things like that can add depth. I hope you are enjoying the story so far. Glad someone is reading it. :) --Darkfry 10:57, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
So I wanted some advice on a couple of things, is creating sub categories for your story an issue? Basically the story is told from 2 perspectives ie, that of Hart and Yale. I want to have a separate category for each although maintain the main category as well for each ie. each page would link to 2 categories. Would this be frowned upon? Secondly if I want to change the name of a page link, is it okay to simply copy the content from the old link into a new link and delete the content in the old link, or does that leave a mess behind for someone else to clean up? Is the a better way of moving the content? Thanks in advance. --Darkfry 19:59, 20 June 2016 (UTC) Thank you again, I am thinking of updating all my pages to have a unique identifier to the story although I must say it does bug me that in the category index page all the pages are then listed with the story header prefixed it is a pity that there isn't a way for the index to show a chosen page title. Would it be terrible to index it with a post-fix identifier, as instead of "Hyde Road - Go to next page" it was "Go to next page - Hyde Road". Is that too non-conformist of me? Anyway I think I have the subcategory thing understood now except I seemed to have some issue in getting it to list the subcategory under the correct letter in the main categories index as in I wanted it to list Hyde road - Carla Yale under C not H but I couldn't seem to get that right. Anyway main reason I want to add the subcategory is I want to create a set of pages that would basically be my background notes. I would like to have a bunch of pages that explain the world as well as bunch of random story facts that I need to keep track of while writing but don't want them to show up in the main index, but rather under the sub-index, if that isn't too confusing. I don't really want the average reader to be reading them by accident because they will have spoilers in them, but I would like them available online. I am presuming that it wouldn't be a problem for these pages only to have the subcategory as their category. Again sorry for all the questions, and thank you for taking the time to answer. I am trying to add little bit by little bit to the story so afraid it's taking me quite some time to get it all down, but I think it is getting there.--Darkfry 08:56, 27 June 2016 (UTC)
Hmm, I did try that but it isn't working the way I would have expected, when I type it like that it puts the tile of the page in the subcategory under C but in the main category the subcategory remains unchanged. So basically under Hyde Road, the page "attempt to start a conversation" is listed in A but in Hyde Road - Carla Yale it is listed under C. What I want is Hyde Road - Carla Yale. I don;t know maybe I broke something :/ I'll update all the Carla Yale pages and see if it fixes it... --Darkfry 10:12, 27 June 2016 (UTC)
Yes, I am following how it works, so it's working as intended. Unfortunately I was trying to do something slightly different so that's where the confusion is coming in I think. I think I know where I went wrong. Will get back to you in a second. --Darkfry 10:25, 27 June 2016 (UTC)
Alright, sorry I had to disappear, the world was ending, sort of. Anyway, yes I understand the whole where the category name is coming from... was a bit of a stupid from my side. The category page gets it's category name from category listed in the subcategories index page... which is obvious when I think about it... anyways thank you, you helped me understand it a lot better.--Darkfry 14:31, 27 June 2016 (UTC)
Other
I'm following basically the same rules as you but I decided to work from Z to A under the assumption a lot of people start moving things to the pit and give up way before they get to the end. I did find a story from 2011 with less than 20 pages somewhere under 'Y' I think. -- Hellspawn 9:00 29 May 2016 GMT
Hey, I just wanted to say thank you for editing may talk/about me what so ever. I m just getting started with this whole "wiki" thing. ... And to prove it I nearly messed up your talk page. nearly. --Zehir 16:44, 6 June 2016 (UTC)--
Thanks for the notes and advice. Very much appreciated. Really wasn't looking to get into a flame war with anyone, but also would expect more of a welcome to the site than what I got. Hoping to simply move on and not be chased out. --Bardo75 02:51, 29 June 2016 (UTC)
When you get a chance, please check out the new story I've started on. It's called Just Say Yes. Clearly just at the beginning stages, but would really appreciate your feedback. --Bardo75 21:43, 5 July 2016 (UTC)
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I read some of your stuff. You seem like a fun girl.
Like I said, I'm attracted to you either way. I know a sex site we could possibly chat, if you're interested. Or if you're scared I'm some weirdo, that's cool too.
