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Please, let actions happen.  Don't begin to start to let actions happen.  Use ''began to'' to signify ongoing actions, such as ''it began to rain'', or interrupted actions, such as ''I began to open the door, but then...''

Instead of ''Soon, your balls start feeling full and you begin to spray your seed down her throat and into her stomach. "Thank you very much sir! My husband has a dick like a baby, he's never fucked me this good." she says'', how's about ''Soon, your balls feel full and you spray your seed down her throat and into her stomach. "Thank you very, much sir! My husband has a dick like a baby.  He's never fucked me this good," she says''.

Yes, also remember to use commas and period properly. You may want to review [[punctuation with dialogue]].--[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 15:32, 8 March 2015 (UTC)

- Thank you, all advice is appreciated. [[User:Maniac|Maniac]]

The penis is not a gland.  The head, however, may be referred to as the ''glans''.

Asking involves questions.  When someone barks an order, they are not asking.  They are telling or ordering.

And again, try to watch the excessive ''began to''s and make sure to use necessary commas and apostrophes. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 20:32, 12 March 2015 (UTC)

The penis is STILL not a gland! --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 17:33, 9 April 2015 (UTC)