User talk:Ollie Williams

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Revision as of 23:42, 24 January 2010

Appreciate the work you did on War and Sex. It’s always fun to have another user add to your story. Good job with the troll alliance story by the way, had similar idea actually. And about the Category link, no worries, I think we all forget that one the first time we edit hehehe.

--Fletcher Peninsula

Indeed. The occasional lapse is quite acceptable, especially on your first time posting. Just don't make a habit of forgetting. And welcome aboard! --Platypus 19:41, 24 January 2010 (UTC)

Glad that you like my story, hope my ridiculously slow pace doesn’t bother you too much ;). As for the questions.

1 Yes, if you decide to become a regular contributor it would be the best thing that could happen to the story. Another writer is always welcomed.

2 Adria is a good name; thank god you came along so I wouldn’t be forced to come up with another name for a character. The whole name giving thing is probably the hardest part in my book. I mean Helena Farmer? Naming a character after their occupation is just lazy writing hahaha.

3 Don’t worry too much on introducing new plot twist. This is a CYOA after all. Resolving and connecting different authors plot twists are part of the fun! The part with Faust’s slaves becoming loyal to him is a natural addition to the story in my eyes so go for it. However, how will the princess react to his slaves? I always imagine her to be a bit of a royal bitch in the bedroom really.

4 About the father… eh SPOILERS… I guess.

My idea is that the father was serving that woman on the statue and she told him to kill Faust (Also shouldn’t I have given the king a name by now?). The father had a clash of loyalties between the woman on the statue and his loyalty to his people and his son but decided to follow the woman’s orders and kill his son. In the balcony arc Faust realizes the betrayal and promptly kills his father. However if you decide to go after the princess then Faust doesn’t know about this.

Now think about it, why was Faust ordered to go alone? Greeting the delegation alone is an extremely stupid tradition no doubt. Maybe the bandits where actually mercenaries? Maybe they were paid to attack to delegation and Faust at the same time. But maybe they got reckless and charged prematurely? Here comes the big plot twist, I imagine the king committing suicide when he found out his son survived. He has a troubled consciousness you see, he was happy when Faust killed him and displayed doubts when he killed Faust in another story option. When he finds out his son survived he commits suicide because he cannot chose between the woman on the statue and his son anymore. His death also means Faust becomes king. That was my plan however is not really perfect. It could potentially mean a shift from individual heroics to more of a army leading story (Going to war with Hystardium and all that) But that could actually be an improvement if done right. But that could easily be avoided by a few other plot twists I guess.

You can of course deviate from this plan if you like to. --Fletcher Peninsula