What's the use...

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Current revision as of 15:04, 22 November 2013

Authors note: Speech Thought Action/Narrative

Zachary... you have three seconds to move, or I'll take your silence as a forfeit... threatened the man, who was smiling

And I assure you...

This! Is one game you don't want that to happen in...

Damn it, I don't have a choice... or do I?

Come on Zach! Think! Think damn you!

3!'

The Teacher raises his hand, signalling for the armed soldier to his right to pass his side arm to the Teacher.

What about the others out there... do they need me? Would they need me?

2!

He raises the gun and takes aim squarely at your head.

Kill or be killed... time to choose...

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 Authors note:
-'''Action'''
+'''Speech'''
 ''Thought''
-Speach
+Action/Narrative
-Zachy... you have three seconds to move, or I'll take your silence as a forfeit...
+'''Zachary... you have three seconds to move, or I'll take your silence as a forfeit...'''
-'''said the man smiling'''
+threatened the man, who was smiling
-and I assure you...
+'''And I assure you...'''
-This! Is one game you don't want that to happen in...
+'''This! Is one game you don't want that to happen in...'''
 ''Damn it, I don't have a choice... or do I?''
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 ''Come on Zach! Think! Think damn you!''
-!
+''3!'''
-'''The Teacher raises his hand alerting the armed soldier to his right to give him his side arm'''
+The Teacher raises his hand, signalling for the armed soldier to his right to pass his side arm to the Teacher.
 ''What about the others out there... do they need me? Would they need me?''
-!
+'''2!'''
-'''He raises the gun and takes aim'''
+He raises the gun and takes aim squarely at your head.
 ''Kill or be killed... time to choose...''