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Fred is a teenager mage (at first he can't cast any spell, but now he can) that escape from his home to explore Glacia. Everything was alright at first, but suddenly it changed when the family wants him back (the family hid him from the outside since he can't cast any spell, it makes lots of people don't know if he is a member of the Fiedlerson). He doesn't want to go back to the house where he was kept away from the outside. It causes "the cat and mouse game" between the family and him. | Fred is a teenager mage (at first he can't cast any spell, but now he can) that escape from his home to explore Glacia. Everything was alright at first, but suddenly it changed when the family wants him back (the family hid him from the outside since he can't cast any spell, it makes lots of people don't know if he is a member of the Fiedlerson). He doesn't want to go back to the house where he was kept away from the outside. It causes "the cat and mouse game" between the family and him. | ||
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+ | It should be evil sounding. This is my suggestions: | ||
+ | *Seven Deadly Soldiers | ||
+ | *The Exiles | ||
[[User: Mewfeuille]] 19 Feb | [[User: Mewfeuille]] 19 Feb | ||
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+ | Hey, I'm QueenPrisme and find your story very intriguing and would love to help it along. Also, I've never posted a comment so i'm really not sure if I'm doing this correctly. April 13 |
Current revision as of 15:12, 13 April 2016
I've copied your pitch onto the Idea Pitches page. --Platypus 19:47, 11 January 2014 (UTC)
I want to help you grow your The Twin Empires story. It's so interesting. I hope you accept my request. Thanks. User: Mewfeuille
Okay. User: Mewfeuille 7 Feb
Uh, I'm sorry but I still don't have any. If you don't mind, tell me yours first. User: Mewfeuille 9 Feb
That sounds good. Mmm, I found some name that sounds good in it.
"The Ten Scroll" (consist of 1 member of each famous mage family in total of 10 members)
"The Mysterious Cult"
What do you think?
User: Mewfeuille 11 Feb
It's okay if Raiou and Ritz will interact with Fred, but maybe there will be a difference between your "Fred" and my "Fred". I think I need to add chapter intervals too, but maybe in different way. I found some family names which probably sound good.
Seyfert, Connelly, Van Ballegooijen, Killion, Hanselman, Auguste, Wiebold, Brenton, Dunstan, Weissborn, Grodberg (Or maybe you can think another names)
But I still can't think the specialty of those families. Oh, if you have finished working on the outline and name of cities and their location and direction for the continent of Glacia, can I have a look at it? User: Mewfeuille 12 Feb
Fred is nice, outgoing, and sensitive person. User: Mewfeuille 13 Feb
Sorry for answering late. Here they are:
Forest:
- Jade Forest (West of Landen, near east gate of Zuellni)
- The Forest of Thorns (South of Elfead, near the junction)
- Achyn Forest (Between Satera and Shayford)
- Withered Woods (Between Albarea and Crossbell)
- Hayady Woods (Between Soddon and Rolent)
- Rotted Woods (Between Reinford and Albarea)
- Ilanwrtyw Forest (South of Shayford, near north gate of Zuellni)
- Priddy Woods (West of Zuellni, near west gate of Zuellni)
- Ravenwood Forest (Between Lenheim and Carmichael)
Cave: Known as "The Quadruplets"
- Northern Hole (Somewhere in Carmichael)
- Western Den (Somewhere in Crossbell)
- The Ancient Cave of Rolent/ Eastern Cave (Somewhere in Rolent)
- The Haunted Hideout/ Southern Hideout (Somewhere in Cray)
I haven't found any good names for passageways, sorry. How about making Zuellni lays on the top of mountain? It's better to use 2nd point of view.
User: Mewfeuille 17 Feb
Okay. I'll work on Fred's story. Sorry for having no much progress, but I'm very busy right now. I hope I can make 1 or 2 pages per day.
User: Mewfeuille 18 Feb
Fred is a teenager mage (at first he can't cast any spell, but now he can) that escape from his home to explore Glacia. Everything was alright at first, but suddenly it changed when the family wants him back (the family hid him from the outside since he can't cast any spell, it makes lots of people don't know if he is a member of the Fiedlerson). He doesn't want to go back to the house where he was kept away from the outside. It causes "the cat and mouse game" between the family and him.
It should be evil sounding. This is my suggestions:
- Seven Deadly Soldiers
- The Exiles
User: Mewfeuille 19 Feb
Hey, I'm QueenPrisme and find your story very intriguing and would love to help it along. Also, I've never posted a comment so i'm really not sure if I'm doing this correctly. April 13