User talk:Freds shadow

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I've enjoyed your writing a lot as well! I think your style comes off a little fantastical, less "believable" maybe, but it's still plenty of fun. I'm very much into slow-burn teasing and denial and embarrassment so, if you're comparing our writing styles, I suppose you come off a little rushed. But part of the process for me is that I like feeling that what I write has some sort of basis in reality, some possibility of actually happening, however unlikely. Flawed reasoning and terrible decisions aside of course! :P But that goes hand in hand with my love of ENF and truth or dare and "good intention" characters.

If you're looking for advice, my only suggestion would be to keep Steph a bit more innocent. Having her react with less certainty should help slow down the progression of your plot. But that might just be my personal preference exerting itself. Otherwise, just continue to have fun with it! You write very well and it's always a fun read! Maxine 07:31, 26 July 2015 (UTC)

You should add to your steph story line it cuts out at the part where the doorbell rings after she fucked mark and the doorbell rang it's really good and you should continue it.