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User talk:Heyoeveryone

Lovetoread — Sun, 07 Oct 2012 07:51:34 GMT

Lovetoread:

== YouTube ==

Hey, I've got most of chapter one of Remember recorded and it's turning out really good. I'm thinking I can upload chapter one by itself, and then say "to be continued" after the last choice leading to chapter 2. I saw on your user page that you don't have much time for writing right now, but do you know when you'll have a chance to work on Chapter 2? I'm dying myself to find out how it will end!
I'll post the link to chapter one here when it's uploaded (hopefully within a week). [[User:AlexCW|AlexCW]] September 12 , 2012

Great, I was thinking of using Remember because of the large amount of dialogue and the fact that the story catches your attention from the first page. I'll probably record it in about a week. - [[User:AlexCW|AlexCW]] August 26, 2012

Hey, I've been a fan of this site for awhile and had the idea to adapt some of the stories to youtube. Essentially they would be audiobooks of the stories where you would make your decision at the end of the video, leading you to the next part of the story. I'm an experienced actor, so would voice act them myself. I think that done properly, these could be very successful on YouTube. I think your stories are incredibly well written. If this is something you are interested in, do I have your permission to use one of your stories? [[User:AlexCW|AlexCW]]

== Congratulations! ==

Hey, I can't help but notice that you've finished quite a few stories. On this site, waaaay too many writers start things and never finish them '''cough'''''I'mguiltyofthatsometimes'''''cough'''. I've read through Surviving Today 2, and I actually thought it was pretty cool. You've got a nice style, and a good imagination to fuel it. Keep up the good work! --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 11:48, 15 September 2011 (UTC)

It's good to know that you enjoyed "Megan". I love getting feedback, and as for your question for the "What If?" situation, I could perhaps do that. It might take some time, however.

Right now I've got the first page of "The Diary Of Bethany Cross" in the works, and after that I might get some work done on [[What Lies Beneath|WLB]]. After WLB and "The Diary", I'm planning on a chapter-by-chapter story that would unite the characters of "Rescue", "Megan", "WLB", and "The Diary" (Dead characters will still appear. Not sure how to explain it yet, but it'll happen) and thrust them into the potential end of the world.

The idea of a "What If?" version is a bit interesting, though. I'm wondering if you mean if Megan didn't kill herself, kill Vanessa, or if Vanessa killed Megan (which happens in one of the pages)? It could be fun to play around with all three of those ideas, really. Believe it or not, I've still got at least six kills to work in eventually in a later update - the gun and power-tools kills - I added the ending in so I could consider it "finished" for now and potentially get it to be the featured story and get it some exposure. As of now, War Pigs is still the featured (and it's quite good if you haven't read it yet), but I can certainly hope. xD --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 06:29, 17 September 2011 (UTC)

Apologies for getting back to you so late, but I think the first and third ideas could work out really well. The first would depend mostly on where the story goes with the idea you started with, but it could work. Reviews would be pretty good, too. Good reviews help motivate writers and constructive criticism helps them improve. The second idea reminds me a bit of Community, though. Which - don't get me wrong - is awesome on its own. Community friggin' rules. It might be harder to get to work, but that could be done too. I guess all the ideas sound good to me. --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 05:29, 20 September 2011 (UTC)

Hey, just saw the review, and thanks! Always awesome to get a well written review on something I wrote. As for the story only having one (true) ending, I understand completely. I actually have been toying with other endings (besides the one page where Vanessa kills Megan), including things like Vanessa killing Megan and surviving, Megan wimping out at the end and going home, Megan getting arrested, and stuff like that in my head. As you stated in the review, it's not finished yet, so there's time for me to add those in later. Oh, and I saw you said you only read one of the brutal kills. Which one? In a strange, morbid way I want to know which one it was so I can tell if I wrote it well.

Uh, anyways, besides all of that, thanks again. I'm thinking of doing my own reviews soon, and one of yours shall be in the queue. --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 22:28, 7 October 2011 (UTC)

Oh, I've actually been periodically checking "Remember" from time to time. Liking it so far. The death-gas is pretty cool, and the story so far is intriguing. --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 00:09, 20 October 2011 (UTC)

==review area==
Having a section for story reviews sounds like a good idea. Writers usually like feedback, especially constructive criticism. I appreciate being invited to join the review process, but it all depends on how much time I find to work on such a thing. I already do a lot of grammatical and stylistic editing on the stories that I've contributed the most to, as well as doing various functions that are reserved for sysops. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 02:02, 21 September 2011 (UTC)

The two possibilities I've thought of for a review area are
*a link on the Main Page to a Review Page, like the way there's the link to the Featured Story area.
*adding third column in the story section after Name and Status that links to a review section for that story.

I'm still considering which idea I like better. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 01:10, 22 September 2011 (UTC)

TheElderOnes also suggested doing a combination of both. It sounds like that might be the way to go. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 23:11, 22 September 2011 (UTC)

== Re: I Hope you feel slightly special! ==

I don't mind the bad things you said- but how dare you not include a preview and make the score appear bigger like in the rest of your reviews!

Anyways, good review. I know I probably should focus on one character's story before moving on to another, but I get bored if I stay with just one of them for too long.

It's kind of ironic you would like Karen's story the best, because she's my least favorite of the five. Different strokes, I guess.

Thanks for the review. --[[User:AgentVincent|AgentVincent]] 20:28, 4 October 2011 (UTC)

The problem with William is I'm not certain what choices the player will have to make while he's in Michael's custody.

I have the main ending for the story planned out, I'm just trying to decide what will happen between Michael and William that will cause them to oppose each other. --[[User:AgentVincent|AgentVincent]] 23:38, 7 October 2011 (UTC)

Actually, that's similar to what I had planned for Michael to go after William. If you're interested in how the final act is supposed to go down between the five main characters (the true ending), I'll post it. --[[User:AgentVincent|AgentVincent]] 03:48, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

Here's a brief summary. Bear in mind that these events only occur if the reader goes down a certain path.

William uses his powers to kill Michael's friends (it's ironic that you would emphasize "accidentally," because he's mostly in control by this point in the story).

William and Michael have their first showdown in a warehouse. At first, William's powers give him the edge, but he soon realizes that Michael is too much for him to handle. Michael savagely beats him in retaliation for the deaths of his friends.

Vincent arrives at Karen's home to kill her. Rebecca also arrives to kill Vincent. The two beat each other senseless, until another figure appears, and then things really go to hell.

As for the true ending, I'll just let you know that all of the endings are named after songs (hint, hint). --[[User:AgentVincent|AgentVincent]] 18:05, 12 October 2011 (UTC)

It's not Karen. I could go further, but that would spoil the final fates of the characters. As for the songs, they were all made before 2000.

I would like to hear what you think should happen to the five leads and their survival odds. --[[User:AgentVincent|AgentVincent]] 21:36, 16 October 2011 (UTC)

== Remember ==

It was really interesting although the plot made it sound a lot like a Saw movie. The background shows a mean person and the guy capturing him sounds like a brother which didn't make a lot of sense. After all, he sounded like an enemy after the hate in the responses to questions.

For some strange reason I keep having an obligation to edit every time I see a mistake. Well, I'll check the minor edit box next time.

--[[User:Snowball|Snowball]] 06:45, 21 October 2011 (UTC)

Honestly, [[Remember]] was good, so I decided to topple war pigs.(I was getting kind of sick of it being there, in any case) Hopefully I can finish the two stories I'm working on now(that I want to complete straight away) so I can start reviewing stuff as well. Keep writing [[Remember]]. I want to know more about the story!:)

--[[User:Snowball|Snowball]] 15:47, 22 October 2011 (UTC)

Oh, right, I wanted to ask for an opinion on something I thought about. Most pages don't place a letter or title before the page names. So, the only two courses that can be done,(without plowing through every story to start over) is to let certain pages overlap. [[Kill yourself]] has eleven categories. Tell me what you think, because eventually, if nothing is done, what with pages being added, page names will be so long we could let the option be clicking the stroy in itself, just to not allow overlaps.

--[[User:Snowball|Snowball]] 02:12, 23 October 2011 (UTC)

For example, if someone else put R, for another story, the page would be edited and it may seem like a small thing but it would get very annoying if it happens repeatedly. However, if for pages like [[Kill yourself]], the story works well, it can be some sort of intersection. It'll probably only work on endings, but it gets annoying. Once I made a page [[Die]] and it was already taken and completely inappropiate. Since it is a very small title it does seem weird. Besides, it would be easier than going through large stories, pulling them out and repasting them. It would be fine for simple stories. However, a lot go into near 100 and there is a 200 pager(The Kitty in the Window) which would probably lose pages in the process. Oh, right and it might be slightly easier to make a category, like '''Public''' to place the... public stories.

--[[User:Snowball|Snowball]] 02:42, 23 October 2011 (UTC)

I'll write the page you wanted. And I hope it will be satisfactory, you can always edit it. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]

I want your opinion on this idea. You see, some pages are too short, so what if we used the first discussion page as a recccomendation for expansion, as some stories can be finished with 20+ pages.

--[[User:Snowball|Snowball]] 13:44, 12 November 2011 (UTC)

Well, what do you think the line should look like?
''__''
Or should it be dashes?
''-''
More?
''----''
I have no idea.
--[[User:Snowball|Snowball]] 11:09, 15 November 2011 (UTC)

Oh, I have an idea for Remember. See, what if he manages to reason, saying he would starve before the choice. So, if he gets food, he hears more of the people's explainations.

== Story of the year ==

Also, maybe we could have a 'Story of the Year Award'. The nominations for this award could include the stories that were featured
in the year. There would be a separate page where people can vote for a story. Voting can be done by making pages called ((
Voting: Nomination )) and people can just click on the page to vote, the amount of views that were done on that page will decide
the winner. --Heyoeveryone 23 October 2011

Well the problem with that is that the ''page views functtion'' isn´t based on individual viewers, but on how many times that page has been accsesed no matter if it was the same person. So one person could click on a link a thousand times and thus give that option a thousand votes. It´s not a functional voting system. Users would need to leave their signature on which story they vote on (a public vote so to say). Sure that system could be cheated to by creating new accounts and using them to vote. But that requiers a lot more effort, and would get suspective seeing so many new members being created and all of them voting for the same guy.

Other than that it´s seems like a fun and intruiging idea. Alternatively you could do a "story of all time" vote with the first one.

PS: Apologize for lateness of the reply.

--[[User:Fletcher Peninsula|Fletcher Peninsula]]

== Re: Hey, uhh ==

No, I'm not a mod. xD

I have, however, been known to patrol the recent changes to see what's been going on, and I'll visit the "uncategorized pages" at least once per site visit.

Hell, Sunday night I brought it from uncategorized 40 pages to the normal 4 (5 if you count the blanked page that I couldn't do anything about) and warned a pair of authors. I just help out around the site, seeing as I've pretty much always got the recent changes page open in another tab at all times, and I just try to lessen the workload for Platypus when he gets back on. He can handle the spammers and vandals, I'll handle the categorization. xD --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 14:29, 8 November 2011 (UTC)

Writing in here again, because I feel like it.

Yeah, I felt like doing a review and decided to choose the worst story on here instead of one of the best. As far as more reviews go, we'll have to see. It all depends on if I find a story I feel like reviewing. --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 12:41, 12 November 2011 (UTC)

Replying here again. First off, I'm flattered that you think my opinion means so much - even if I can't see how one would come to that conclusion. Now, onto what you were asking about. I think the division of "Remember" into chapters could work really well. It's a lot like I was thinking of doing for my next story, dividing it into chapters for easier access, and for people to jump back into where they were when they last were reading it.

In short, I think that putting "Remember" into chapters could be beneficial. A "chapter select" function on either the first page or a "menu page" of sorts would make it better if you did the chapters. --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 02:44, 17 November 2011 (UTC)

== Long page ==

My god. 10 933 characters. That's the highest amount I've ever seen in a very long time.

There is a page on this site that counts the words on each page and list them.

http://editthis.info/choose_your_own_adventure/Special:LongPages

I remeber the days when a 10.000 story was enough to get you in the number 1 spot. Oh how things have changed...

== [[Genesis]] ==

Sure, I need a break from my other projects and I need some practice on status indicators before I can do my next story, so I'll be able to do a bunch.

--[[User:Snowball|Snowball]] 10:53, 21 November 2011 (UTC)

Okay, done a page. I think we should use status indicators to indicate God Levels. See how you like the new page. I figured, with the intro like that, I might as well actually make the God thing a simulation. You think we should bring in a Devil or leave him out? Or maybe we'd add him after the player reaches Heavenly.

--[[User:Snowball|Snowball]] 12:19, 21 November 2011 (UTC)

So, how do you reckon the Devil battle should be carried out? A series of acts? Or literally gauging your points? Suppose if you asked for help, it would only be answered by gods you DID help.
--[[User:Snowball|Snowball]] 00:25, 23 November 2011 (UTC)

Oh, right I need some help o get a status indicator, not sure how to make one, and there's no use for a MP indicator.
--[[User:Snowball|Snowball]] 02:25, 23 November 2011 (UTC)

OKay, settled most. I added two paths, one where Harris immediately visits GA and one where he makes some friends on his own. At the end we should let the choice of friends determine the toughness of the enemy afterwards.
--[[User:Snowball|Snowball]] 07:40, 26 November 2011 (UTC)

If you want you can throow in more people. Right now, I have 3. Add one in english, and you make that one, if you want. I'll be focusing on the other 3.
--[[User:Snowball|Snowball]] 09:23, 28 November 2011 (UTC)

Now, I'm thinking of weakening the enemy depending on the strength of the friends he chooses. So, should we have a status indicator for the friends he makes? And How DO you make those? I kinda need one for another story.
In other news, I have a new Signature
--[[User:Snowball|Snowball- The Anti-Adult-Content Resistance Leader]] 03:13, 13 December 2011 (UTC)

Okay. if you don't mind, I'd like you to check the first Epilogue. I'll add more content for the other 5. Tell me what you think. [[G: Ending 1]] --[[User:Snowball|Snowball- The Anti-Adult-Content Resistance Leader]] 13:50, 4 January 2012 (UTC)

See what you think. It was supposed to be mushy and give you a fuzzy feeling, but whoever it is lost. The Endings will increase it cheeriness and amount Harris remembers until 6 (several paths to that), where Harris can remember everything, and it's really nice, but he can also walk down the other path and get a new planet. That I will keep super-secret. it'll be a sequel, but a secret one.
--[[User:Snowball|Snowball]] 23:55, 21 November 2011 (UTC)

== Reviewed: Remember ==

So, this should probably be a double-blessing for you, as I've just added to your brain-child the [[Story_Reviews|reviews section]], and it was about your work [[Remember]]. It's [[Review:_Remember|right here]], and I hope you're cool with it. As I said in the review itself, I'd love to review it again when finished, so when you feel you've added to it sufficiently, hit me up with a message and the score will probably go up. :D [[User:JackalRobot|JackalRobot]] 17:52, 21 November 2011 (UTC)

Regarding the review, yep, it was definitely a tough review, and there's two reasons behind that: a) because I'd score 90% of what's on here with a minus figure, and; b) so when it's finished I can up that number to reflect how much more awesome it'll be! And please don't tell me the ending(s) -- I'm looking forward to finding them out when I play them myself. ;) [[User:JackalRobot|JackalRobot]] 21:16, 21 November 2011 (UTC)

I really can't see anyone reading my review before playing the featured story. I first played [[Remember]] weeks before I was even aware of a review section. And, yeah, I'm new to the site. I've been reading the stories for a while, but only just registered so I can stop grumbling to myself about typos and do something about them. And I do have plans to write a story of my own at some point down the line, but I should probably ease myself in by adding a few pages to open projects first. [[User:JackalRobot|JackalRobot]] 13:23, 22 November 2011 (UTC)

== Review please? ==

Hello

I've just completed my first story [[Freedom]] and would like an expert opinion on it.

I really think this website has not seen anything like this, so I would love to have you see it.

== Review please? II ==

My friend, [[User:Watchbear13]], and I would like it, if you would do a review on our story, [[Obscura]]. It has 95 pages, right now, and is an ongoing story. Thanks! --[[User:Impalalevi1]]

== Thank You!! ==

Wow. Just, wow. I really want to thank you for giving your opinion on my story [[The Undead]]. Coming from you, it meant a lot. I also really liked what you recommended about Jane's husband being a zombie. I really like that idea and want to branch out on it later in the story. It's a shame that you don't have a lot of time, though. I also understand that you're working on "Remember", so maybe, if you want, I could help you a little and you could help me. I don't know. It was just a thought. Anyway, I just wanted to give you a big thanks, because you and [[User: Snowball|Snowball]] are like my cyao idols. --[[User: Cyclops| Cyclops]] 4:17 pm, April 10 2012

== Question about your review ==
Hey, just read that review you did of my Freedom story, and I noticed the examples you showed for endings didn't actually happen in the story. Maybe I have a broken link in there or something but I'm pretty sure I never wrote that stuff down.

== Fixed the link ==
Thanks for replying about the review thing. I've replaced the link, and I believe this was along the lines of what I originally intended for it to say. Thanks again for being so willing to edit the review. [[User: Wizardbaker| Wizardbaker]]

==Featured Stories==

Hi! I read about this featured story thing on the main page and I'm wondering if you could explain to me what that is because I have no idea! Thanks!!!!

I read your story: 'Remember' and I thing it is an AWESOME story! I am dying to see what happens at the end! Bye! --[[User: Lovetoread|Lovetoread]]
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WOW! you respond fast. Thanks for your help! --[[User: Lovetoread|Lovetoread]]
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What does W.I.P. mean? Thanks! --[[User: Lovetoread|Lovetoread]]

Talk:Moon light

Lovetoread — Thu, 04 Oct 2012 10:25:42 GMT

Lovetoread:

So this is my first story hope you like it
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Cool! I like it! Don't stop writing!!! :) So what will this story be about?

User talk:TheElderOnes

Lovetoread — Tue, 02 Oct 2012 02:53:11 GMT

Lovetoread:

Please make sure you include the category and status bar on the pages you post. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 21:29, 25 February 2010 (UTC)

Oops, yeah. Sorry, forgot that. Knew something was wrong. --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 06:45, 27 February 2010 (UTC)

Please don't make me keep reminding you about the category. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 20:47, 27 February 2010 (UTC)

Damnit! Sorry, still getting a hang of this wiki, keep forgetting that part. Are you the only mod? Cause I haven't seen any other ones, and if you have to do all of this on your own, then I'll definitely keep a better eye out. --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 02:20, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

I'm the only syop here on a regular basis. RobKohr is the admin, but he only pops in now and then.

As for adding a link to a pic, I'm not entirely sure how to do that. Given time, I'll see if I can research an answer. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 22:44, 1 March 2010 (UTC)

Sounds good to me, man. --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 02:20, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for the warning. You can't always tell a person's age by the maturity of their writing, though. Besides, it doesn't look like he's coming back to write more. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 12:59, 7 May 2010 (UTC)

I would just like to congratulate you on finishing your story. This makes you a member of a very, VERY small and privileged club! i enjoyed reading it so good luck with the next one!
--[[User:Fletcher Peninsula|Fletcher Peninsula]]

I definitely agree with you about the tags. If I can find a way to remove them, a lot of tags are going away! --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 11:23, 6 April 2011 (UTC)

I know you've been working on the story "Megan", and it's your story [and very good, if depressing], but I hope you don't mind that I added one page to it. I tried to keep to the spirit of the story. Your work is excellent. --[[User:Teejay|Teejay]]

Since you asked, I do like the story "Megan". The theme is incredibly depressing, so it reminds me of my poetry. So far, my favorite kill is the quick one in the kitchen, where Megan snaps Vanessa's neck. I look forward to the rest of the story. --[[User:Teejay|Teejay]]

Hey thanks. Do you recognize the faces I used for the status bars? --[[User:AgentVincent|AgentVincent]] 04:15, 29 July 2011 (UTC)

Congrats on finishing "Megan". Great story! --[[User:Teejay|Teejay]]

No problem go right ahead and use it. It's not copywritten and it does have a nice ring to it. --[[User:The Hand|The Hand]]

'''Thank You!!''' I haven't technically 'finished' it yet (kind of not read through and checked for grammar errors yet), but thank you so much for reading through it.
Oh and i've read through "Megan". My god, that story is simply put, magnificent. Especially the first time I read through it, yes I did read it through more than once. I hope that you continue making stories. Hey, maybe you can do a 'what if?' edition to this story. I'd like to see what would have happened if she didn't go through with, you know. --[[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] 17 September 2011

Yeah, the 'What If?' idea was for if Megan didn't do the kill, and there is a page where Vanessa kills Megan! The gun and power-tool kills? That sounds nasty, but, my violent side (which is very limited) still wants to read them.

And i've played through a bit of War Pigs, that is a pretty tough one to beat. Though, i'm sure you will.

Oh and one last question. I need you give your thoughts on these three ideas, as it will come into consideration of what I will do next. Should I?:

*Story about a man who has lost his memory, locked in a room with no walls, only item he has is a walkie talkie, where the kidnapper says he can leave, or he can save another person.

*High School Story. Didn't really have a good idea on this, it's either going to be about a war that starts happening around them, or they have a huch paintball match for a prize.

*Story Reviews. Going to look at three different sections, Grammar, Story, Ending/Completion.

--[[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] September 18 2011

== Reviewed! ==

Hey! I just finished typing up my review for your story, Megan. I know it's not finished and such, but i'm right now reviewing all the stories that have been nominated for becoming featured, and your one was on the top of the list. So [[Review: Megan|here's]] the review, and enjoy! --[[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] 4 October 2011

If you really want to know, it was the first one with the plastic bag. Oh my god that was brutal. That page was really well done, and I can still imagine it in my head. Ow... Anyways thanks in advance if you do write a review. I hope that more people get into the reviewing so it feels less empty. --[[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] 8 October 2011

Hey! Recently, I've been working on this new story called [[Remember]], and I was wondering, if you aren't to busy, maybe perhaps to read through it? If you would like a little premise, you find yourself locked inside a room with no windows, one door, and a walkie talkie, you also have forgotten who you are. The whole point is to escape the room and find out who you actually are. I'd just want to have an honest opinion about the story. --[[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] 17 October 2011

I recently read your review that you posted up today. What a way to start off, Inyasha's Fantasy Land. XD. To be honest, I haven't had a chance to actually take a read through this story, but with all this 'hype' about it being extremely bad, I was wondering if it was really that bad. Guess it turns out with your review it is! Great review I must say. You going to do more? --[[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] 10:08, 12 November 2011 (UTC)

==e-cig spammers==
Thanks for the heads-up. I'd noticed the e-cig spammers, but I figure that as long as they confine their spam to talk pages, there's no need to delete them. If they spread their spam to regular pages or post on anyone else's talk pages, then they'll be banned and their postings removed. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 14:05, 17 August 2011 (UTC)

==Question on something that could be considered a "nonstory"==
It seems to me that marking story supplement material as part of the Elderpedia would be the best way to go. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 12:17, 15 September 2011 (UTC)

Having an IRC chat is an interesting idea. It's something that should probably be run past RobKohr using the 'Request a Feature' link. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 15:37, 17 September 2011 (UTC)

== Time Stopper proposal reply ==
Hey TheElderOnes, Thanks for your praise on my new story I am glad you've enjoyed it so far.

As for the proposal of letting you write a few pages I will accept with a few conditions and details of the characters

Firstly I would like you to '''only''' do the city visit where the protaginist will cause trouble as I have everything of the highschool visit planned already.

Secondly I would like you to keep with my linking method which is [Time Stopper/Action|AddedText] or [TimeStopper/PersonAction|AddedText]

And now to the character(s).

The protagonist is very intellectual being able to deduce a situation very quickly

before gaining powers he grew to hate the world that hated him but upon getting his powers he has grown to be a bit sadistic and full of hatred.

also I plan to make a rival in the story with a different 'God-given' power... but I plan on introducing said character after the city arc has ended.

which brings me to a big point... try to keep the protagonist a little diguised so he doesn't just get caught so that he can still go to bed at the end of the day without having SWAT teams bursting through his window lol.

also try to reference previous dialogue/actions it brings more emotion to it I reckon.

I'll note before finishing that the School arc is a dead end or just a fanservice arc whilst City leads into the next part of the story I have planned (Which again will split into 2 paths if you wish to continue writing after the city arc.)

as a closing statement be sure to add a few spots where the reader can get a sex scene as the story is an 18+ adult story after all...

well anyway I made a big wall of text on your page sorry bout' that ha ha... anyways glad to have you aboard. --[[User:Mezzo|Mezzo]] 14:29, 10 October 2011 (UTC)

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Firstly good that you understand the protgonist, so yes cleverly orchestrated incidents that could perhaps cause massive whirlwinds of chaos while the protagonist sits and watchs it unfold

as for specfic events in the city I would like only 2 things the introduction of Merissa Silvers, a childhood friend of the protagonist who he hasn't seen since he way 10, her personality is outwardly happy but she hides a few secrets behind her smiles, I would like her only covered quickly though since I want the readers to feel the mystery of the character as she WILL be important later in the story.

the other things I want covered is a visit to 'Green Horn Bar' the bar that the protagonists mom gets drunk at. I would like the protagonist to help an innocent chick that is being taken advantage of by the patrons of the bar this could be a good spot also to introduce Merissa I guess. the green horn bar reeks of alcohol and is usually full of shady people.

anything else is left to your imagination, be as gory in description as you wish go nuts :P --[[User:Mezzo|Mezzo]] 15:16, 10 October 2011 (UTC)

==answer==

Actually, every time I issue a warning about the category, I think about just creating a template instead of re-typing it. Maybe next time I'll do that. Next time is likely to be soon. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 11:39, 1 November 2011 (UTC)

== Hey, uhh ==

Are you like a moderator of some sorts now? I've noticed you having a higher amount of activity than most other users, with many of your recent changes just categorizing page after page. Whether you are or not, I'd like to say good job! Someone needed to help Platypus with all the maintenance of the site. Heyoeveryone 07:24, 8 November 2011 (UTC)

Now I've been thinking, would it be a good idea if make [[R: Try to remember who you are|this page]] and the pages after it into a new story (I'd call it a new Chapter). I'm thinking of naming this 'Chapter 2' or 'Remember: Escape'. I am doing this because I was originally going to make it three parts, 'Remember' , 'Remember: The Waiting', then 'Remember: Escape'. If the story was popular, I would do a 'Remember: Epilogue' section as well. Why am I telling you this? Well, I need another persons opinion on it, and with the amount of stories that you've read, your opinion is more influential than others. --[[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] 04:59, 16 November 2011 (UTC)

I asked you because you were one of the only two people who would reply to my question in less than 24hrs (the other being Platypus). Anyway, thanks for your reply. Have fun doing what ever you do! --Heyoeveryone 06:14, 17 November 2011 (UTC)

Hi. Thanks for fixing up my spelling/grammar there and (I'm guessing) reading. :) I am not sure how I totally missed that error. -- [[User:Captain.Devonin|Cpt Devonin]]

== Found it! I'm ''pretty'' sure. ==

Well, I think I found your upcoming project. [[Bloodsport:Menu|Noonegetstoseewhat'sherebecauseit'satitleandntoinmyplacetorevealthetitlebutdon'tclickoonitanyway.]]. It's not shitty at all, by the way. Great introduction. Myself, I prefer to just throw someone into the fray with only a description of who they are. Reckon I should change that. Good job on finishing everything though. Just make another page so no one can seee it through the special pages.

Well, great job, hope you can finish it so... wait, I think putting the link over there kinda takes it out of the orphaned bit. Well, I'll go search for the other part then. Figure it should be the Elderpedia. Hmmm...

--[[User:Snowball|Snowball- The Anti-Adult-Content Resistance Leader]] 04:01, 21 December 2011 (UTC)

I think I found the other bit then.

[[Elderpedia:Bloodsport. (Story)|Thisisevenmorerevealingsonooneelsegetstotouchthis.]]

The page has only been acessed 5 times and several are probably you typing more, so, 1 other person?--[[User:Snowball|Snowball- The Anti-Adult-Content Resistance Leader]] 04:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)

[[Elderpedia:TheDiaryEntryOne|Entry One - April 26th, 2011]]
I noticed that it says "It scared me at first, but it went away after I took a shower." What went away? The feeling of fear? The dream? Don't think it's the latter, since that would require sleep-showering. So, umm... Clarify. See ya. --[[User:Snowball|Snowball- The Anti-Adult-Content Resistance Leader]] 11:19, 18 June 2012 (UTC)

I'd also like to say that you seem to have your own little universe of interwoven stories. I see what you did with the diary and [[Megan]]. Sorry about the many posts, my mind is volatile.--[[User:Snowball|Snowball- The Anti-Adult-Content Resistance Leader]] 12:34, 18 June 2012 (UTC)

== Small Request... ==

Hi TheElderOnes,

I'd like to make a teensy request that you refrain from editing my half-written pages (even to add the category) for at least an hour or two to give me time to finish it and add it myself. (If I haven't done it after an hour or two, something must have come up to pull me AFK).

I mainly ask because you just edited a page I was writing and since I couldn't copy/paste to merge the two (or find any other way to merge them aside from rewriting or c/p) I ended up having to rewrite the whole thing, very slowly, even though after I'd have saved it, it would have had the category added... ^^"

I have to occasionally save pages early/before finishing cause I either forget something I need on the previous page, or, do it just in case my phone crashes (which it likes to do from time to time) so I don't lose everything. Especially on longer pages. And by doing it on my phone it takes me a bit longer to type pages than it would if I had a keyboard.

I'm not bothered or anything, I've lost whole pages before due to my phone crashing so the fact that I could save this one after I wrote it a way I was sorta happy with was good. I just thought I'd toss the request out there to save me having to do this too often... ^^"

Thank you, -- [[User:Captain.Devonin|Cpt. Devonin )-(]] 07:36, 26 December 2011 (UTC)

== The life of a medieval princess ==

Started writing again after a bit of a break, too busy with work ^^

btw, I think I noticed a major error in my spelling/grammatica

I always use 's and recently heard sometimes it's supposed to be s'

like :

the boy's car / the boys' car

I don't really know when exactly to use s' tho. Best guess so far : after names and plurals.

Dunno if its really something important either so I figured I'd ask.

P.S.: I read bloodsport, its still only a beginning, but it didn't sound half bad. I think it might be an interesting read once its finished.

--[[User:Zoroastra|Zoroastra]]

==deleteme==
I understand what you're trying to do by tagging pages with the deleteme category, but categorizing those pages actually makes them stand out less for me. They're much easier to spot when they're uncategorized. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 11:42, 27 March 2012 (UTC)

==Bloodsport.==

Hey, I'm glad to hear you like Naomi and Jack so far. Any feedback on Jack specifically would be helpful, since I'm not used to writing teenage males. By the way, if you see any typos/grammar errors in any of my pages, feel free to correct them. I write on my phone and it's sometimes impossible to scroll through an input box.

I'd really like to see you continue Marissa and Bloodsport. Her story stopped before any blood was spilled.

-[[User:Sennen|Sennen]] 14:14, 31 May 2012 (UTC)

You're free to use Erin if you'd like. I'll go ahead and fill in her description and a couple others. I'm pretty comfortable with most of my named characters being borrowed, actually. The only one I consider off limits is Monique, and that's only because I haven't shown her personality yet-after a few pages, she's free as well.

Tribal warfare sounds fantastic, like the kind of thing the Królowa Krwis would have done in the past. Plus, given some of the unusual practices that obscure tribes sometimes have, it has a gold mine of potential inspiration.

-[[User:Sennen|Sennen]] 01:13, 2 June 2012 (UTC)

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Hey! I have a question. Why did you chose to write things in Polish? Are you Polish? --[[User:Lovetoread|Lovetoread]] 00:13, 24 September 2012 (UTC)
Ok, cool! --[[User:Lovetoread|Lovetoread]]

== Please help! ==

A bunch of people are vandalizing [[User:Platypus|Platypus's]] page, I did that once on my old account [[User:GreatGrapes4330|GreatGrapes]] once, but someone (I think) mocked my vandalism because I saw that someone mocked me by trying to undo the page and I think hacked my old account, tell him that I was hacked and I gone on Google Chrome to see if I could be able to make an account again, and I did and I chose my Wikimedia username "Newman2" that I first used on Wikispecies. I had to make a new account because someone changed my old account's password, and the IP changed. --[[User:Newman2|Newman2]] 22:31, 31 July 2012 (UTC)

User talk:Lovetoread

Lovetoread — Tue, 02 Oct 2012 01:03:05 GMT

Lovetoread:

{{warn1}}--[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 11:25, 12 September 2012 (UTC)

{{warn2}}--[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 15:33, 20 September 2012 (UTC)

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Categorizing your pages is very easy. If your story is titled ''Agent Black'', then each page should include the line:

<nowiki>[[Category:Agent Black]]</nowiki>

It's that simple. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 15:14, 21 September 2012 (UTC)

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Placing a story as featured is done for two main reasons:

*To highlight an amazing story which has been written out well.

*To advertise the story even further so others can read it too.

It's usually done for the first reason, the second is just a bonus.

And thank you so for the kind words. Means a lot. --[[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] 23:26, 21 September 2012 (UTC)

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Apologies for the late response. I'm of Polish heritage, but I mainly chose to use Polish in the introduction to Bloodsport because I like how the language looks, and all the names and terms worked out fine. I think. I doubt any of that Polish is accurate, but... uh... that's what I get for not actually learning the language, I suppose. --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 00:53, 2 October 2012 (UTC)

S413 Conform it is safer

Lovetoread — Thu, 27 Sep 2012 05:10:45 GMT

Lovetoread: Created page with 'Category: Subject 413'

[[Category: Subject 413]]

User talk:TheElderOnes

Lovetoread — Mon, 24 Sep 2012 14:17:57 GMT

Lovetoread: /* Bloodsport. */

Please make sure you include the category and status bar on the pages you post. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 21:29, 25 February 2010 (UTC)

Oops, yeah. Sorry, forgot that. Knew something was wrong. --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 06:45, 27 February 2010 (UTC)

Please don't make me keep reminding you about the category. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 20:47, 27 February 2010 (UTC)

Damnit! Sorry, still getting a hang of this wiki, keep forgetting that part. Are you the only mod? Cause I haven't seen any other ones, and if you have to do all of this on your own, then I'll definitely keep a better eye out. --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 02:20, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

I'm the only syop here on a regular basis. RobKohr is the admin, but he only pops in now and then.

As for adding a link to a pic, I'm not entirely sure how to do that. Given time, I'll see if I can research an answer. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 22:44, 1 March 2010 (UTC)

Sounds good to me, man. --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 02:20, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for the warning. You can't always tell a person's age by the maturity of their writing, though. Besides, it doesn't look like he's coming back to write more. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 12:59, 7 May 2010 (UTC)

I would just like to congratulate you on finishing your story. This makes you a member of a very, VERY small and privileged club! i enjoyed reading it so good luck with the next one!
--[[User:Fletcher Peninsula|Fletcher Peninsula]]

I definitely agree with you about the tags. If I can find a way to remove them, a lot of tags are going away! --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 11:23, 6 April 2011 (UTC)

I know you've been working on the story "Megan", and it's your story [and very good, if depressing], but I hope you don't mind that I added one page to it. I tried to keep to the spirit of the story. Your work is excellent. --[[User:Teejay|Teejay]]

Since you asked, I do like the story "Megan". The theme is incredibly depressing, so it reminds me of my poetry. So far, my favorite kill is the quick one in the kitchen, where Megan snaps Vanessa's neck. I look forward to the rest of the story. --[[User:Teejay|Teejay]]

Hey thanks. Do you recognize the faces I used for the status bars? --[[User:AgentVincent|AgentVincent]] 04:15, 29 July 2011 (UTC)

Congrats on finishing "Megan". Great story! --[[User:Teejay|Teejay]]

No problem go right ahead and use it. It's not copywritten and it does have a nice ring to it. --[[User:The Hand|The Hand]]

'''Thank You!!''' I haven't technically 'finished' it yet (kind of not read through and checked for grammar errors yet), but thank you so much for reading through it.
Oh and i've read through "Megan". My god, that story is simply put, magnificent. Especially the first time I read through it, yes I did read it through more than once. I hope that you continue making stories. Hey, maybe you can do a 'what if?' edition to this story. I'd like to see what would have happened if she didn't go through with, you know. --[[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] 17 September 2011

Yeah, the 'What If?' idea was for if Megan didn't do the kill, and there is a page where Vanessa kills Megan! The gun and power-tool kills? That sounds nasty, but, my violent side (which is very limited) still wants to read them.

And i've played through a bit of War Pigs, that is a pretty tough one to beat. Though, i'm sure you will.

Oh and one last question. I need you give your thoughts on these three ideas, as it will come into consideration of what I will do next. Should I?:

*Story about a man who has lost his memory, locked in a room with no walls, only item he has is a walkie talkie, where the kidnapper says he can leave, or he can save another person.

*High School Story. Didn't really have a good idea on this, it's either going to be about a war that starts happening around them, or they have a huch paintball match for a prize.

*Story Reviews. Going to look at three different sections, Grammar, Story, Ending/Completion.

--[[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] September 18 2011

== Reviewed! ==

Hey! I just finished typing up my review for your story, Megan. I know it's not finished and such, but i'm right now reviewing all the stories that have been nominated for becoming featured, and your one was on the top of the list. So [[Review: Megan|here's]] the review, and enjoy! --[[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] 4 October 2011

If you really want to know, it was the first one with the plastic bag. Oh my god that was brutal. That page was really well done, and I can still imagine it in my head. Ow... Anyways thanks in advance if you do write a review. I hope that more people get into the reviewing so it feels less empty. --[[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] 8 October 2011

Hey! Recently, I've been working on this new story called [[Remember]], and I was wondering, if you aren't to busy, maybe perhaps to read through it? If you would like a little premise, you find yourself locked inside a room with no windows, one door, and a walkie talkie, you also have forgotten who you are. The whole point is to escape the room and find out who you actually are. I'd just want to have an honest opinion about the story. --[[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] 17 October 2011

I recently read your review that you posted up today. What a way to start off, Inyasha's Fantasy Land. XD. To be honest, I haven't had a chance to actually take a read through this story, but with all this 'hype' about it being extremely bad, I was wondering if it was really that bad. Guess it turns out with your review it is! Great review I must say. You going to do more? --[[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] 10:08, 12 November 2011 (UTC)

==e-cig spammers==
Thanks for the heads-up. I'd noticed the e-cig spammers, but I figure that as long as they confine their spam to talk pages, there's no need to delete them. If they spread their spam to regular pages or post on anyone else's talk pages, then they'll be banned and their postings removed. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 14:05, 17 August 2011 (UTC)

==Question on something that could be considered a "nonstory"==
It seems to me that marking story supplement material as part of the Elderpedia would be the best way to go. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 12:17, 15 September 2011 (UTC)

Having an IRC chat is an interesting idea. It's something that should probably be run past RobKohr using the 'Request a Feature' link. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 15:37, 17 September 2011 (UTC)

== Time Stopper proposal reply ==
Hey TheElderOnes, Thanks for your praise on my new story I am glad you've enjoyed it so far.

As for the proposal of letting you write a few pages I will accept with a few conditions and details of the characters

Firstly I would like you to '''only''' do the city visit where the protaginist will cause trouble as I have everything of the highschool visit planned already.

Secondly I would like you to keep with my linking method which is [Time Stopper/Action|AddedText] or [TimeStopper/PersonAction|AddedText]

And now to the character(s).

The protagonist is very intellectual being able to deduce a situation very quickly

before gaining powers he grew to hate the world that hated him but upon getting his powers he has grown to be a bit sadistic and full of hatred.

also I plan to make a rival in the story with a different 'God-given' power... but I plan on introducing said character after the city arc has ended.

which brings me to a big point... try to keep the protagonist a little diguised so he doesn't just get caught so that he can still go to bed at the end of the day without having SWAT teams bursting through his window lol.

also try to reference previous dialogue/actions it brings more emotion to it I reckon.

I'll note before finishing that the School arc is a dead end or just a fanservice arc whilst City leads into the next part of the story I have planned (Which again will split into 2 paths if you wish to continue writing after the city arc.)

as a closing statement be sure to add a few spots where the reader can get a sex scene as the story is an 18+ adult story after all...

well anyway I made a big wall of text on your page sorry bout' that ha ha... anyways glad to have you aboard. --[[User:Mezzo|Mezzo]] 14:29, 10 October 2011 (UTC)

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Firstly good that you understand the protgonist, so yes cleverly orchestrated incidents that could perhaps cause massive whirlwinds of chaos while the protagonist sits and watchs it unfold

as for specfic events in the city I would like only 2 things the introduction of Merissa Silvers, a childhood friend of the protagonist who he hasn't seen since he way 10, her personality is outwardly happy but she hides a few secrets behind her smiles, I would like her only covered quickly though since I want the readers to feel the mystery of the character as she WILL be important later in the story.

the other things I want covered is a visit to 'Green Horn Bar' the bar that the protagonists mom gets drunk at. I would like the protagonist to help an innocent chick that is being taken advantage of by the patrons of the bar this could be a good spot also to introduce Merissa I guess. the green horn bar reeks of alcohol and is usually full of shady people.

anything else is left to your imagination, be as gory in description as you wish go nuts :P --[[User:Mezzo|Mezzo]] 15:16, 10 October 2011 (UTC)

==answer==

Actually, every time I issue a warning about the category, I think about just creating a template instead of re-typing it. Maybe next time I'll do that. Next time is likely to be soon. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 11:39, 1 November 2011 (UTC)

== Hey, uhh ==

Are you like a moderator of some sorts now? I've noticed you having a higher amount of activity than most other users, with many of your recent changes just categorizing page after page. Whether you are or not, I'd like to say good job! Someone needed to help Platypus with all the maintenance of the site. Heyoeveryone 07:24, 8 November 2011 (UTC)

Now I've been thinking, would it be a good idea if make [[R: Try to remember who you are|this page]] and the pages after it into a new story (I'd call it a new Chapter). I'm thinking of naming this 'Chapter 2' or 'Remember: Escape'. I am doing this because I was originally going to make it three parts, 'Remember' , 'Remember: The Waiting', then 'Remember: Escape'. If the story was popular, I would do a 'Remember: Epilogue' section as well. Why am I telling you this? Well, I need another persons opinion on it, and with the amount of stories that you've read, your opinion is more influential than others. --[[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] 04:59, 16 November 2011 (UTC)

I asked you because you were one of the only two people who would reply to my question in less than 24hrs (the other being Platypus). Anyway, thanks for your reply. Have fun doing what ever you do! --Heyoeveryone 06:14, 17 November 2011 (UTC)

Hi. Thanks for fixing up my spelling/grammar there and (I'm guessing) reading. :) I am not sure how I totally missed that error. -- [[User:Captain.Devonin|Cpt Devonin]]

== Found it! I'm ''pretty'' sure. ==

Well, I think I found your upcoming project. [[Bloodsport:Menu|Noonegetstoseewhat'sherebecauseit'satitleandntoinmyplacetorevealthetitlebutdon'tclickoonitanyway.]]. It's not shitty at all, by the way. Great introduction. Myself, I prefer to just throw someone into the fray with only a description of who they are. Reckon I should change that. Good job on finishing everything though. Just make another page so no one can seee it through the special pages.

Well, great job, hope you can finish it so... wait, I think putting the link over there kinda takes it out of the orphaned bit. Well, I'll go search for the other part then. Figure it should be the Elderpedia. Hmmm...

--[[User:Snowball|Snowball- The Anti-Adult-Content Resistance Leader]] 04:01, 21 December 2011 (UTC)

I think I found the other bit then.

[[Elderpedia:Bloodsport. (Story)|Thisisevenmorerevealingsonooneelsegetstotouchthis.]]

The page has only been acessed 5 times and several are probably you typing more, so, 1 other person?--[[User:Snowball|Snowball- The Anti-Adult-Content Resistance Leader]] 04:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)

[[Elderpedia:TheDiaryEntryOne|Entry One - April 26th, 2011]]
I noticed that it says "It scared me at first, but it went away after I took a shower." What went away? The feeling of fear? The dream? Don't think it's the latter, since that would require sleep-showering. So, umm... Clarify. See ya. --[[User:Snowball|Snowball- The Anti-Adult-Content Resistance Leader]] 11:19, 18 June 2012 (UTC)

I'd also like to say that you seem to have your own little universe of interwoven stories. I see what you did with the diary and [[Megan]]. Sorry about the many posts, my mind is volatile.--[[User:Snowball|Snowball- The Anti-Adult-Content Resistance Leader]] 12:34, 18 June 2012 (UTC)

== Small Request... ==

Hi TheElderOnes,

I'd like to make a teensy request that you refrain from editing my half-written pages (even to add the category) for at least an hour or two to give me time to finish it and add it myself. (If I haven't done it after an hour or two, something must have come up to pull me AFK).

I mainly ask because you just edited a page I was writing and since I couldn't copy/paste to merge the two (or find any other way to merge them aside from rewriting or c/p) I ended up having to rewrite the whole thing, very slowly, even though after I'd have saved it, it would have had the category added... ^^"

I have to occasionally save pages early/before finishing cause I either forget something I need on the previous page, or, do it just in case my phone crashes (which it likes to do from time to time) so I don't lose everything. Especially on longer pages. And by doing it on my phone it takes me a bit longer to type pages than it would if I had a keyboard.

I'm not bothered or anything, I've lost whole pages before due to my phone crashing so the fact that I could save this one after I wrote it a way I was sorta happy with was good. I just thought I'd toss the request out there to save me having to do this too often... ^^"

Thank you, -- [[User:Captain.Devonin|Cpt. Devonin )-(]] 07:36, 26 December 2011 (UTC)

== The life of a medieval princess ==

Started writing again after a bit of a break, too busy with work ^^

btw, I think I noticed a major error in my spelling/grammatica

I always use 's and recently heard sometimes it's supposed to be s'

like :

the boy's car / the boys' car

I don't really know when exactly to use s' tho. Best guess so far : after names and plurals.

Dunno if its really something important either so I figured I'd ask.

P.S.: I read bloodsport, its still only a beginning, but it didn't sound half bad. I think it might be an interesting read once its finished.

--[[User:Zoroastra|Zoroastra]]

==deleteme==
I understand what you're trying to do by tagging pages with the deleteme category, but categorizing those pages actually makes them stand out less for me. They're much easier to spot when they're uncategorized. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 11:42, 27 March 2012 (UTC)

==Bloodsport.==

Hey, I'm glad to hear you like Naomi and Jack so far. Any feedback on Jack specifically would be helpful, since I'm not used to writing teenage males. By the way, if you see any typos/grammar errors in any of my pages, feel free to correct them. I write on my phone and it's sometimes impossible to scroll through an input box.

I'd really like to see you continue Marissa and Bloodsport. Her story stopped before any blood was spilled.

-[[User:Sennen|Sennen]] 14:14, 31 May 2012 (UTC)

You're free to use Erin if you'd like. I'll go ahead and fill in her description and a couple others. I'm pretty comfortable with most of my named characters being borrowed, actually. The only one I consider off limits is Monique, and that's only because I haven't shown her personality yet-after a few pages, she's free as well.

Tribal warfare sounds fantastic, like the kind of thing the Królowa Krwis would have done in the past. Plus, given some of the unusual practices that obscure tribes sometimes have, it has a gold mine of potential inspiration.

-[[User:Sennen|Sennen]] 01:13, 2 June 2012 (UTC)

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Hey! I have a question. Why did you chose to write things in Polish? Are you Polish? --[[User:Lovetoread|Lovetoread]] 00:13, 24 September 2012 (UTC)

== Please help! ==

A bunch of people are vandalizing [[User:Platypus|Platypus's]] page, I did that once on my old account [[User:GreatGrapes4330|GreatGrapes]] once, but someone (I think) mocked my vandalism because I saw that someone mocked me by trying to undo the page and I think hacked my old account, tell him that I was hacked and I gone on Google Chrome to see if I could be able to make an account again, and I did and I chose my Wikimedia username "Newman2" that I first used on Wikispecies. I had to make a new account because someone changed my old account's password, and the IP changed. --[[User:Newman2|Newman2]] 22:31, 31 July 2012 (UTC)

User talk:Zephed

Lovetoread — Sun, 23 Sep 2012 10:41:40 GMT

Lovetoread:

Please make sure you include the category on all the pages you post. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 05:54, 26 June 2010 (UTC)

Second wanring. Uncategorized pages will be editted or deleted. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 21:10, 27 June 2010 (UTC)

Hey! I decided to feature your story [[Agent Black]] on the Home Page! --[[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] 01:53, 15 September 2012 (UTC)

Hi! I really like your story [[Agent Black]]! Are you planning to add more to it? -- [[User:Lovetoread|Lovetoread]]

Walk down the driveway (w inv)

Lovetoread — Sun, 23 Sep 2012 10:38:29 GMT

Lovetoread:

You start walkng down the driveway but you are stopped by a guard dressed in a black suit. "Sir, the front door is that way. These premises are not to be entered by the guests"

 [[Walk up the pathway to the front door (w inv)|Walk up the pathway to the front door]]

[[Category: Agent Black]]

Walk down the driveway (w inv)

Lovetoread — Sun, 23 Sep 2012 10:25:38 GMT

Lovetoread:

[[Walk up the pathway to the front door (w inv)|Walk up the pathway to the front door]]

Walk down the driveway (w inv)

Lovetoread — Sun, 23 Sep 2012 10:06:30 GMT

Lovetoread: Created page with 'Walk up |'

[[Walk up |Walk up ]]

Approach the mansion (w inv)

Lovetoread — Sun, 23 Sep 2012 10:05:20 GMT

Lovetoread:

You walk along the dark road and up to the estate. The house is illuminated by flood lights on the lawn. The mansion is an enormous stone mansion with French windows lining the walls and numerous chimneys reaching up from the house to the sky. Every light in the house is turned on and you can make out the silhouettes of party goers in the windows. A long brick pathway leads from the front door of the house to the street. A driveway leads around the back of the house.

[[Walk up the pathway to the front door (w inv)|Walk up the pathway to the front door]]
 [[Walk down the driveway (w inv)|Walk down the driveway]]

[[Category:Agent Black]]

Walk up the pathway to the front door (Sec)

Lovetoread — Sun, 23 Sep 2012 09:56:45 GMT

Lovetoread:

You walk down the pathway up to the front door. You see two guards dressed in suits standing in front of the door. As you approach them, one of them says, “Invitation, please?”
 “Excuse me?” you reply.
 “No invitation, no entrance,” he says.

 [[Walk down the driveway]]
 [[Find a side window to climb through]]

[[Category:Agent Black]]

Walk up the pathway to the front door (Sec)

Lovetoread — Sun, 23 Sep 2012 09:45:43 GMT

Lovetoread: Created page with 'You walk down the pathway up to the front door. You see two guards dressed in suits standing in front of the door. As you approach them, one of them says, “Invitation, please?…'

You walk down the pathway up to the front door. You see two guards dressed in suits standing in front of the door. As you approach them, one of them says, “Invitation, please?”
 “Excuse me?” you reply.
 “No invitation, no entrance,” he says.

 [[Find a side window to climb through]]

[[Category:Agent Black]]

Walk down the driveway

Lovetoread — Sun, 23 Sep 2012 09:43:34 GMT

Lovetoread:

You start walkng down the driveway but you are stopped by a guard dressed in a black suit. "Sir, the front door is that way. These premises are not to be entered by the guests"

 [[Strangle the guard|Strangle the guard]]
 [[Shoot the guard (outs)|Shoot the guard]]
 [[Walk up the pathway to the front door (Sec)|Walk up the pathway to the front door]]

[[Category: Agent Black]]

Walk down the driveway

Lovetoread — Sun, 23 Sep 2012 09:41:54 GMT

Lovetoread:

You start walkng down the driveway but you are stopped by a guard dressed in a black suit. "Sir, the front door is that way. These premises are not to be entered by the guests"

 [[Strangle the guard|Strangle the guard]]
 [[Shoot the guard (outs)|Shoot the guard]]
 [[Walk up the pathway to the front door (w-o inv)|Walk up the pathway to the front door]]

[[Category: Agent Black]]

Walk down the driveway

Lovetoread — Sun, 23 Sep 2012 09:40:19 GMT

Lovetoread:

You start walkng down the driveway but you are stopped by a guard dressed in a black suit. "Sir, the front door is that way. These premises are not to be entered by the guests"

 [[Strangle the guard|Strangle the guard]]
 [[Shoot the guard (outs)|Shoot the guard]]
 [[Shoot the guard|Shoot the guard]]
 [[Walk up the pathway to the front door (w-o inv)|Walk up the pathway to the front door]]

[[Category: Agent Black]]

Shoot the guard (outs)

Lovetoread — Sun, 23 Sep 2012 08:25:33 GMT

Lovetoread: Created page with 'Lightning-quick, you take out your gun and shoot the guard rigt in the middle of hid forehead. About half of his head is blown up. You now realise that your gun was not silenced.…'

Lightning-quick, you take out your gun and shoot the guard rigt in the middle of hid forehead. About half of his head is blown up. You now realise that your gun was not silenced... and next thing you know, five guards simultaneously open fire on you. You are dead before you hit the ground.

'''Nice job'''

Walk down the driveway

Lovetoread — Sun, 23 Sep 2012 08:22:15 GMT

Lovetoread:

You start walkng down the driveway but you are stopped by a guard dressed in a black suit. "Sir, the front door is that way. These premises are not to be entered by the guests"

 [[Strangle the guard|Strangle the guard]]
 [[Shoot the guard (outs)|Shoot the guard]]
 [[Walk up the pathway to the front door (w inv)|Walk up the pathway to the front door]]

[[Category: Agent Black]]

Walk down the driveway

Lovetoread — Sun, 23 Sep 2012 08:21:24 GMT

Lovetoread:

You start walkng down the driveway but you are stopped by a guard dressed in a black suit. "Sir, the front door is that way. These premises are not to be entered by the guests"

[[Strangle the guard|Strangle the guard]]
[[Shoot the guard (outs)|Shoot the guard]]
[[Walk up the pathway to the front door (w inv)|Walk up the pathway to the front door]]

[[Category: Agent Black]]

Walk down the driveway

Lovetoread — Sun, 23 Sep 2012 08:18:43 GMT

Lovetoread:

You start walkng down the driveway but you are stopped by a guard dressed in a black suit. "Sir, the front door is that way. These premises are not to be entered by the guests"

[[Strangle the guard|Strangle the guard]]
[[Shoot the guard|Shoot the guard]]
[[Walk up the pathway to the front door (w inv)|Walk up the pathway to the front door]]

[[Category: Agent Black]]

Shoot the woman

Lovetoread — Sat, 22 Sep 2012 08:17:51 GMT

Lovetoread: Created page with 'You take out your gun and approach the woman. When you are about a metre from her, you hear a silenced gun shoot and feel extreme pain in your hand. The woman quickly turns aroun…'

You take out your gun and approach the woman. When you are about a metre from her, you hear a silenced gun shoot and feel extreme pain in your hand. The woman quickly turns around with terror on her face as you drop the gun because of the pain. A guard pushes you against the ground and after the woman leaves he shoots you in the head. You feel extreme pain just before everything goes black.

 Mission failed, nice job
 [[Agent Black|Back to beginning]]

[[Category:Agent Black]]

Strangle the woman

Lovetoread — Sat, 22 Sep 2012 08:14:53 GMT

Lovetoread:

You take out your strangling wire and approach the woman. When you are about a metre from her, you hear a silenced gun shoot and feel extreme pain in your hand. The woman quickly turns around with terror on her face as you drop the wire because of the pain. A guard pushes you against the wall and puts handcuffs on you while the woman quickly leaves the hallway. He removes all of your exuiptment.
 A few minutes in a second guard enters the hallway and pulls out a silenced gun. You close your eyes in fear. This is it, you think to yourself, waiting for the gun rounds. This is the end. This is how I’m going out; trapped in a room, defenseless and helpless.
 You hear a soft bang, but no pain. In fact, you don’t feel anything. You open your eyes and see the secon guard standing above the dead body of the other one. He pulls off his glasses and you see his face. It’s Harvey. He has come to save you.
 “Alright, bud. We’ve got to get out of here quickly,” he says to you while cutting off the rope that binds you to your chair. “The police are coming to take you to jail. We’ve got to hurry.” He pulls off the rope and leads you down to the end of the hallway and through the door to the kitchen. He and you rush out the service entrance and dash into the woods. You don’t see any squad cars or police officers around.
 Harvey turns to you and says, “I’ve been following you. We wanted to make sure you could handle a mission all alone. I wasn’t stalking you to be creepy or nothing.”
 “I failed” you say.
 “If I hadn’t have been watching you, you’ve gone to jail, ya know. You’re lucky I intervened.” You look away in shame. “Go home bud, forget this ever hapened”

 Mission failed
 [[Agent Black|Back to beginning]]

[[Category:Agent Black]]

Strangle the woman

Lovetoread — Sat, 22 Sep 2012 08:02:10 GMT

Lovetoread: Created page with 'You take out your strangling wire and approach the woman. When you are about a metre from her, you hear a silenced gun shoot and feel extreme pain in your hand. The woman quickly…'

Find the woman

Lovetoread — Sat, 22 Sep 2012 07:55:02 GMT

Lovetoread:

You walk down the hallway in search of the woman. You find an elegant and well-dressed woman, with a blonde hair tied up in a bun, also walking down the hallway. You figure because she is walking away from you, she probably doesn't know you are there.

[[Shoot Anthony from the balcony|Return to the balcony to shoot Anthony]]
 [[Strangle the woman]]
 [[Shoot the woman]]

[[Category:Agent Black]]

Find the woman

Lovetoread — Sat, 22 Sep 2012 07:53:19 GMT

Lovetoread:

You walk down the hallway in search of the woman. You find an elegant and well-dressed woman, with a blonde hair tied up in a bun, also walking down the hallway. You figure because she is walking away from you, she probably doesn't know you are there.

[[Return to the balcony to shoot Anthony]]
[[Strangle the woman]]
[[Shoot the woman]]

[[Category:Agent Black]]

Find the woman

Lovetoread — Sat, 22 Sep 2012 07:46:27 GMT

Lovetoread: Created page with 'You walk down the hallway in search of the woman. You manage to find her also walking down the hallway. She is walking away from you, so probably doesn't know you are there.'

You walk down the hallway in search of the woman. You manage to find her also walking down the hallway. She is walking away from you, so probably doesn't know you are there.

Walk down the driveway

Lovetoread — Sat, 22 Sep 2012 07:39:55 GMT

Lovetoread:

You start walkng down the driveway but you are stopped by a guard dressed in a blac suit. "Sir, the front door is that way. These premises are not to be entered by the guests"

[[Walk up the pathway to the front door (w inv)|Walk up the pathway to the front door]]

[[Category: Agent Black]]

Walk down the driveway

Lovetoread — Sat, 22 Sep 2012 07:38:33 GMT

Lovetoread:

You start walkng down the driveway but you are stopped by a guard. "Sir, the front door is that way. These premises are not to be entered by the guests"

[[Walk up the pathway to the front door (w inv)|Walk up the pathway to the front door]]

[[Category: Agent Black]]

Walk down the driveway

Lovetoread — Sat, 22 Sep 2012 07:36:50 GMT

Lovetoread: Created page with 'You start walkng down the driveway but you are stopped by a guard. "Sir, the front door is that way. These premises are not to be entered by the guests"'

You start walkng down the driveway but you are stopped by a guard. "Sir, the front door is that way. These premises are not to be entered by the guests"

S413 See what else you can do

Lovetoread — Sat, 22 Sep 2012 07:25:10 GMT

Lovetoread:

You want to see if that was just a coinsidence or if it was realy your own power.You wish that the air in here would be a bit cooler, and to your surprise, you don't feel hot anymore.

*[[s413 Fight the cuffs|Fight the cuffs]]
*[[s413 Continue waiting|Continue waiting]]

[[Category: Subject 413]]

Steal his gun and shoot him

Lovetoread — Sat, 22 Sep 2012 04:35:14 GMT

Lovetoread:

You swiftly grab the gun out of his its holster. Demetri whips around to meet the gaze of his own handgun staring him down. A look of terror fills his eyes as you pull the trigger. His body drops to the floor and blood flows from his head. Thankfully, his gun was silenced and it’s unlikely that anybody heard it through the steel door.
You take your weapons back from his pockets and look around the room for some way to get out of the room and search for Anthony. The walls are solid brick all the way around the room. The only ways out are the door and a small air vent in the back of the room.

 [[Go out the door]]
 [[Climb through the air vent]]
 [[Hide and wait until Anthony returns to the room]]

[[Category:Agent Black]]

Claim that you came with someone else

Lovetoread — Sat, 22 Sep 2012 04:33:23 GMT

Lovetoread:

“I came with a partner.”
 “Oh?” Demetri says. “What is his name? What does he look like? Tell me everything you know about him.”
 “His name is Harvey,” you reply. Hopefully, Harvey will forgive you for using him in this interrogation, and hopefully, he won’t get into any problems due to you betraying him like this. “He’s an assassin like me. We both work for the same agency. He’s about six feet tall with yellowish-brown hair, a large, square jaw…” Demetri pulls out a pad and pencil, furiously scribbling notes on it. “a large but narrow jaw, umm…blue eyes, icy blue eyes. He’s a bit pale.”
 “This is good, this is good. Tell me more.”
 You continue talking about Harvey, all the while working on the knot that holds your hands together behind the chair. Finally, you undo the knot and free your hands. When you came to the end of your speech, Demetri asks, “Is there anything else you know that we may want to know?”
 “No,” you reply.
 As Demetri walks towards the door, you pull the rope off of you. You can’t let him leave the room, or else the information you gave him could put Harvey or Fisher in danger. You have to kill him here.

 [[Steal his gun and shoot him]]
 [[Strangle him with the rope]]

[[Category:Agent Black]]

Take the risk

Lovetoread — Sat, 22 Sep 2012 04:17:29 GMT

Lovetoread:

"I'll take the risk," you say.

"As you wish," Harvey replies. You can see he looks sad but it's hard to see with his poker-face on.

You return to your home. You can't sleep at night thinking about what has happened. Suddenly, you feel something sting you near your ear. You try to touch it with your hands to feel what it is but you are paralised. A minute later you die from not being able to breathe. Nice job.

 [[Agent Black|Back to the beginning]]

[[Category:Agent Black]]
[[Category:Endings]]

Take the risk

Lovetoread — Sat, 22 Sep 2012 04:17:13 GMT

Lovetoread:

"I'll take the risk," you say.

"As you wish," Harvey replies. You can see he looks sad but it's hard to see with his poker-face on.

You return to your home. You can't sleep at night thinking about what has happened. Suddenly, you feel something sting you near your ear. You try to touch it with your hands to feel what it is but you are paralised. A minute later you die from not being able to breathe. Nice job.

 Oh, what potential you had.
 [[Agent Black|Back to the beginning]]

[[Category:Agent Black]]
[[Category:Endings]]

User talk:Heyoeveryone

Lovetoread — Sat, 22 Sep 2012 03:56:42 GMT

Lovetoread:

User talk:Platypus

Lovetoread — Sat, 22 Sep 2012 03:54:46 GMT

Lovetoread:

Since this page has become rather cluttered, I've moved old discussions to the archive page below. Feel free to leave new messages here. I'll get back to you ASAP!

*[[User talk:Platypus/Archive1]]
*[[User talk:Platypus/Archive2]]

>Add new comments below. Do not add new comments to the archive.

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Great thanks. Yea, definitely let me know if you think of any stories that would be good for it. From the ones I've read, I think Heyoeveryone's Remember might be the best option. I'm probably going to record in about a week, so let me know before then if you think of any other good options. -[[User:AlexCW|AlexCW]]

Hey. I have been a fan of this site for a while. I am an experienced actor and had the idea of adapting some of these stories to YouTube. Essentially, it would be an audiobook of the story where you click a link at the end of the video to make your choice (leading you to the next part of the story). You seem to be very active on and passionate about this site. I was wondering if you can help me find a well written CYOA story with lots of dialogue. I'd be willing to discuss this idea if you have any input. Thanks! -[[User:AlexCW|AlexCW]]

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Just wanted to ask what happened to the main page and the reason for it. I was gone for a week, then BAM! A template for the featured, only several stories available directly. What is the criterion for the stories to be displayed on the main page, anyways?
--[[User:Snowball|Snowball- The Anti-Adult-Content Resistance Leader]] 13:00, 18 August 2012 (UTC)

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thanks for the advice i'm a big fan of your work your a really big part of this website
Seth Xozen
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yo!! u just deleted my story!!!!!y???
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thank you!!! i should be able to do it. i'm just a terrible speller. did u make this website??? this should be my last post 'cuz i don't want annoy u any more than i have... :]

peeta.luvr
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i tried to catogorize a page on 'Vampires Vs. Werewolfs' but it didn't work... sorry once again :]
peeta.luvr
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Last thing, you respond Fast!!!!p.s i understand if want me to stop posting stuff, sorry 'bout that. :]

peeta.luvr again
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i have a question, my appologies for not asking before on my previous comment, but do you have to read All of the stories posted on this website?? :]

peeta.luvr
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i'm soooo sorry i ignored your first message!! i didn't know what it ment to "catagorize a page" and i still don't know, so i was wondering if you could help by telling me how to!!! please and thanks :]

peeta.luvr
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How exactly do you give your story a catoragory? Sincerely Critic-AL P.S. Please forgive my spelling.
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I Apologize Mr. Platypus, I have realized you are indeed correct however I don't recall seeing this on the main page where was it? Sincerely Critic-AL P.S. I Hope we haven't got off on the wrong foot.
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I Have no clue what your saying Mr. Platypus I Made Medieval Life Myself I was only editing my own story. Unless you know of another medieval life adventure I Have no idea what your saying. More Sincerely this time Critic-AL
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That seems significantly easier; I'll use the move feature to fix the others. Thanks.

-- Fin
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Hey Mr. Platypus The only story I recall editing was my own called medieval life. So if you think i edited another one than how about telling me which one rather than Insulting me so i don't do it again. Not So Sincerely Critic-AL.
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Um... I discovered a better way to organize my story, but, unfortunately, a produced this blank page in the process: [[Verse/Luka=Answer_correctly| this little baby]]
I don't know if you'd have found it otherwise, but I also got a question: will you hate me if I "fix" the previous four pages? Changing the urls from /CYOA/<page> to /CYOA/Luka/<page>. I'll understand if you're opposed, considering it makes you have to do stuff (delete the old ones, I'm guessing), and I don't really mind if it stays like this but... it looks messy as it is, with the pages split. xD

Also: apologies; please don't hate me.

-- Fin
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I don't know if you've received complaints from any other users recently about this, but there is a syntax error that comes up upon clicking the "Trolling in the Mall" page in SSR. Just a heads up.

-- Pterodactyl

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wow, i do not no what your problem is but you honestly need to calm down, big time....

i never did go into a different story and deliberately delete a different page, if it happened it was on accident and something that i did not mean to do or realize what was happening. i would assume that would be understood rather causing such anger towards me as i'm new here.

still don't see how it's even possible that i would have done something as you accuse me of doing when i only, and i repeat, only edited pages which i created for my story. if i did indeed delete somebody else's page as you claim i did than there is many other ways to handle it then calling me out in pure anger, acting as if i did it on purpose, and using caps as if you are yelling at me.

anyway, thank you for making my first experience on this website a bad one and i will keep that in mind as i come back(if i even bother returning now) and also when talking with other people.

-- pissed off and ready to never come back, Hailey
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I just recieved my second warning about not catergorizing pages correctly or pre-empting them with the story title. However, if I did so with the last few entries I've made within any stories, it was a complete accident. I made every attempt to comply. Your message resounded loud and clear, and to be completely honest, you sound like an impudent asshole with severe control issues who prefers to emphasize tone over content. I'll make no more entries, I assure you. In the future, perhaps treat your writers with a little less insolent rudeness and you might not end up with so many endless pages of half-written drivel. (I'm sure you'll erase this message to eradicate the perceived insult, but at least consider what I've said.) [[User:DickingCream]]

: I've gotten a message like this as well. The story was tagged, as far as I could tell - as it was a story ending, I made sure that it linked back to the original story. What exactly did I forget to do? [[User:Wonder Boy]]

Platypus,

I'vev been writing my first CYOA (the transformation laboratory) and I made a ending page and i got a warning, it was in the right categorys so I'm very confused. -supersmew

Hey Platypus,

I'm working on starting The House on Horny Hill. I neglected to save an intermediate page and so some later ones were deleted as orphaned. Could those be recovered so I only have to re-write the page that I forgot to save earlier?
--[[User:DickHardy|DickHardy]] 23:11, 3 April 2012 (UTC)

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Whoa ^^ I get the feeling you're way stricter than my English teacher xp. My spelling and grammar skills are little more than readable I'm afraid. I'm not native English or anything so.. I'll try ^^ (it's only my third language)

It took me over 15 minutes to even figure out what you'd changed on some of those pages ^^, after figuring that out I was left stupefied as to what was wrong with it in the first place -_-. Looks like my grammar may remain beneath your expectations for quite a while yet.. (completely hopeless)

--[[User:Zoroastra|Zoroastra]]

What do you mean 'title of the story?'

-- Apollo.

Playtpus my man {or bird if you are female}
Great place that you have here and fantastic stories going down but l have a slight problem here.
Whenever l try to edit Smutty Sex Romp then this comes up "Permission error...users and bureaucrats allowed."
What in the NINE HELLS does that mean?

-- Apollo

Platypus, sorry i've been no here for a while.....just tell me what ''Choose your own adventure'' are you? I mean what category are you?

Starforce

Ah, OK. But what do you mean by title?

--Starforce

I just made Category: Randy Orton good now?

--Starforce

Then all my pages have the category, if not, example the Pokemon Trainer Academy is PKMN PTA not Pokemon Adventure, it's not my fault it's the creator fault.

--Starforce

--MaxJose

DUDE DID YOU DELETE A BUNCH OF MY STORY PLEASE RESPOND I NEED TO KNOW THIS AND IF YOU DID WHY.

--MaxJose

dude i was wondering if you can find out who did it or if you can get it back i really need this.

== Re: deleteme ==

Oh shit, I guess that makes a lot more sense now that I think about it. Whoops.

My apologies, man. --[[User:TheElderOnes|TheElderOnes]] 03:23, 1 April 2012 (UTC)

Hi. Something has happened to my story. I keep trying to get my page back but it's blank. I clicked restore and it says it's done but the page still says it's been blanked. How or who did that? Was it when I was editing? Could you restore my page/s for me as I can't seem to find out how.
Continuation
*hi again. I know you fixed it but my page was blanked again. Could you tell me how it's happening. All I did was edit the first page of text. I didn't touch the catagory link or the options i only changed the dialog. Is it something I'm doing by mistake. If it happens again how do i fix it myself so i dont have to bother you. If you couldn't tell I'm new at this*

CaptainMorgan30

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Hello. I'm sorry for bothering you, but I have two questions.
1. Can you delete this page for me? http://editthis.info/choose_your_own_adventure/The_next_morning.._*Black_Dress_2%2BDuran%2BMercs*
Thank you very much. The title for the page doesn't fit with the rest of the story and I seemed to have failed at formatting it correctly which leads me to...

2. I'm a little more than confused at how to make the link appear at the top of the page (under the title of said page) which allows you to go back to a point in the story. I've read the tutorial page and stared at the coding for the page trying to figure it out, but I'm utterly perplexed at it. I'd be extremely grateful if you could shed some light on it for me. --[[User:Happyazngirl|Happyazngirl]] 05:46, 12 April 2012 (UTC)

Sorry Platipus,i forgot to do that.Anyway,do you like how i edited your story?

== iWant Sex ==

Hey Platypus,
I'm new to choose your own adventures, and I really can't figure out anything to write about. However, I read your iWant Sex story, and I got many ways it could keep going. What I guess I'm saying, is this: would you mind if I added to iWant Sex?
Bight99

I'd like to thank you on the advice. I read most of the stuff on creating/editing posts. And I wasn't sure what categories meant, so I skipped adding it on my CYOA. Thank you, as in my first stages of this creation any help at all I appreciate. I'm still not sure if I did the right thing, but nevertheless, THANK YOU. :)

== The Neighbors ==

Hey, Platypus, I got your message about leaving a subject, or whatever, but I don't know how to do that. Could you show me exactly how to do what you said?

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== Oops! ==

Sorry... I just had an idea bubble up... I'll try to allocate at least an hour or two for you to push the story in a direction you like from now on. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]

== Pokesex ==

Thanks for the heads up Platypus. I need to remember to add the title. xD
-- Ghengar
== Name of wiki changed ==

More info here:

http://editthis.info/create_your_own_adventure/Wiki_Name_Change_Information

==Pokesex==
Thanks for the heads up about including the titles, I'll be sure to do that from now on. You might be able to see through my edit history (on pokesex) my many, many failed attempts at fixing the previous pages. How should I go about it?

Okay sorry, I will be posting complete pages from now on. It was my first time editing, so I wasn't sure how things worked.
-Thisisme

== Uncategorized pages ==

Sorry, this is my first story, and I down really know all about how to categorize pages besides putting category at the bottom-abcdefg

== Uncategorized pages ==

I don't know how to categorise stories either. Sorry! That's ok if you edit or delete the page that you think is not correctly written! --[[User: Lovetoread|Lovetoread]]
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Thanks Platypus!! Now I know how to categorise! ^_^

User talk:Lovetoread

Lovetoread — Sat, 22 Sep 2012 03:50:05 GMT

Lovetoread:

{{warn1}}--[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 11:25, 12 September 2012 (UTC)

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{{warn2}}--[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 15:33, 20 September 2012 (UTC)

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Categorizing your pages is very easy. If your story is titled ''Agent Black'', then each page should include the line:

<nowiki>[[Category:Agent Black]]</nowiki>

It's that simple. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 15:14, 21 September 2012 (UTC)

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Placing a story as featured is done for two main reasons:

*To highlight an amazing story which has been written out well.

*To advertise the story even further so others can read it too.

It's usually done for the first reason, the second is just a bonus.

And thank you so for the kind words. Means a lot. --[[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] 23:26, 21 September 2012 (UTC)

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User talk:Lovetoread

Lovetoread — Sat, 22 Sep 2012 03:49:01 GMT

Lovetoread:

{{warn1}}--[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 11:25, 12 September 2012 (UTC)

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{{warn2}}--[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 15:33, 20 September 2012 (UTC)

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Categorizing your pages is very easy. If your story is titled ''Agent Black'', then each page should include the line:

<nowiki>[[Category:Agent Black]]</nowiki>

It's that simple. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 15:14, 21 September 2012 (UTC)

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Placing a story as featured is done for two main reasons:

*To highlight an amazing story which has been written out well.

*To advertise the story even further so others can read it too.

It's usually done for the first reason, the second is just a bonus.

And thank you so for the kind words. Means a lot. --[[User:Heyoeveryone|Heyoeveryone]] 23:26, 21 September 2012 (UTC)

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User talk:Lovetoread

Lovetoread — Sat, 22 Sep 2012 03:46:53 GMT

Lovetoread:

User talk:Zephed

Lovetoread — Fri, 21 Sep 2012 15:12:15 GMT

Lovetoread:

User:Lovetoread

Lovetoread — Fri, 21 Sep 2012 14:15:45 GMT

Lovetoread: Created page with '4 words: I love to read!'

4 words: I love to read!

User talk:Heyoeveryone

Lovetoread — Fri, 21 Sep 2012 14:14:16 GMT

Lovetoread:

User talk:Platypus

Lovetoread — Fri, 21 Sep 2012 14:04:43 GMT

Lovetoread:

Tell Harvey you've reconsidered

Lovetoread — Thu, 20 Sep 2012 07:55:04 GMT

Lovetoread: Created page with '"Fine" he says. He puls a gun from his pocket. You only have enough time to think why he is doing this, which, you figure, is because you know too much. You're dead. Try again'

"Fine" he says.
He puls a gun from his pocket. You only have enough time to think why he is doing this, which, you figure, is because you know too much. You're dead. Try again

Take the risk

Lovetoread — Thu, 20 Sep 2012 07:44:18 GMT

Lovetoread: Created page with '"I'll take the risk" you say. "As you wish" Harvey replies. You can see he looks sad but it's hard to see with his poker-face on. You return to your home. You can't sleep at ni…'

"I'll take the risk" you say.

"As you wish" Harvey replies. You can see he looks sad but it's hard to see with his poker-face on.

You return to your home. You can't sleep at night thinking about what has happened. Suddenly, you feel something sting you near your ear. You try to touch it with your hads to feel what it is but you are paralised. A minute later you die from not beaing able to breathe. Nice job.

(just press the back button if you want to chose a different answer)

Keep the job

Lovetoread — Thu, 20 Sep 2012 07:39:35 GMT

Lovetoread: Created page with '"If that's the case I'll keep the job." Harvey loks relieved but it's hard to see with his poker-face on. *Go to your first mission'

"If that's the case I'll keep the job."

Harvey loks relieved but it's hard to see with his poker-face on.

*[[Go to your first mission]]

Say you don't want this job

Lovetoread — Thu, 20 Sep 2012 07:36:18 GMT

Lovetoread:

"I changed my mind, I don't want the job."

Harvey looks at you with a cold expression. You notice a bit of sadness in his face.

"Are you sure? You uknow the Boss won't let you just walk out of here since you know about this place."

*[[Keep the job]]
*[[Take the risk]]

Say you don't want this job

Lovetoread — Thu, 20 Sep 2012 07:35:23 GMT

Lovetoread: Created page with '"I changed my mind, I don't want the job." Harvey looks at you with a cold expression. You notice a bit of sadness in his face. "Are you sure? You uknow the Boss won't let you …'

Why not?

Lovetoread — Thu, 20 Sep 2012 07:29:19 GMT

Lovetoread:

“I suppose so,” you say.
 “Excellent,” says Harvey cheerfully.
 “Isn’t the job dangerous? I’m not going to get killed, am I?” you ask.
 “Not if you do it right,” he replies. “Come on, I’ll introduce you to my boss.”
 He swings the door open, revealing a small room. The room is significantly brighter than the hallway and the floor was dry. There are a few pieces of furniture in the room: a large card table in the middle, some collapsible chairs surrounding it, and a couple floor lamps in the corners. A man is sitting in a chair across the table. He is wearing an expensive suit with a blood red tie. A bald spot on his forehead is creeping up his skull, driving away is well groomed black hair. He has a deep scar his neck, just below his right ear. He is reading a paper as you and Harvey walk into the room. He looks up at you with his icy blue eyes, stares at you for a moment, and then says to Harvey, “Is this the recruit I asked you to bring?”
 “Yeah.” Harvey replies.
 “The boss looks over to you and says, “Do you have combat experience?”
 “I was a soldier,” you reply. An expression flickers across the bosses face, just long enough for you to see it. “I served in Afghanistan,” you add.
 The boss grunts, “That’s a good answer.”
 “He’ll be a great assassin,” Harvey says.
 “I hope so,” grumbles the boss. He turns to you. “Being an assassin ain’t like being a soldier, kid. It ain’t all ‘bang bang drop ‘em dead’ kind of shit. You don’t have any buddies out there. If you get caught no one’s going to bail you out. You’ve got to kill people silently, without anybody even noticing that they are dead. You’ve got to make clean kills. It’s a whole different frame of mind.” His gaze drops down to the page he is holding. “We’ll set up something of a training mission for you.” He focuses his gaze on you again. “I’ve got a client lined up here. It’s a real simple job: sneak into the target’s home, kill him, get out. No strings to get caught up on.” He looks over Harvey and hands him the page “Agent Indigo, you’ll be guiding the tenderfoot through this one.”
 Harvey nods and says, “I’d love to, sir.”
 “Tenderfoot,” the boss continues. “If you carry out this assignment well, we’ll sign you onto our agency. Do this mission poorly…” the boss sighs and rubs the scar on his neck. “This is a high risk, high reward business. Mess up and your life will be on the line.”
 The boss rises from his seat and says, “We’ve been here long enough. It’s dangerous for us all to be in one place for too long” He firmly shakes your hand and says, “It’s a pleasure meeting you.”
 “You too,” you reply and drift off, searching for a name to call your new employer.
 Seeing your difficulties, he responds “Call me Fisher.”
 “Oh, and my name is…”
 “No, I don’t want to hear it. It’s best if we keep anonymous. To protect each other. Fisher’s not even my real name. It’s just a codename.” He starts to shoo you and Harvey out the door. "Matthew 4:19," he adds with a slight smile. “Now, please go. We’ve been here too long.”
 Harvey and you leave the room and Harvey locks the door behind him and returns the key to the lightbulb he found it from. Looking at the paper, he says, “I’ll pick you up at about nine in the morning, okay?”
 “Yeah, that sounds fine,” you respond.
 The two of you walk down the narrow corridor. “I’ll pick up some equipment for you,” Harvey continues. “Some guns, knives, a lock picking set. You know, typical stuff. I’ll give them to you when we meet up tomorrow. Sounds good?”
 “Yeah, that’s fine,” you respond.
 “And I shouldn’t need to tell you this, but don’t tell anyone what you
are doing or where you are going. Just make some shit up.
 “Yeah,” you reply.
 You and Harvey return to the car and head home.

*[[Go to your first mission]]
*[[Say you don't want this job]]

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No way! I’m looking for a job that will pay the bills, not get me killed.

Lovetoread — Thu, 20 Sep 2012 07:21:38 GMT

Lovetoread: Created page with '“No way!,” you reply. “I’m looking for a job that will pay the bills, not get me killed.” “Hey, man, I’m sorry,” he says. “I didn’t mean to offend you…'

“No way!,” you reply. “I’m looking for a job that will pay the bills, not get me killed.”
 “Hey, man, I’m sorry,” he says. “I didn’t mean to offend you. I just though you might be interested…”
 “In killing people I don’t even know for a wad of cash and a pat on the back? No, that’s not my idea of a job.”
 Harvey looks away with a defeated look on his face. “I’m sorry, dude.” He looks nervously at the door and turns back at you. “Listen, let me reschedule my meeting with my boss and I’ll take you back home, okay?”
 “Alright then,” you reply. Harvey walks through the door and shuts it behind him. You hear a trickle of noise coming from behind the door. Pressing your ear up to the door, you can hear someone yelling from the room. His boss must be pissed, you think.
 A moment later, Harvey comes out from the room. The two of you walk back the way you came and return to his car. The whole trip back home, neither you nor Harvey say a word. Harvey pulls up to your apartment building and you step out. Harvey runs around the back of the car and up to you, saying “I’m sorry this didn’t go over so well. Maybe if you change you mind, you can call me.”
 “Alright,” you say, and head back to your apartment, knowing that you will never take that job. You return to your couch and turn on the television. Your soap is over. Now it’s some wacky Spanish game show. You lie down on your couch and watch the television. At the end of the week, you find a job as an auto mechanic.
 Oh, what potential you had.
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Hey, why the hell not? I don’t have anything better to do today.

Lovetoread — Thu, 20 Sep 2012 07:20:58 GMT

Lovetoread:

“Hey, why the hell not?” you say. “I don’t have anything better to do today.”
 Harvey jumps up from the couch. “Great,” he says. He trots over to the door saying, “I’ve got my car parked outside this building. Come on.”
 You get up from the couch and follow him to his car.
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The car rolls along a narrow, dirty road in Boston. To the right of the road is a wall of dilapidated buildings. Some of them appear to still be in use by squatters looking for free housing, others by criminal syndicates, but most are completely empty and falling dangerously into disrepair. Their dirty brick walls are crumbling and large holes are torn in the roofs. You wonder why Harvey is bringing you to this run down and dangerous part of town. What business he could possibly be doing here? you ask yourself.
 Harvey pulls into a shabby-looking warehouse at the end of the street. He and you exit the vehicle and Harvey leads you out of the building towards the side of the warehouse. You follow him, looking all around you nervously. This place scares you. The whole place is deadly quiet, with the only sound being the familiar white noise of the bay. You feel uneasy about the place. Harvey approaches a bunch of drums crowded around the side of the warehouse. He rolls one away and pulls up a flattened cardboard box lying on the ground, revealing a hatch. He looks over his shoulder before opening the hatch. Down the hatch, you see a row of dark stairs leading into a dimly lit corridor. “You first,” Harvey says to you, motioning to stairs. Slowly, you make your way down the stairs and into the wet concrete corridor. Harvey follows you down the stairs, closing the hatch behind him. “Go on,” he says to you. “It’s the door at the very end of the corridor.”
 You walk down the stretch of the corridor with Harvey following. Water splashes underneath your feet. You can hear the echoes of mice resonating down the corridor. There are plenty of dark shadows along this stretch of concrete. You feel even more uneasy in this place than outside. But Harvey is here, and if he is okay in this place, it must be safe. After trudging down the corridor for what felt like a half hour, you are greeted by a large metal door with peeling green paint. Harvey reaches up and twists off a burnt out light bulb above the door. He shakes the bulb and a key falls out into his hand. He turns to you and says, “Listen, bud. I’m not really a flight attendant.”
 “What?” you exclaim. “What the hell do you do, then?”
 “I’m a contract assassin,” he says.
 “A hitman?”
 “It’s a good job, man. I get to travel a lot. There are always people who need my service. And the pay is great.” He pauses for a moment. “Well, what do you say? You interested?”

*[[Why not?]]
*[[No way! I’m looking for a job that will pay the bills, not get me killed.]]

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