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Copying Platypus and creating archives! But please, don't leave me messages on my archive pages. Leave them here...
Copying Platypus and creating archives! But please, don't leave me messages on my archive pages. Leave them here...
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Leave me a message. Naughty, nice, happy, sad, I love talking to people so want to hear from you!
Leave me a message. Naughty, nice, happy, sad, I love talking to people so want to hear from you!
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Hey I just got back here coz i havent been active for a while though. So far I cant write story without inspiration. Well I think I can move on from that except playing computer or CF.--[[User:michaeltamayo|GUY WITHOUTBALLS]]
 
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== [[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] ==
 
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I know trans women don't generally get treated that way in real life, but I may be injecting a bit of my own fantasy into it. I mean, the whole thing started as my fantasies so lol. Surprisingly progressive rapists and burglars. In real life trans women struggle to get practically anyone who knows to accept them as a real woman.
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== [[User:Darth Malcolm|Darth Malcolm]] ==
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But they are real women, and unless it's really necessary to the story overall I'd rather not have it be a big huge thing every time I want to write a sex scene for her. The alternative is me writing Janet being beaten or tortured by the burglars for having a dick, and I don't want to do that. Not right there, at least. Maybe in another branch and done by someone else.
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We don't know each other. But I appreciate you, and I thought you should know.
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As for your friend, I would ask them what to refer to them as. I'm betting she/her but it's better to ask and be sure. Then try to use those pronouns as often as possible as long as it's safe, even if they're not around. Like unless you would be revealing their transgender status to someone they want to keep it a secret to, it's best to keep using it. It may take some getting used to but it's worth it to show them you care enough about them.
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--[[User:Darth Malcolm|Darth Malcolm]] 02:09, 3 December 2021 (UTC)
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They'll likely face many people who, often intentionally, will call them by the wrong pronouns. Having someone consistently use the right pronouns and name is a huge boost in confidence.
 
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I'll see what I can do for the cafe next. I've kinda been doing things as they occur to me :v --[[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 06:21, 26 May 2016 (UTC)
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== [[User:Teejay|Teejay]] ==
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Try not to think of it in terms of you feeling like a guy. Think of it like, you feel like yourself, a woman, but your birth certificate says male, your parents raised you as a boy, you have a penis (which is not always a problem, plenty of trans women don't have a problem having a penis, it's other people that have the problem with it,) and unless you got the hint early and everybody was okay with it, you've seen a guy in the mirror your whole life. There's a lot more to it but that's the gist.
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Epitaph for a gunslinger:
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You want to look how you feel, you want people to acknowledge that you're a woman, you don't want to have the same conversations, the same questions every time someone finds out, you just went to be you, but all of this is difficult to accomplish.
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Here lies Lester Moore
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Sorry about Marie's story. I kind of used her branch as a dumping ground for my darker thoughts for some reason. I was remembering pretty dark times and wanted to get those out. I was considering adding a couple of other characters once I've got more done on the ones I have on there. I have some ideas. Happier ones. Keep an eye out for those :v. --[[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 06:53, 26 May 2016 (UTC) <font color=white> p.s. the answer is yes, I am, but don't tell anyone plz?</font color>.
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Four shots from a .44
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I've considered getting a keyboard to use for my tablet, but the problem is we never have more than a couple dollars to spare. That, and my charger (which wasn't made for a tablet) uses the USB port and isn't very effective, so I have to keep it plugged in most of the time. If I had a replacement for the original charger this wouldn't be a problem, though.
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No Les, no more.
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It would only be a quick fix, but I would swing it if I could. Having a laptop would open up a lot more options even if it was a cheap one, and I'm hoping I can get one soon, or get the one I have to function as more than a paperweight. This tablet just generally refuses to work for making digital art, for instance.
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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The rules thing, I mean I can kinda understand because I guess they didn't even have a rules page for a while? But me personally I always try to find out just what's allowed somewhere before I put something up. I hate running into situations where I'm breaking rules or just generally fudging everything because I didn't know. Ran into that with the DeviantArt account I had made a long time ago for my explicit art. Which they don't allow. :v
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I've seen the all the problems begin with MEN on a T-shirt. I've been tempted to get it for my GF.  
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Sorry. -- [[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 20:52, 27 May 2016 (UTC)
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The Lester Moore epitaph is very famous. I'm surprised you've never seen it before.
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Bluetooth. So, I have a wireless mouse that I wanted to see if it would pair with my tablet. Idk if the mouse is bluetooth or not but I figured I'd give it a shot. Well, after searching all through my settings, it looks like my tablet might not even be capable of Bluetooth. So, that's out I guess.
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That poem sounds like it was written by a guilt free Catholic school girl. :)
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Having a chat based cyoa does sound like an interesting idea! --[[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 19:36, 29 May 2016 (UTC)
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Well, the back of it says Nextablet and I think it's android 4.1. Beyond that I'm not sure what information is important.
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A judge was doing arraignments, and the prisoners were in the holding cell of the courthouse, being called forward one by one. Four men were left in the cell when the judge looked at his next case:
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I've seen some terrible messages but I've never seen any quite that bad that I could still sorta tell what they were saying. I've seen some that were probably drunk at the time that, they were clearly typing something but fuck if I was ever going to learn what it was.
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State of California vs. Steven Lewon Crook
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Makes me think of those ciphers where you're supposed to read one letter as another letter, like cddc actually means abba or ere means bob, but if they did it with whole words instead of letters. Like idk fish means cat and tree means deepthroat or something.
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"Crook!" said the judge. "Step forward!"
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If you don't want to copy mine because you don't want to copy someone then it doesn't matter to me if you do. If you don't want to copy it because it's a huge pain in the ass then that's perfectly understandable, there's probably so many easier ways to do that and I just don't know them lol.
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All four men stepped out of the holding cell.
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I was initially going to do mine so it looked more like AIM or YIM, which was kind of how it ended up looking the first way I did it, but your words in bubbles gave me the idea to try to make it look more like Facebook Messenger app, so I fiddled with that til it looked more or less like I wanted. Thank you for sharing that :v. -- [[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 04:51, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Thank you for making the template! I'll keep using that format for that conversation/that character's branch whenever chat comes up, but I think I may try something else for other characters/conversations.
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You did a good job with it. As far as I can tell from years of practice, good oral sex when a man goes down on a woman involves being gentle, tonguing her clit, rubbing it while you slip your tongue inside her, and basically following her body's cues until she gushes on your face (and then doing it again and again.)
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I'm thinking something more along the lines of a box that looks kinda like a yahoo messenger window, especially if I can make it scroll vertically within the box. That seems like it'd be easier to reuse/make a template of, though I've never made one before personally.
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I really need to get back to writing in general but IRL stuff's been on my mind. Rent stuff. -- [[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 18:33, 6 June 2016 (UTC)
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I judge Teddy to be about 13. He'll lose interest eventually, probably sooner rather than later.
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I will keep the offer in mind :v. I'm looking into a bunch of different things to hopefully keep this from happening again in the future. I completely understand not having anything left by the end of the month, not just from our current situation, pretty much my entire life has been like that with my family. We moved across the country because we couldn't afford the house we were living in. We were never able to keep a house longer than like a couple years, and we kept moving back in with my grandparents.
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Headline spotted recently: MILF BRACES FOR FAP OFFENSIVE
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But yeah, if we can get through this month we're going to do everything we can to keep it from getting to this point again. Editing/proofreading definitely falls within the realm of things I can do, thank you for offering :v. -- [[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 17:49, 13 June 2016 (UTC)
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My reaction: "Whiskey... Tango... Foxtrot?"
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Thank you :v.
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I was actually coming on here to message you. I've been thinking about the problem with the chat bubbles. I was wondering if wrapping them in a frame like a table or something might give a rightmost side for the bubble to stick to? Something kind of like the other chat window I was working on, perhaps, or at least the part that scrolls?
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Maybe they are. When I'm alone in the apartment I'll walk around in my underwear, so maybe they just don't think about it.
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I barely know how to use templates, but I was thinking if there was a way to put like a template within a template or something it might be possible? Thought I'd bring it up and see what you thought. -- [[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 04:26, 20 June 2016 (UTC)
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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You probably saw, but I sorted the problem with the bubbles out and made a phone template to go with them! I'm thinking about reusing the code from the bubble templates and making two more universal chat bubble templates, though.
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After what happened, no terrorist will come near any of her other concerts. You know security will be ridiculously tight. Definitely go if you want to. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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The bubbles were pretty much entirely you, I just added some bits to make it do the thing. I didn't see any solutions for making the jc101 bubble stick to the right without ignoring the rest of the page, ''and'' only expand inward instead of off the right, so I had to make it float right, then force it to stack properly with the harukosama bubbles by giving them both a margin in the opposite direction.
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A psychiatrist and a proctologist share an office building. They put up a sign on the front: THE DEPARTMENT OF ODDS AND ENDS. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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It kinda feels like a cheap solution but it's the only thing I could get to work. The first time I applied the float right, all the bubbles just kind of mixed together.
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Your English isn't getting worse. What you're describing doesn't have a formal name.  
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Then I spent way too long obsessing over the phone template until it got to what it looks like now. Once I was done with everything I spent several minutes just scrolling the chat window up and down and giggling to myself.
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More... h'mmm. Climb and boink, where she climbs a tree and the guys have to climb up to her and boink her. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I made the phone and my other chat window template to more or less be usable by whoever. Maybe it'd work for if you wanted to go with your idea for a story with texts? One thing I'm curious about though is, I only know how the phone template looks on mobile, I'm hoping the desktop version doesn't have an annoying scroll bar or anything.
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In a single day, Samson slew a thousand Philistines with the jawbone of an ass. Every day, thousands of sales are killed with the same weapon. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I've been obsessed with coding these things since I started figuring things out but I still haven't gotten back into the swing of writing yet. Thank you for showing me it was possible to do more than just put text on a page here. Once I do get back to writing, there's so much more I still want to do. -- [[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 06:15, 22 June 2016 (UTC) (P.S. Sorry I'm rambling. I'm just really excited.)
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Even for me, a very fast reader, that took a good chunk of time to read. You're an excellent writer and it's very well written. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Thanks! I didn't know there were scroll bars in the chatroom template but that doesn't matter as much. I made the box to scroll but I didn't know if the scroll bars would be different on desktop or not. I need to rewrite the context but I was kind of going for a chat window like Yahoo Messenger and I made sure the message field and the "typing" field would scroll if the text got too long instead of stretching.
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I'm quite honored. :) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I was more worried about the smartphone text template, but I used basically the same scrolling window code for that as I used for the messenger window so I assume there is one there too. On my screen, the scroll bar is barely a sliver that only appears when I scroll up and down so it's not obtrusive, which I guess is what I'm more worried about especially with the chat bubbles on the right side. Thank you for letting me know what that looked like :v -- [[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 09:10, 22 June 2016 (UTC)
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That's very understandable. I do the same thing with the stories I write for Literotica. It's a way of expressing myself and doing things I can't do IRL. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Go right ahead :v. I was kinda hoping more people would use the templates than just me, though I might still change some things about the templates, so let me know if I break something if I do?
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When the Angles (with the Saxons) invaded England, they settled in what became known as the Land Debatable, namely the north of England and the south of Scotland. The acute Angles went north and the obtuse ones south. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I'm going to experiment with a couple things. Since I know I can use {{{}}} to change parts of the code itself, I'm going to look into allowing the person using the template to change things like color schemes for the chat window and font, and I may be able to make a universal chat bubble that you can put to the left or right as needed as well as changing the color of the text and the bubble. Could make things much easier and more versatile to use :v-- [[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 19:37, 28 June 2016 (UTC)
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Very awesome band. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Sorry the new text bubble template is a bit complicated to use. I tried to make it as streamlined as possible, as in people using it not having to out in a bunch of code themselves, while still giving as many options as needed, but there were some things I just couldn't figure out how to simplify.
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We all have hidden desires. That's one of yours. It doesn't surprise me. Hope you're doing well. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I might have been able to replace the short margin by making it the same variable as the alignment, so if it was set to float left or right then the 5px margin would be on the same side, but I couldn't think of a way to make the 20px margin automatically set to the opposite side, and if I removed it entirely it would just be stacked bubbles of mostly the same width which would defeat the purpose of designing them that way in the first place.
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I'm glad you got to show off and didn't get in trouble. And you ''are'' quite attractive, especially to people who, unlike me, don't prefer women who are as wide as they are tall.  
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If you went to mess with the code or make the names of the variables less wordy you can totally do that though, I just gave them the first names that came to mind.
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I kind of froze up on the scooter thing. Sorry. I should have handled it better.
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A yeah I made it so the bubbles can be told to either float left or float right, and hopefully the part of the code that says "clear: both;" will make it so that even if the bubbles are put in a larger field they won't float next to each other and I won't have to change the margins again if I try to do something like that. That's how that's supposed to work, anyway, but I'm not sure if I did it right.
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Glad to hear that you and your husband still lust each other, in addition to loving each other. Enjoy! -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I hate the 20 minute rule. It seems mostly unnecessary for it to be that long, and I haven't been able to successfully link anything at all because of it. My session keeps timing out before I can submit the captcha. Which is gonna suck if I ever want to start my planned idea for a more point and click type cyoa (not that I need another unfinished project but yknow.)
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When you used the phrase "get off my chest," it brought to mind an old Dilbert.
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I did have an idea though for your emoticons and I was thinking it might work better for you than for me because the one website I've found that does technically work on mobile is still absolutely terrible on mobile, but there are websites that make pixel art into CSS code, you just have to figure out how to restructure the code so it works on this site. But it should be more or less the same structure as that space invader pixel art object you added to my talk page when it's done. You could make pixel art emoticons then use them instead of external images. And you can probably make those into a template, too.
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Dogbert: "This is the thief who took the decoy lunch...which we laced with synthetic female hormones!"
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I spent probably 6 hours making that phone and getting the bubbles to do what I wanted the first time around. Probably more since then. Like I'm sure you'd have figured all of this out too if you spent several hours doing virtually nothing but poking at it until it worked, but I'm sure you have other things going on in your life, and you've actually been doing other things around the site. Meanwhile, I have things I probably ''should'' be doing, but I fixate on anything ''but'' what I need to be doing instead.
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Wally: "You can't prove anything!"
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I'm glad I've learned so much, and maybe it'll apply to other ends later, but the fact that I spent so much concentrated time and effort learning how to code these things for choose your own smut isn't something I feel particularly proud of lol.
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Dogbert: "Is there something you'd like to get off your chest?" -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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However you decide to proceed with your text project, best of luck :v -- [[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 07:09, 29 June 2016 (UTC) (P.S. sorry for such a long message.)
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That works. :) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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'''kushagragour.in/lab/picssel-art/''' this one was the one i found that worked for pixels. The table smiley you put in my talk page, idk why but it's weirdly stretched vertically. The tool at this link puts out a code that looks a lot like that space invader you put on my talk page except using px instead of em. I don't have the patience for it because the input box is tiny and it doesn't respond if I zoom into it, so I have to be zoomed out to do everything. Would be different if I were on a computer, though. I was going to use it for something else.
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Believe me, I understand the frustration. The (late) mother of my children and I had a spectacular love life until our first child was born. After that, it was impossible, nearly, to find time. When we did, she clearly released a lot of pent up energy. I hope you find some (safe) way of releasing yours. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I was thinking about using chyoa as well, and I might do so in the future, but at first I came here because chyoa had rules against what I had in mind for writing. I came here initially to write my ideas for Marie, and chyoa has rules against some of the things I had planned.
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A Republican politician is giving a speech at a large public auditorium and making all sorts of promises everyone knows are a bunch of hot air. A heckler stands up and bellows, "All that will happen when pigs fly!"
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I don't just enjoy writing and art. If I'm not doing or haven't done something creative in some way I feel like I'm wasting my time. Even though half the time I can't will myself to even pick up my sketchbook. I don't think I'm a very good artist yet, or writer, but I keep trying because I feel like I need to, even if I never finish anything.
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The Republican beckons the heckler onto the stage. Thrusting the microphone under the heckler's nose, he says, "Let me guess. You're a liberal."
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Writing here was a bit of a big step for me because prior to this I barely shared any of my work anywhere. Mostly because I never finish anything, though this medium kind of favors unfinished works, it would seem.
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The heckler replies with, "My grandfather was a Democrat, my father was a Democrat, and I am and always will be a Democrat."
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I used to play a lot of videogames, before my laptop died, before I moved and had to leave a ps3 behind. Not that I really got to use the ps3 all that much while I was there, other people kept hogging it. I'd kill to play fallout. Any fallout. Even 1 and 2.
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The Republican, unfazed, responds smoothly with, "Suppose your grandfather had been a jackass and your father had been a jackass. What would that make you?"
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Lately I've been stuck with Pixel Dungeon (which I both recommend playing and staying as far away from as possible. It's addictive and frustrating as hell.) and the basketball mini game that Facebook messenger has. I had fallout shelter but after a while that kinda becomes just, the same thing over and over.
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Without missing a beat, the heckler booms, "A Republican!"
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For what it's worth, I haven't really noticed anything wrong with the way you write that I myself as a native English speaker wouldn't do. And I don't know any Chinese at all so you're a leg up on me there.
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I'm going to bed though. I'm dead tired and I plan to do stuff tomorrow. I hope you have a good day! Sorry for the long message again. -- [[User:Intheworstways|In The Worst Ways]] 08:39, 29 June 2016 (UTC)
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Comment from an Internet comment thread:
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== [[User:Teejay|Teejay]] ==
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When the deer have guns too, then and only then will hunting be considered an actual sport. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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E-mail sent. I was offline all day today, just now had a chance to pop on.  
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Those were awesome. And a little too close to my reality to make me laugh. I actually had the conversation in #14 with both my (now passed) wives. And knowing that words don't work in that situation, I ended up going down on them and after they were cummed out, sticking my head up and saying, "Did that answer your question?" -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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You. You are my dirty nerdy girl. *blows kiss*  -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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A classic from the Golden Age. Back when those kind of movies had actual plot. Watched both it and the original Taboo in the same week... about 22 years ago. I recommend it. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I know zilch about programming. Strictly an applications guy.
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Technically, you'd have to ask Platypus, he's the one who created the "base" characters for SSR, but I'm on the assumption that it's no coincidence the slut neighbor is named "Debbie".  
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How many computer programmers does it take to change a light bulb joke?
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P.S. I turn 44 in October. From the information publicly available already, that I'm old enough to to have two kids one of whom is a teenager, you probably could have guessed pretty close to the correct answer. And if I watched those movies 22 years ago, well you have to be at least 18 to watch them so that would in and of itself imply at least 40. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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100. 1 to change the joke, and 99 to submit "How many programmers does it take to change a light bulb? Incorrect, that is a hardware problem." -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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They were younger children when I wrote that intro, back about 6 years ago when I first found this site :) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Email replied to. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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It's well written. I don't want to think about it too much because that kind of thing, even though it's only fantasy, still turns my stomach a bit. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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At least they tried, and despite a few typos, I thought they did a reasonable job. It's not the best I've ever read, but it's not anywhere near the worst either. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Man in doctor's office: "My name is Daniel Nathan Reed. I don't initial ''anything''." :) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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You could tell that the author was young and male. But with a bit more practice, they'll learn what words to avoid and their writing will mature.
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From the late George Carlin:
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It took me a few years to get it down. This was my first successful effort: www.literotica.com/s/alexandra-1
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Hospitals often name a new facility after the person who makes the major donation. I grew up with a neighborhood guy who is now extremely wealthy, and I'm hoping someday he'll make a big donation. I just want to drive past the hospital and see the No-Balls Malone Cancer Pavilion. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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It's not easy to write from a woman's perspective if you're male, but it is doable. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Can you guess what book I'm reading just from the chapter titles? :)
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How about "The Best New Breasts"? -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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The ''Tomahawk'' * Good Samaritan * Earthport * The Astrogators' Guild * "...Your Money And My Know-How..." * "Spaceman" Jones * Eldreth * Three Ways To Get Ahead * Chartsman Jones * Garson's Planet * "Through The Cargo Hatch" * Halcyon * Transition * Anywhere * "This Isn't A Picnic" * "-- Over A Hundred Years --" * Charity * Civilization * A Friend In Need * "-- A Ship Is Not Just Steel --" * The Captain Of The ''Asgard'' * The ''Tomahawk''
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I don't know if I have such a hat, but I'll try.
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(Yep, the first and last chapters have the same title.) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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"The Breast New Thing!" "Perfect For Breast Men!" "New Discovery -- Stay Abreast!" -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Finished ''Starman Jones'' and now I'm reading an even older book, one published over 100 years ago. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I'll post one more option for The Exhibitionist, and hope it cheers you up. And I'll beam over nice thoughts.  -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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A census worker was going house to house collecting information, and knocks on the door of an apartment. The only resident is a 25-year-old woman. After explaining why he's there, he starts to record the information. They get to the line for Occupation, and she says, "Hooker."
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Glad to hear it. I'll still send over nice thoughts. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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"I can't put that."
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Send the rain over here, we could use it. :) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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"Then put prostitute."
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Just reading that link made ME want to slice that teacher's throat. I can't stand when authority figures (of any gender) use their position to abuse vulnerable minors. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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"That's not a legal occupation. I can't put that!"
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I know it's real. And you've been through things I don't even want to imagine. I hope you always have a loving, caring partner from now on who can help you keep what happened quelled. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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"Okay, put down chicken farmer."
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Just read what you posted in reply to Fredhot16. And now I feel ''really'' honored. You know very well why.
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"Chicken farmer?"
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P.S. -- I think you're a beautiful person. And that has nothing to do with your looks (although you are nice looking.) You've been through so much, and somehow emerged without being totally shattered. You're a terrific writer and an amazing an courageous human being. Like I've said before, I wish you and your husband and child many years of happiness together as a family. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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"Yeah. Last year I raised 1,000 cocks."
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I have not played any of the Fallout games.
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I know nothing about the Fallout world. But I was able to piece together enough to make the story sensible. And as always, your talent for writing shines through. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Also, I noticed there are still some redlinks on The Exhibitionist. Did you plan to fill those? -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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In England, there is a charitable group called the Women's Association that operates nationwide. The local branches are named for the localities (London Women's Association, Nottingham Women's Association, Sheffield Women's Association, &c.)
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When the group opened a branch in the village of Ugley, the local branch -- with good reason -- did not want to be the Ugley Women's Association. So they changed their name to the Women's Association (Ugley Division.) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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When asked to use the word "horticulture" in a sentence, Dorothy Parker instantly replied, "You can lead a horticulture but you can't make her think." -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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What movie did I just watch?
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"I'm here to deliver a message from Mr. Lacombe." "Just you?" "I don't see anyone else around. Mr. Lacombe said to tell you... camel jockeys... that if you fuck with him, he's gonna cut off your balls and stick 'em up your ass. [samples food on table] You guys eat this shit?" "You are a dead man." "I'm not afraid to die... are you?" "No... Allah protects us." "Well, then... [smashes other guy's face into table] this shouldn't hurt!" -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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The movie is the 1991 film "The Hitman", starring Michael Parks, Al Waxman, Alberta Watson and Ken Pogue. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I read your blog, remember? I know the horrors you experienced.  
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A biology teacher in an all girls high school decides to see if the pupils have studied the day's lesson.
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If I had met you while you were in high school, I would have taken you in and gotten you clean and sober. Or at least done everything possible to do so. I actually did that for the daughter of a friend when she went through her very rough high school years (both her parents were strung out on drugs.) This particular person is about 2-3 years older than you.
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"Kate, what part of the human body, when stimulated properly, expands to six times it's normal size?"
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Like I said, you're amazing. And awesome. I wouldn't wish what you went through on my worst enemy if I had one. Any you came through it, surviving somehow. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Kate blushes and stammers, "That's.... inappropriate to ask."
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Sticking to the questions you asked: you did a fantastic job of writing that. I can't write 1/10 that well. (I suppose you're particularly good at writing scenes like that because you can draw on actual memories.) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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"Jill, what part of the human body, when stimulated properly, expands to six times its normal size?"
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I see you're reviewing stories. What do you think of this one? :)
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"The pupil of the eye, in dim light."
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http://www.editthis.info/create_your_own_story/A_Day_At_The_Races
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"Correct. Kate, three things. One, you didn't study. Two, you have a dirty mind. Three, you're going to be very disappointed."
-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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If you want a nice, short, sane adult story to review to take your mind off The Devil's Daughter, I recommend A Big Ugly Story. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Sorry you're feeling ill. Hope you and your son recover quickly. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Your review was quite accurate. And a description of exactly what I was aiming for -- realistic physical descriptions, quick on the sex since it is in the Adult stories section. Glad I achieved my goal, even if my work on the story petered out relatively quickly. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Those were good.
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Yes, there is feedback on the review. Unless you meant your review of the End of the World, in which case, i agree with your review. For my feedback on your review of my story see the comment just above this one. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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A brilliant young student at Trinity / Computed the cube of infinity / But the number of digits / Gave him the fidgets / He chucked math and took up divinity.
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I would not dare to insist you do anything, but I would suggest that your next story review by the completed adult story "Megan". -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Connors said "Bet that I'll beat ya"/ To the odd-shaped mechanical creature / But it won in straight sets / And then quipped at the net / "Bjorn Cyborg's the name. Glad to meet ya."
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Whew! I'm finally done moving. Now I can get back online. I missed you. -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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A robot with lofty inflection / Read Stein in the poetry section / But read it "Arose / Is arose is arose" / And thought it concerned resurrection.  
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Thank you. I'll like it a lot better once everything is unpacked and installed. :) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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An epicure dining at Crewe / Found a rather large mouse in his stew / Cried the waiter, "Don't shout / And wave it about / Or the rest will be wanting one too."
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==[[User:117|117]]==
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Hey there, got your message on my talk. Thanks for the compliments, didn't think anyone was reading, it made my day. Just remember, when you read my stories; it doesn't have to end in sex :D
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Do you think you could leave a link or something on my story where I went wrong? I got lost trying to find the correct story branch that I was looking for. -- [[User:117|117]]
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P.S: Still getting used to messaging people on here. 26 May 2016
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There we go. I've edited it and I think that's everything. Thanks for looking out. --[[User:117|117]] 27 May 2016
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There once was a cook from New York / Who claimed you should always stew pork / He says he once tried / To eat some of it fried / And found he would rather chew cork.  
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==[[User:Platypus|Platypus]]==
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The whole pink dildo thing makes me think of the thirteen-year-olds in science class snickering because the teacher said 'Uranus'.  Yes, I think this one is very young.
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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The idea of an invisible story is kind of amusing, though. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 16:43, 26 May 2016 (UTC)
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That was a good one. :) -- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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That penis is between you & Zenclair.  I'm not touching it. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 09:57, 27 May 2016 (UTC)
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A wonderful passage from the book I'm reading (and I'm wondering if you know the book...)
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Your fantasy is no stranger than many of the fantasies that make up SSR, and it's possibly more normal than many.  I'm sure I can find a place in SSR where it could be worked in. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 15:36, 1 June 2016 (UTC)
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"When we looked to the south from this depot we saw no clouds; there was nothing but hard clear sky. The sky gave no indication of the blizzard winds that were to assail us when we reached the plateau, and after we had gone as far south as we could and retraced our footsteps to the depot, we looked back and saw the same clear sky, with a few wisps of fleecy cloud in it. We had no doubt that below those clouds the pitiless gale was still raging across the great frozen plain..."
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You new review idea looks like it's got potential, especially since the old reviewer seems to have permanently retired. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 15:46, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I've never played any of the Fallout games, although I was in a D&D campaign where we had to save Harry Potter from the threat of Nuka-Cola, with some help from the Men In Black. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 16:55, 16 June 2016 (UTC)
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Very sorry about your cousin.
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Thanks for the heads up about Life of a 13 year old.  I'd rather not be the site censor, but I suppose someone has to be. And the whole idea of a uterus-piercing path sounds pretty vile. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 11:26, 29 June 2016 (UTC)
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I'm glad you've found some books you like. Reading is one of life's great pleasures.  
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==Fredhot16==
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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You might want to sit down and get comfortable. I know we haven' talked  in about a month so here's a month's worth of talking. (Note: This may seem incomplete but that's because my computer is a bit wonky and what I had previously wrote disappeared when I had to close the window. I'll finish it later.)
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Darky:
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You will not be punished, as you did not intentionally do anything wrong and you were honest. These things do sometimes happen. You are not in trouble.
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Sex scenes: You know what...I don't necessarily DISAGREE with you.
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(Hugs you tightly and gently runs my hand through your hair comfortingly)
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Think I've been here too long: Hey, remember the Adult Story CYOA "Now you're a girl!"? I found myself thinking about how the potential was wasted in the story as one could easily write the guy exploring his new body and it wouldn't even be too outlandish. The thought made me realize I've been hanging around the dark sections of Create Your Own Story for too long. And yet I can't...stop...looking... P.S The sheer scale of spelling and grammar mistakes on this website is just short of "Kill myself by setting myself on fire" depressing. Nobody even tried to double check their work and fix common mistakes. Spell checking isn't hard! Ah, well, guess there's only one thing to do: I call forth the power of Grammarskull!  ‎
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Too many ideas: I think the biggest problem I have is that I have too many story ideas to work on. There's about 5 CYOSs listed on my introduction page and I have about 15-17 story ideas outside of this website. The sheer amount of content I have planned for all of these ideas is truly staggering. That's why I haven't been able to pull my weight on the collaboration with Teejay over Anime School. Also, this is the month of Ramadan so I won't be able to touch any of the Adult CYOSs until July 7 or, at the very most, July 10. Edit: Heh. You really want to compare? Just say the word. 
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Maybe try going out with the blouse *almost* all the way unbuttoned?
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Anime School: 
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I wish you lived closer. I would love for your family and mine to be real-life friends.
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Common descriptions in CYOS: I've noticed that common breast descriptions are either of the buxom variety or they are commonly described as "small and perky". Are...are small and perky breasts really that popular? Also, the habit of describing breasts by band width and cup size like 52D or 42B is WAY too common around here. Writing is supposed to help you imagine what's been written. Using measurements as descriptions doesn't help visualize breasts as I don't think most people could quickly imagine what the size of the chest is by knowing the bandwidth and cup size like that. I mean, if you're using measurements in a profile, that's...possibly acceptable but it doesn't do to be in the actual narration.
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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CYOS that needs some love: There's this CYOS called One Princess, Four Princes, Choices in the Mature Story section that's woefully without much content. Maybe you could give it some good old CYOS love?
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Still not in trouble. You need comfort, not anger, right now.
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--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 17:23 (Louisiana Time), 9 June 2016
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(gently cradles you against my chest like a parent cradles a baby, to relax you and make you feel less stressed)
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Well, if it makes you feel any better, I'd rather read about YOUR sexual adventures then the sexual adventures those fictional women with breasts the size of their heads. Also, I don't think they're really trying to learn how women work, just how ''BEWBS'' work. Eh, at least they're learning ''something''. I'll give them that. Edit: and by them learning, I was forced to learn it as well! And knowing is half the battle! The other half, apparently, is lots of rampant sex. --[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 01:17 (Louisiana Time), 11 June 2016
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Oh. Ah, well, you see, I wasn't really-I can see why you would think that but-come on, I don't really think that you don't have a life! You look like the coolest OG, yo! You know...just lying on the couch...in a dress, gown, negligee, whatever... presumably sleeping off a hangover...well, your "Winnie the Pooh" thing under the pillow looks kinda neat. That definitely proves you have a life! Also, how long until you get a better internet connection?--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 15:57 (Louisiana Time), 12 June 2016
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I know all about real ones. Did I ever mention that my (late) father used to be a construction worker? And I'm glad you got out and managed to get some of your pent-up desire released.  
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Hey! How do you know I'm not a girl, too?--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 16:28 (Louisiana Time), 12 June 2016
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Alright, 4 things:
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Freezing in place (normally in shock) ''is'' a fairly normal reaction when something like that happens... also, if it's crowded, there may not be a lot of room to move.
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A. Random question: who do you like, Wolverine or Cyclops?
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If "he" had instead been "she" doing the touching, how would you have reacted?
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B. Are the pictures you've put on your page pictures of you or just random pictures?
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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C.Hmmm. Could be a girl. May be I'm just a anthropomorphic "grill". What if I am? Would it matter?
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If you lived close by, I'm sure I could talk my girlfriend into gently giving your rear the occasional grope. :)
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D. You know, I think you just might be one of-scratch that, the ''only'' writer on this website I have a inkling of respect for because you're the only writer who actually CARES about her work, who's trying to ''write''. You seem to put more effort in your writing then I've seen in 90% of adult CYOSs and for that, you have my regard. 
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 12:44 (Louisiana Time), 14 June 2016
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I'm 100% certain it's the look the cop gives everyone. It's designed to make anyone thinking about executing a crime reconsider their life choices. All cops have it and they all walk around using it. He wasn't singling you out.
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(Will finish later, busy at the moment.)
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A. Huh. O.K, I get that. There's actually a explanation for why you might have heard of Wolverine much more. Here's the link: tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/WolverinePublicity He's the best at what he does and what he does is make gratuitous appearances to artificially hook in readers. I'm more of a Cyclops man but that's mostly because Cyclops gets so little love from fans, he's actually pretty cool, and I truly think that Wolverine is really ''fucking'' overrated. I mean, yeah, he deserves some respect but not the goddamn ''worship'' he's been getting. It's why I found Wolverine's part in X-Men: Apocalypse to be hilarious as it was basically a cameo!
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Source: I used to work with cops, and my sister-in-law is married to a cop.
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B.  
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Your outfits are fine.
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C. Uuuummmm...I'm not transgender. I'm just a dude trying to mess with you. I do that often in real life. Don't worry, I'll keep your secret. And yeah, I'm of the same mind on transgenders.
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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D. You're welcome. When Ramadan ends, I'll try to read your stuff for real. I'll be filling the discussion tabs with my comments and, I'll warn you, they may be a bit...caustic. I only mean well, though, and I'll try to be as fair as I can without seeming too harsh or too lenient.  
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I'm glad you went out and had some fun. And if the neighbors get freaked out because of what you're doing inside your own house, that's their issue.
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E. Yeah, I'm a Fallout fan. I've played Fallout 3, Fallout New Vegas, (both on the PC) and Fallout 4 on the PS4. I'm currently playing New Vegas, which I'm really liking, and just starting Fallout 4. Edit: I cut out my previous statement because I realized that I didn't really remember what happened back then and I couldn't read your thing to be sure. But I still believe that it wouldn't really happen. It was just a mercenary and two Institute technicians. I really doubt that the Institute would waste time like that. Also, I'm afraid that my computer wouldn't let Fallout 3 play so I can't really be sure about your depiction of Moira Brown and I can't read the Wasteland Guide anyway because it's Ramadan. Look up Brown's speech about why she's doing this. It might help and even if it doesn't, it's not a bad speech. P.S. Ever thought of trying Fallout New Vegas as part of your Fallout thing? Edit: Here's Moira's speech below:  
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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"Well, look around at the world we live in. It may be okay to you, but I've read about what it used to be like, and this isn't it. So we all need something that keeps us going, despite all the terrible things around us. For me, it's things like this book... did you ever try to put a broken piece of glass back together? Even if the pieces fit, you can't make it whole again the way it was. But if you're clever, you can still use the pieces to make other useful things. Maybe even something wonderful, like a mosaic. Well, the world broke just like glass. And everyone's trying to put it back together like it was, but it'll never come together the same way... the Wasteland Survival Guide isn't much towards that lofty goal, but it's an important one. And that's why I need your help. I don't think I can do it alone."
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Found a great passage in a book I'm reading, and want to share.
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F. "And yes, I will be writing lots of rape scenes for it, I have been thinking about writing more of these for this site lately. Why rape? Because, you know how many stories I have read on here that the woman is raped, that make me want to scream at the author, or make me honestly a bit scared of some of the people on this site, if they actually view women the way they write? Since it is a prevalent theme in many places here, and since the fallout world would actually be a world where almost every woman would be a victim of it, I want to at least make the readers think about what it is like to be a woman in that situation. Put my readers in my shoes, so they know women are not just some random hole that exists for a penis, but are real, thinking people. That it has dramatic, traumatic effects on someone, to have their body violated. So, I write what many people on here seem to want, but my way." Go ahead. Perhaps I could direct you to some other rape scenes in other works so you could fix them? I'm unfortunately witness to more fictional rape scenes then I want to admit.
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To man has been given the grief, often, of seeing his gods overthrown and his altars crumbling; but to the wolf and the wild dog that have come in to crouch at man’s feet, this grief has never come. Unlike man, whose gods are of the unseen and the overguessed, vapors and mists of fancy eluding the garmenture of reality, wandering wraiths of desired goodness and power, intangible outcroppings of self into the realm of spirit - unlike man, the wolf and the wild dog that have come in to the fire find their gods in the living flesh, solid to the touch, occupying the earthspace and requiring time for the accomplishment of their ends and their existence. No effort of faith is necessary to believe in such a god; no effort of will can possibly induce disbelief in such a god. There is no getting away from it. There it stands, on its two hind legs, club in hand, immensely potential, passionate and wrathful and loving, god and mystery and power of all wrapped up and around by flesh that bleeds when it is torn and that is good to eat like any flesh.
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G. Erm...(clears throat) I, um, heard something about a, erm, "gangbang". (Blushes) You don't have to if you don't want but I'd like to hear about it. Not now, though. Just around the second week of July, around July 7 or 10.
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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H. Do swimsuits that become semi-translucent when wet exist in real life or was this a case of "pulling out of thin air for the sake of sexiness"?
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Ooof. Very sorry about your shower door. That sounds awful.  
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I. Here's a little note about originality from TV Tropes's "So You Want To / Be Original":"The first paradox is that it is impossible to create anything truly "new". One cannot create something from nothing. Every fictional work (with a few exceptions) is based on previous works...The second paradox is to realize that unlimited creative freedom actually puts limits on one's ability to create a story. Conversely, narrowing one's creative options actually helps to make creativity unlimited...;Those who cannot remember the past are condemned to repeat it'. If you don’t see how people before you made stories, it's very likely that you will unwittingly repeat the same ideas. And even worse, you might think that you were the first to come up with those ideas." Edit: In short,  --[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 13:13 (Louisiana Time), 15 June 2016
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It's your kitchen, you can dress however you like. I often go into mine not fully dressed, either, to do things.  
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Yep. I definitely understand the average CYOS reader or at least the average CYOS writer. God, do I wish I don't. You know, sometimes I wonder, "Why? Why do I get so pissed off at Adult CYOSs? They're not actual stories, I know that they're just made for wanking so why do I care?" Four reasons: Quality concern. Concern for reputation of website. Uncomfortable reading. Love of writing. So, that's why I get so pissed off at the average Adult CYOS. When Ramadan ends, I'm going to go through a plethora of Adult CYOS and give my comments on them. I might seem a bit harsh but I ultimately mean well, for the CYOS and the website as a whole. P.S Do you mind reviewing "Escape from Syria" in the Mature Story section or "The Devil's Daughter" in the Adult Story section?--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 11:16 (Louisiana Time), 19 June 2016
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Glad you got a chance to spend some time with friends. A bikini in a swimming pool, that's not a big deal.  
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By the way, your "cum bath" fantasy isn't all that weird, even by what I've read on this website. Ever wanted to fuck a statue in a museum, try to give a BJ to cliche serial killer who just murdered your boyfriend who you were having sex with at the time, or fuck a werecat? Edit: Let me clarify, those were sexual fantasies that I had found swimming in the dark depths of the Adult CYOS section and by "werecat", I meant a guy who transformed from a human into a cat. Example: Bastet from World of Darkness. --[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 19:01 (Louisiana Time), 19 June 2016
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Toying yourself while the workers are there might be pushing it. Now if you were to happen to be asleep when they arrived, it's not your fault you sleep naked and you kicked off the covers because summer is approaching and it's getting hot.  
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Honestly, I think it's kinda...garbage. One of the things that piss me off is the writer's idea that seduction means flashing the guy. It's just so....you know. ''Simple''. But hey, don't mind me. I'm just a reader with an opinion.--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 19:01 (Louisiana Time), 19 June 2016
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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The statue sex comes from "Oops! You're Naked!" and from what I remember (no matter how hard I try to forget), the protagonist didn't get turned into a statue but managed to get into a threesome with a guard and the same statue she was fucking and, later on, the protagonist and the guard went to his place to fuck. And it just ends there. The protagonist, by the way, has big breasts and big hips but we know little else of what she has. I like to imagine that's all, just a talking bust and hips. It's goddamn terrifying but I'd rather be scared then bored because it's just the same thing you get in every 4 out of 5 Adult CYOSs. --[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 15:32 (Louisiana Time), 20 June 2016
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Care to hazard a guess what book I'm reading?
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Here's my two cents about "The Devil's Daughter": just as your average Adult CYOS is an exercise in hedonism, The Devil's Daughter is an exercise in depravity. --[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 15:55 (Louisiana Time), 20 June 2016
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You've seen this CYOS that's been getting written a lot recently? It's called "ASOIAF Sexy Edition". --[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 15:59 (Louisiana Time), 20 June 2016
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The loss of Iceland was a disaster whose dimensions were only now becoming apparent. The Soviet bombers had a clear lane to reach into the trade route. Their submarines were racing through the Denmark Strait even as the NATO navies were trying to position their submarines to re-form the barrier they had lost -- the barrier upon which the convoys depended. The Air Force and Navy would soon try to rearrange fighter coverage to harass the Backfires, but those measures were all stopgaps. Until Iceland was fully neutralized, or better yet re-taken, the Third Battle of the North Atlantic hung in an uneven balance.
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Distraction? Maybe. Don't see how it would work for someone who's right in front of you and I would expect someone trying to use their "womanly wiles" to be more subtle and more intelligent then a drunk college girl.--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 16:24 (Louisiana Time), 20 June 2016
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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You mean hentai? You know, I can actually imagine The Devil's Daughter as an animated hentai but as one of the more unsettling and unholy hentais that I'd abandon once I realize what I'm getting into to. Hey, I have standards!
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If you do come to the US, I hope you end up out here. I live in an area that's safe enough that I can let my 13-year-old son go biking on his own for 2-3 hours. My apartment complex has many families with kids, so you would have other parents around and your son would have potential friends right there.
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The bit with the doctor in Escape from Syria is a bit iffy as we didn't need the description about his...ejaculate.  
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And yes, that quote was from Red Storm Rising.  
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Yeah, I mentioned the Bastet from World of Darkness because I was hoping you would be interested and try to look it up. You really should look up World of Darkness, it's pretty cool. There's plenty of pdfs on the internet and on Scribd.
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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You know, I'm not an expert on Satanism but I don't think that Satanists would approve of the protagonist's behavior. Hell, there's actually many types of Satanism like Theistic Satanism, and The Church of Satan, and the Temple of Set. None of them seem likely to enlist hedonistic monsters that try to summon real life demons by any means necessary. I don't think the writer specifies what type of Satanism the protagonist does so I actually think, from the stated goal of the protagonist and the protagonist's cruelties, that she's just enrolled in a typical evil Devil worshiping cult rather then real Satanism. You know, the type of cult that usually ends up as a C grade minor villain in a show like Supernatural or Buffy: The Vampire Slayer.   
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Sorry the guy turned out to be such a jerk. Well, there will be other opportunities.
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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What am I about to start re-reading? Chapters in order: The Idea -- Preparation -- The Start -- Chumbi -- Tibet -- The Approach to Everest -- The Way Discovered -- The North Col -- Preparing Again -- The Second Start --The Attack -- The Oxygen Attempt -- An Avalanche -- High-Altitude Life -- The Chief Result -- The Use of Oxygen -- Other Conclusions -- The Third Expedition -- Darjeeling to Rongbuk -- Up the Glacier -- Disaster Retrieved -- The Rescue -- The Assault -- The Climax -- Mallory and Irvine -- Odell -- The Great Enigma -- Honor -- The Doomed Mountain
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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Difference Between Heaven and Hell
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In Heaven, cops are Swiss, chefs Italian, lovers French, and things are done with British courtesy and German efficiency.
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In Hell, there's just a few small changes... cops are German, chefs British, lovers Swiss, and things are done with French courtesy and Italian efficiency.
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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I'm glad you're all right. I've missed you, but I figure you've got a life to live and can't be on a website all the time.
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And no, I don't use discord.
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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If you'd like to let me know the "other places" you're working on your stuff, I would not object. *grin*
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-- [[User:Teejay|Teejay]]
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== [[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] ==
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What I was pissed off about? Eh, just the same old smutty crap on this website. I still find it contemptible but...I really can't muster any energy to gripe in the discussions. I just...there's just so much. So much crap and all my edits...I can't change a damn thing because I don't want to change it, I want to burn it to the ground and start again. That's my problem, the premises of these things.
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So. How have you been?
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P.S Did you write "Nudisma Terena"?---[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 18:31 (Louisiana Time), 19 May 2017
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Mind if I make a few suggestions for this whole "boinking" thing? (Also, why "boink"? Why'd you choose that as a word?)
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1. Truth and Boink?
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2. Freeze Boink?
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3. Simon Says: Boink Edition?
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4. Boink Poker?
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Just spitballing.
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P.S Is this story a real story for you or just part of your rants? And, yes, I get the joke.--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 17:48 (Louisiana Time), 9 June 2017
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How do you think a "sexual horror" story would go?--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 12:41 (Louisiana Time), 12 June 2017
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That was one of my first thoughts: rape. But I was wondering if there are more ways to show "sexual horror" then that, more dimensions. Something more...subtle.
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Why these thoughts? Well, I'm just taking genres and mixing them together, seeing what comes out.
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P.S Can you help me with some category help? I'm trying to do multiple categories for my "Dungeons and Dragons" review like this:
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The Review- Adult Stories| Dungeons and Dragons| Female Elf Paladin Review. --[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 12:31 (Louisiana Time), 13 June 2017
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You know what? Go ahead, rewrite the scene with the spirit you described, just have her SHOW it! Have her SHOW a fucking emotion! Have some actual dialogue! I'm not asking for a total change, I'm asking for this page to actually look like a fucking book! "Present the page better" is all I'm asking. And "make it less skeevy", if that's possible.
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And, for the love of god, DESCRIBE THINGS! PLEASE, I BEG OF YOU, DESCRIBE EVERYTHING! I DON'T CARE WHAT IT IS, JUST DESCRIBE IT SO PEOPLE CAN HAVE A CLEAR IDEA OF WHAT THEY'RE SUPPOSED TO BE READING! Hell, I give you permission to describe the protagonist's breasts, just give the reader SOMETHING!
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Oh, and you can just ignore the whole "half-elf" thing. I don't expect you to know about them and for this instance, you don't need to. --[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 9:42 (Louisiana Time), 15 June 2017
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The groping and pawing happened at the clothing shop, erm, tent.
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Also, yes, I know the rest of the story makes no sense. You know my pain. --[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 17:52 (Louisiana Time), 19 June 2017
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...You have automatically lost all respect from me with those lyrics.--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 11:13 (Louisiana Time), 19 July 2017
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Erm, sorry. I've been sorta busy and I kinda forgot about it. I'll try to give you my proper opinion soon but I can't do it right now because I slept pretty late last night, about 3 A.M. Going to say one thing: your page was a major fucking improvement over the last one. There was actual ''dialogue'' for fuck's sake!
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You know, there's something weird about the stories on that CYOS. I don't think a lot of it was made by people who were thinking "Forgotten Realms" when they made it. It feels like generic D&D stuff with some vanilla D&D info thrown in. The mentions of Pelor, for one thing. While Pelor, the god of the Sun, is a D&D god, he's not a Forgotten Realms god. The closest there may be to Pelor is Lathander, the Morninglord, the God of spring, dawn, etc.
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Edit: Huh. There's actually a table in ''Forgotten Realms Campaign Setting'' handbook that tells you which D&D deities to convert to Forgotten Realms deities. Pelor, for example, can be switched with Lathander, Ilmater, the Broken God, or Torm, the Loyal Fury.
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-[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 21:27 (Louisiana Time), 13 August 2017
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If you aren't busy, perhaps you could do the red links for this page: D&D: FHR: The cloaked merchant : "Let's see how far you are willing to go...."
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Try it like you did for the bard page.--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 14:12 (Louisiana Time), 14 August 2017
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Going to stay away from this site for some time. Planning on sitting down and reading the handbooks for Forgotten Realms. There's a lot of interesting lore and story ideas in this stuff. And it's all on the internet, free to download! Oh, and to answer your question:
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A. For D&D: Well, she can't really do it because she only has a part of the whole map right now. She needs all of them. And there's the guards behind him. Also, that creep doesn't own the shop. I think the shop owner went home for the night or something.
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To be honest, I was thinking of something like that. You know, the protag somehow getting it away from the creep without putting out any more "goods". The best bet would be to get him alone and then...you know.
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B. "Don't have sex!" Are you sure you weren't inspired by the manga "My Balls" where a man has to not ejaculate for a whole month to save the world? Yes, this is real. I am NOT kidding. Also, go ahead. That will be a breath of fresh air.
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C. Go wild.--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 00:18 (Louisiana Time), 15 August 2017
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No. I'm not really back.
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I'll be blunt: I came here a couple of years ago in 2012 because I was enamored with Choose Your Own Adventures and I thought I could practice my writing here.
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However, I stopped going back here a year ago because of one question: what is the point of practicing writing here if nobody will read it or give their opinions?
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Not only are there few regulars here but considering the absolute ''plethora'' of smut here, what chance is there for anybody to read anything I've crafted or even give their opinion? Practice is worthless if nobody will point to the problems in your writing.
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I might contribute to random Choose Your Own Adventures if I'm bored or tempted to go back to old habits of editing on here but I don't think I'll be writing anything of my own here.
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If anybody wants to talk to me, though, I'll be here for that and respond.
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Heck, if you want me to look at your work for suggestions or any editing ideas, I'm always up for that.
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Edit: Also, there's a Choose Your Own Adventure called "Katarina's Adventures" whose original writer seems to have disappeared so maybe you could take a look and see if you can do anything with it?
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So. This is awkward and not just because it's been (checks last communication) holy shit, half a decade? Anyway, yeah, it's been a long time since we've talked.
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Am I actually back this time? For the foreseeable future, yes. I do have a collaboration I want to contribute to here and that old ''Dungeons and Dragons'' CYOA to fill in with my own idea for an adventure, not just bitterly edit it. Yeah, I really was contemptuous, wasn't I?
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I actually came back today to talk about a way I don't know if you're familiar with Yahtzee, a certain vulgar but hilarious reviewer on The Escapist, but he actually has longer, more drawn-out reviews called "Extra Punctuation". In one of his articles, Yahtzee talks about how he'd prefer "Heavy Rain", he would have preferred for the plot twist of the killer's identity to change depending on the decisions you made, much like Silent Hill 2 and Silent Hill: Silent Memories, whose endings changed on subtle actions that implied a different mindset like running around with frequently low health making it more likely to get the suicide ending and such.]] He's very fond of getting the gameplay to interact with and work with the story, changing and painting in the context.
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I think I may have complained before about seeing this sort of thing because a CYOA is about the choices you, the main character, makes, not the choices you make the other characters make like "The man gropes you" or "The man just stares at you". Here, I think it's different because it's not so much based on making other character's choices so much as the choice you make influencing the tone and direction the story takes before it's "fully-baked", so to speak.
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Like, if you choose "glare at the person at the door", the person will glare back or shoot some snide remark and the story will inform you that it's an old rival that usually tries to undermine you. If you choose "say hello in a friendly tone", they'd say hello back and shoot the shit with you, informing you that they're a casual acquittance. Another choice for signifying if they're a friend and another if they're a lover.
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Or, as he put it, "the idea was, you had to make 6 choices, and each choice branched the story. The player was given as little detail as possible at the start, and each choice of action they made added detail that altered the context of the events. For example, you started off in a hospital reception area, and the first choice was whether to sit down and wait or walk down the hall to explore further. Choosing to sit implied that the player character understood the hospital to be functional, and would lead to the stories involving visiting sick friends, seeing a doctor or identifying a corpse. Choosing to explore implied that the player character was more confused about their situation, which led to stories in which the hospital was abandoned or closed, and you were there for various illicit reasons."
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It's an interesting idea for how to experiment with CYOAs while still making the reader's choices the center of the piece and I'm pretty sure I saw something like that here, one choice going for a romantic tone, one for a dangerous "you were just kidnapped" tone.
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...By the way, your shower is fixed, right? I remember you talking about how unsexy and rude the fixers were, not like the fixers in porn.
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--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 01:21 (Central Time), 03 December 2021
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I'll admit...some of these things also turn my stomach. I once stumbled onto a page in "The Devil's Daughter" and found a scene where "garden slaves" have to lick a woman's ass clean and it described how there was wet shit still in her ass and...
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I tapped out. I could not even try. I can stomach tons and tons of poorly-written smut but going into gross-out territory like this isn't worth the effort.
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Sorry to hear that you don't come by anymore but go ahead, you do you. Would it be too much to ask which Discord your writings are put on?
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I actually do find that way of writing Yahtzee described interesting enough to try one day. But, yanno, if ain't today...
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That said, if I wanted to get your opinions on something I wrote here, would you still be willing to take a look?
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--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 01:21 (Central Time), 08 December 2021
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== Enier ==
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TQ for the tips.
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Also, you do not need to have a template. That was put there so you know how to make one if you want. It is not required, and is not useful if your story isn't going to use it. If it is, well, you can replace the template, but they are hard to figure out. Let me know if you need help on it.Reply:
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Remind me what a template is?
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Can you do combination linking?
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Help with the status bar! I need an explanation clearer than the tutorial!
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I want something like the table in the tutorial, but blue. can u send me the code?
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TQ. How do I make A Wiki?
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==Platypus==
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Thank you for your efforts thus far.  I appreciate your help, and you have my sympathy for your loss of brain cells.  At some point, when I'm feeling brave, I'll tackle what remains.  Hot and Horny was most written by writers that I pushed away from Smutty Sex Romp and Rampage, and much of it is pretty cringe worthy.
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"I'm about to pop an egg."  There should be a collection of truly, awfully bad lines somewhere.  That turkey deserves special recognition for sheer awfulness. --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 12:42, 14 June 2017 (UTC)
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Thanks for the heads up.  And good job messing with the spammer's spammy spam! --[[User:Platypus|Platypus]] 11:54, 9 August 2017 (UTC)
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== Wolfskin75==
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did this work?  --[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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I am thinking of a several character story... And like your too graphic. I wanted to incorporate pictures. Non that have copyright but to give the reader a idea of what i am visualizing. I am trying to find a way to pitch my ideas without it being public... But i dont use anom email so...yeah. I think however, i should work on figuring out the mechanics before i start writing. And i invite you to add to were you see fit. I like your stories. (i read some.)  --
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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Well, my idea goes like this.  I want to write a two prong story: about a neighborhood of deviants that a Mom and her daughter move into. They are fresh from a divorce from a wealthy guy so he buys them a House in this neighborhood.  I want to Mom to become some Wife's pet (romance themed but lots of kink Dom/sub exploring fetishes... mostly my own) the choices will be who you sub too. Whether it be a loving woman or a cruel pain master.  and at the same time her daughter (totally cute emo girl) will become a Dom to one of the daughters of the town. Of course they will be men in it.. but only as a side story.. (men have no place in my fantasy world) Of course.... this is basically how the neighborhood works... they were moved there on purpose. I love reading stories where two girls find a comfortable love full of their kinks .  yes... no? any tips or whatever would be nice.     
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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Okay, I have corrected some things. I apologize for some misunderstandings. I guess I am looking for more of a mentor? someone to bounce ideas off of. None of the ideas I have are set in stone and I am still trying to even figure out how to get started. I am just more looking for some sort of communication and would like someone to collaborate with eventually. I am new here and I am just testing the waters. To see what is up. 
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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Thank you. I am currently working on adding things to "Mom can be bad".  I am going to try and class up the story a bit and learn the formatting. I have a lot to think about. You're right, some of the stories are down right stupid.  you're also right and that I am more about the innocence rather than the age.. Let me digest what you wrote, it was all good .. and I very glad for your time. thank you again. 
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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You said a couple things that I can relate.  The reason I want to write this story is that, I just to chat with a bunch of real life little's. It was SOOOO great and they where all so full of life and happiness.  Of course things got drama filled at times but It was something I could "feel".  I wanted to be a protector. Not someone who would punish and then After care.. but ALL After care. and since I am married so I fantasize ... ALOT. but Like I said, it's not normal, (like most things I am involved in) for instance... I read rampage. and EVERY Ending I got to was a happily ever after ending. I think that say a lot of about my mind where I want to go with this story of mind.  The strong protecting the weak. Someone protecting those who would be prey and letting them live in happiness. Of course there is sex and kinkiness but it's the best of all environments. safety and trust.  this is more where I want my stories to go. Like I said. I am going to press on with adding to "Mom can be bad" not only warming up my writing skills and figuring out the format (like if you make one choice it effects the rest of the story sort of thing) and See what I can do.  I am dealing with Lisa, 40 married and Tera 50 divorced.  ( is there some sort of forum for these type of formatting questions?)
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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I am trying to add a page a day and see what happens. I have already ended my first thread. :)
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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nice, can I use that?
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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Very nice. I am loving making these little snippets. Even though i fantasize about it, I am not sure if i got the feeling right. Since i am not female all i have to go on is other writings and since i don't have a book length to write and develop these feelings. I don't know what its like for a straight "married" woman to get picked up at a bar by another and go with it. I will use your snippets. But i invite you to add the story. :) I am also having fun making most of the men villians.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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Again. Thank you. I have a lot of editing to do amd make it all says in line. Thank you thank you. To know you are reading what i am writing...yay. I need to become a stronger writer. I am actually having some issues. 1. How do you slog through the middle stuff? I am having troubles feeling overwhelmed with stuff that has to hhappen to make the story ...er semi good rather than just the dirty parts. Do i make sense?
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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For instance, I was thinking about making it back to the house. I have several story points where things need to happen before the Preg story gets to the house.  I add some sex parts, things in fact I would love to do. What I am having trouble with is trying to get the notion that She might not be totally okay with this and that when she gets to house she is like "what the fuck am I doing." or maybe have that moment in the car.
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I really need to spend some time really trying to catch up on things.   
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Not every woman has DD or 38g breast, not every woman shaves ( and thank god for that.) all the woman in my stories don't have huge boobs. I fantasize about smaller breast and I am not afraid to write about pubic hair.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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I am trying to get more from you... To hopefully get you to boil over into a story. :)  whatever you want to tell me...please be sure i am "listening". ;).
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Also i have been busy lately so i haven't had much time to respond.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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I love the way you write.  You include little things.. little things are always the important things right. and yes.. both of those things were great!  I am going on vacation for a week. I will be back though.  Hopefully I will some updated work for you
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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I have wrote alot ... Cant wait to post it. How have you been?
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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I would ask you a favor. I love what you wrote by the way... Totally totally enjoyed it. *wink* again and again...
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I need you to write a lesbian sex scene between Tera and Beth. I am adding a scene...after the dancing scene she goes home drunk with Beth..could you write the sex...can be bleary and nebulous...but it would be amazing if you would...?
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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Will do. I will also read the links you sent. How would you like me to get that to you? Email or post it here? I will just living out a fantasy :)
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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Tera, 50 mother of two, I envision her being bi curious her whole life just stuck in a rut. Blond hair, dyed. To cover the grey.. Beth a mid 20's redhead in college. Loves older woman. And likes the older woman sort of a mother like girlfriend..Knows Tera ( knows her daughter and is someone's daughter that Tera will know. Tera is of the generation that doesnt shave..pubic hair i mean. Beth is smaller chested then Tera. Normal breast Tera's would slightly not perky.
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Beth is the predator in this case...i want to have some regert in the morning but enough to force her hand in a choice. So far she has moved slowly but she has moved forward... Thats the direction i want to head. Plus... I havent posted the next post which will go in front of this...so you have a little time
   
   
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P.S Sorry for dropping The Devil's Daughter on you. I didn't know how long it was. From your notes, it looks worse then I thought from my first glance. And yet that only makes me more curious about it. Damn it.--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 11:37 (Louisiana Time), 21 June 2016
 
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Alright, here's another suggestion for review: The End of the World. Look up Crossed by Garth Ennis. This CYOS is inspired by it...and maybe more then "inspired".  --[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 00:33 (Louisiana Time), 22 June 2016
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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I find myself wanting to add on to other stories... But alot of them have elements i dont like and really cant further the story the way i would like with the cast as it is. I could just go and rewrite the story...but i would rather contact the author and make the change.....sigh....or just make one of my own i guess.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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back home and posting again. :) figured it all out.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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Any details you can provide about that...I am more than happy to read...re read ..
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Have my own activities..then re read again. I would like to know...especially the tying part...
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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I feel so lazy...i havent been writing..bad me..lol
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]]
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I have a question. Do you understand my writing? Like if you had to critque it. What would be a couple of good things i could work on?
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 23:55, 14 July 2017 (UTC)
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I added two or three more pages last night. I really need have a edit day. If I could crave out a day to JUST EDIT that would be great. *sigh*
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 14:35, 15 July 2017 (UTC)
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Wanted to touch base. How are you doing?
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 20:10, 16 July 2017 (UTC)
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Thank you..its awesome. It was perfect and I..thank you for your time.  Family def comes first
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 14:31, 18 July 2017 (UTC)
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I have a question for you? it's kind of private. how can I ask you?
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 00:23, 19 July 2017 (UTC)
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I have been really tired lately, I plan to work on this weekend. I am not giving up. Life has just gotten busy, I still love the writing and I still crave the interaction. Thank you for your time and effort. I look really good, and I will get my head screwed on right promise.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 15:23, 20 July 2017 (UTC)
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I was finally able to read it. I am changing it all to first person. since I think, that how I wrote the rest of the story? I wasn't sure so I have copies of both just in case. I will be working on the rest of it and that's what I want to buzz you about. I think it would be easier. to use discord for our edits? and I wanted to buzz you my Discord info. As you can leave something there for days and I can see it there when every I log on. I was just thinking about it. Plus we maintain our safety and secure. :)  HIGHLY HIGHLY sexy stuff!!! thank you.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 07:25, 21 July 2017 (UTC)
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So far it's golden. I find myself really enjoying the foreplay as I usually do in real life. As a kid in middle school I taught myself through many a bad movie to listen to a woman's body and learn how to please her without "intercourse". I LOVE FOREPLAY. and if that doesn't sound true or read true, there is no point finish the chapter. Anyway I think what you wrote actually feels real rather than what you said to the notes where the they get together and he whips his cock out stuffs it in.. and she lOVES IT! and have five orgasm.  THEN,  everyone thinks it's a great scene but nothing happened. 
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Furthermore, one of the parts I find very disrespectful is that they're always written where the women is satisfied beyond the shadow of a doubt, multiple orgasm and after one time having sex, she goes from Virgin she goes to ultra slut. It's just stupid!!!  In this story, I wanted to communicate softness and the importance of trust and the sexiness of vulnerability and how that plays into arousal.
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as for this conversation. I would say without a DOUBT... I look forward to our interactions and AND I don't know why I hold as much as I do.  but... that's a deeper discussion. 
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 12:52, 21 July 2017 (UTC)
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What do you need from me?  I am feeling like I have slacked off.. TOTALLY hot scene by the way... :P 
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What do you use to keep track of the story? I am starting to see the limitations of your basic document editor.  I losing my place pretty easily. :(
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 21:42, 23 July 2017 (UTC)
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Did you add something? I couldnt make up what was updated?
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 21:17, 24 July 2017 (UTC)
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Out of the three moms can be bad stories i started. Two of them end up in the same kink. Which is good but i dont want to just write the same thing. Yes i am interested in that kink and those types if relationships but... You have to be anle to expand lol. I am trying to write it from all sides. But i feel like I enjoy writing it why not...but also since I am learning....i am having a bad day and writing porn and reading your hot writing makes me happy.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 23:15, 24 July 2017 (UTC)
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I finally found a shit load of notes you have been leaving.  I have starting up stories and just letting it go on.  I would have loved to competed in that competition!!! I would have written some awesome stuff. Cream worthy if I do say.  Use to take the train to work everyday.. so I had a lot of time to think about this particular thing.
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What is my style? I am would have to say I am trained beginner and that my style is "evolving" I am not giving up and I will read all that you have left for me. PROMISE. I am going on vacation again so I hope to have some good pages come of this vacationI just don't want to be a one trick pony you know.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 06:34, 26 July 2017 (UTC)
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Thank you for that. I am going to use it but I had to create my own account and I would have to invite you to work with me. SOOOO if you want to find out who I am really am.. cause I don't have fake email addresses.... Let me know. :) I would be more than happy to invite you onboard. :)   
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 07:19, 26 July 2017 (UTC)
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I have gotten the thingy up. I will write some more and invite when i get back form vacation. But a couple of beers and a couple hours to write do wonders?
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 23:24, 27 July 2017 (UTC)
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I invited you. I am reading your blog. and I want to work with you on "Maso me" whenever you think I can fit. :) anyway, I will have more soon.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 22:16, 29 July 2017 (UTC)
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Okay.. I am going to have to make pages for us. (actually makes me happy) so we can keep better track of our various creative projects. I will have to figure how to do that and then we can add to those.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 00:20, 30 July 2017 (UTC)
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did you get the invite?
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 16:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)
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Let me work on that. no idea why. I am going back through and editing. I was reading through maso me. I loved the part where they were using her in class. HOT!
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 04:40, 1 August 2017 (UTC)
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I did figure out how to get you full access. Try it and let me know.
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This might seem...unusual for me to ask but would you play a card game where losing meant you had to lose a piece of clothing?--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 10:18 (Louisiana Time), 22 June 2016
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 04:58, 1 August 2017 (UTC)
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Have you ever heard of Limbo of the Lost? It's not a CYOS, it's a game. One of the greatest games ever made, if I do say so myself. --[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 20:55 (Louisiana Time), 22 June 2016
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Okay. I wanted to right something about a like humiliation type scene that is being filmed, something new for the person involved but not as horrifying as she thought. (i.e. the experience as being used as a sex guide in the "training" part.)    I am not sure if that would fit into that story. or even if you wanted it to be in it at all. just was really excited by the training part was all. doing things in front of people you don't know or do know. wanted to add that in. I would add that in to one of the chapters of my story as well. It was hot
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I've seen the "End of the World" review. All of your reviews, in fact. You're not doing too bad. Keep going. For your next CYOS, how about "The Life of a Medieval Princess"? It may not good but it's definitely more sane then the one you're doing right now. Sand in a vagina...for God's sake. P.S "End of the World" is more D grade in my opinion but it does have about three things above the average Adult CYOS such as "Life of a 13 Year Old": there is a ''story'' to it, it actually has some semblance of morality, and the protagonist is actually allowed to be noble, courageous, and even heroic. I gotta tel you, that is something I've learned not to expect from Adult Story CYOSs. Nothing against your review, however. I'm just a reader with an opinion, to borrow the catchphrase of an awesome reviewer named SF Debris. --[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 14:29 (Louisiana Time), 25 June 2016
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 15:45, 2 August 2017 (UTC)
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So was strip poker and naked twister the only type of games you've played or have you played more games like that game where you have a conversation on the phone while having sex and you try not to give any clue that you're having sex at the moment to the person at the other end of the line? P.S. I suppose you haven't told any stories about...erm, naked twister on your blog? --[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 01:45 (Louisiana Time), 29 June 2016
 
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Could you check on Dungeons and Dragons in the Adult CYOS section and tell me what edition it is?--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 19:04 (Louisiana Time), 30 June 2016
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So, I started my own story.. YAY.  I will work on Lisa's story tonight (or this weekend at least) I added the beginning of the sex scenes with Tera and Beth and introduced a new character or at least named her. (Tera's friend Marla.) Anything else you would like me to do or help you with?
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Yeah, that's exactly what I needed. Thanks. So, it's about maybe a week or less until Ramadan ends. I don't how to feel about this. On the one hand, I can finally resume my calling on this website (shit-tons of edits and comments in the discussion tabs) and read your stuff. On the other hand...I know that little of the Adult CYOSs on here are worth reading even if only for erotic purposes and that I'll come back to the blasé and caustic attitude I had before Ramadan. The closest analog is, after not having food for a long time, I find a ton of horrible food and I chow it all down but soon, when I'm as full as I can be, I realize what I'm eating and don't touch until I am truly desperate. DirtyMe, I have the feeling that your stuff just might be the only adult CYOSs I'll be really reading on this website. Just five more days, at the very least. --[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 01:15 (Louisiana Time), 1 July 2016
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 18:44, 4 August 2017 (UTC)
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I've heard that you may have experience with glory holes so I want to know, for my own reasons but if you ask nicely, I'll tell you, can a vagina fit on or through a glory hole?--[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 02:31 (Louisiana Time), 2 July 2016
 
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Well. Ramadan's long over. I can now read Adult CYOSs. And I don't care about them anymore. Just...no. I just don't care. I put some serious thought into a one and I found myself wanting to take a shower. The blandness, sleaziness, and quite frankly horribleness killed any real interest I had in Adult CYOSs. Just...I don't want to endure that nonsense anymore. --[[User:Fredhot16|Fredhot16]] 09:40 (Louisiana Time), 12 July 2016
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I like it. you are a really good writer and story teller. I like the way you make the story come together. I am trying to work on my story telling abilities or at least communicating them in written form. I have had writers block as of late. I have plenty of "ideas" but seemingly no time and not a lot motivation. I have been reading a bit lately, and really thinking about what kind of stories I want to tell. It's good and I am really I guess picking out a lot of the crap that I don't want in my stories that traditionally make it into porn. Love your writing, and I love reading.  It's some of the most erotic writing I have read.
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The question came from a video on Youtube. Here's the link: www.youtube.com/watch?v=t6ejgls3MOY
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 14:32, 10 August 2017 (UTC)
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I recommend that you watch the rest of the playthrough, it's some great stuff.
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P.S You remember Velma from Scooby-Doo? Glasses, orange sweater, always explains the mystery at the end? Yeah, there seems to be a lot of hentai on the internet. Just google "velma hentai". I'm not surprised that there ''is'' hentai of Velma, just that she seems to overshadow Daphne. (Purple-wearing chick, possible love interest of Freddy (blonde dude, behind all the traps, always splits up with Velma and Daphne)).
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== [[User:Darkfry|Darkfry]] ==
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I just wanted to thank you for the friendly help you offered me a few days ago, I am really new to writing stories in this format so it is taking me a while to get a handle on all the correct ways to link things together. It is really nice to have someone looking out for these thing. P.S. I only just figured out how to respond to a message so that's why it's taken me this long to thank you. I am really happy to take advice from people on how to do things, hope I am a good student. By the way I am not sure how the signature thing works so I hope this works... --[[User:Darkfry|Darkfry]] 13:38, 31 May 2016 (UTC)
 
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Yes, I am over 18, I'll give some thought to your Exhibitionist story, no serious ideas right now but I am sure can think of something you would enjoy writing (; --[[User:Darkfry|Darkfry]] 08:02, 2 June 2016 (UTC)
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I have block. and I feel like I need to keep writing though. I want to stay productive. :( i am going to a convention next week maybe that will help me clear my head up.  YAY.
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I am not too sure how you want the option formatted, I left you an option under the link you have created on the stories front page. Hope you have fun.--[[User:Darkfry|Darkfry]] 10:36, 2 June 2016 (UTC)
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 15:30, 11 August 2017 (UTC)
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That is a rather interesting piece of information, I suppose the symbolism is something I could consider working into the story, the story is supposed to be location neutral (it could be in any country), so it does need to relate to a broad variety of cultures, and things like that can add depth. I hope you are enjoying the story so far. Glad someone is reading it. :) --[[User:Darkfry|Darkfry]] 10:57, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
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I've been on the convention for a couple days. I have been trying to write a come up with something to write but not really pushing myself. Have you been?
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So I wanted some advice on a couple of things, is creating sub categories for your story an issue? Basically the story is told from 2 perspectives ie, that of Hart and Yale. I want to have a separate category for each although maintain the main category as well for each ie. each page would link to 2 categories. Would this be frowned upon?
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 12:17, 20 August 2017 (UTC)
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Secondly if I want to change the name of a page link, is it okay to simply copy the content from the old link into a new link and delete the content in the old link, or does that leave a mess behind for someone else to clean up? Is the a better way of moving the content?
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Thanks in advance. --[[User:Darkfry|Darkfry]] 19:59, 20 June 2016 (UTC)
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Thank you again, I am thinking of updating all my pages to have a unique identifier to the story although I must say it does bug me that in the category index page all the pages are then listed with the story header prefixed it is a pity that there isn't a way for the index to show a chosen page title. Would it be terrible to index it with a post-fix identifier, as instead of "Hyde Road - Go to next page" it was "Go to next page - Hyde Road". Is that too non-conformist of me? Anyway I think I have the subcategory thing  understood now except I seemed to have some issue in getting it to list the subcategory under the correct letter in the main categories index as in I wanted it to list Hyde road - Carla Yale under C not H but I couldn't seem to get that right. Anyway main reason I want to add the subcategory is I want to create a set of pages that would basically be my background notes. I would like to have a bunch of pages that explain the world as well as bunch of random story facts that I need to keep track of while writing but don't want them to show up in the main index, but rather under the sub-index, if that isn't too confusing. I don't really want the average reader to be reading them by accident because they will have spoilers in them, but I would like them available online. I am presuming that it wouldn't be a problem for these pages only to have the subcategory as their category.
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Again sorry for all the questions, and thank you for taking the time to answer. I am trying to add little bit by little bit to the story so afraid it's taking me quite some time to get it all down, but I think it is getting there.--[[User:Darkfry|Darkfry]] 08:56, 27 June 2016 (UTC)
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Hmm, I did try that but it isn't working the way I would have expected, when I type it like that it puts the tile of the page in the subcategory under C but in the main category the subcategory remains unchanged. So basically under Hyde Road, the page "attempt to start a conversation" is listed in A but in Hyde Road - Carla Yale it is listed under C. What I want is Hyde Road - Carla Yale. I don;t know maybe I broke something :/ I'll update all the Carla Yale pages and see if it fixes it... --[[User:Darkfry|Darkfry]] 10:12, 27 June 2016 (UTC)
 
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Yes, I am following how it works, so it's working as intended. Unfortunately I was trying to do something slightly different so that's where the confusion is coming in I think. I think I know where I went wrong. Will get back to you in a second. --[[User:Darkfry|Darkfry]] 10:25, 27 June 2016 (UTC)
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I am back. SAME HERE!!!  I have been needing a release. So I have been thinking of someone to write it out. nope... then I thought Stranger orgy. Which, seemed like a good idea. Until I realized I was a loser and could no way shape or form find one.  My wife walked around the house this morning with just underwear. I want to so many things,even in front of the kids. didn't care. but...nothing.  So, back to writing.   Let's write something dirty ??? Stranger orgy story, two character plan to meet there not knowing what is going happen.
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Alright, sorry I had to disappear, the world was ending, sort of. Anyway, yes I understand the whole where the category name is coming from... was a bit of a stupid from my side. The category page gets it's category name from category listed in the subcategories index page... which is obvious when I think about it... anyways thank you, you helped me understand it a lot better.--[[User:Darkfry|Darkfry]] 14:31, 27 June 2016 (UTC)
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== Other ==
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Alright, time for a rant. I am horny as all get out. Frustrated as hell. Nothing I do seems to help, it only slides me further this big swamp i am stuck in. I know kind of what I want. I have the ideas but I don't see a path to get there. But I know i don't have it all together and I have vauge ideas of what success looks like and I know a lot of time will be in the middle. Am I making sense? I enjoyed my time away at the convention but it seemed like i wasted a whole bunch of time... But it would have been only to stare at a blinking cursor on a screen. I read other erotica... It all sucks but at least they wrote it. I love yours. Specially the one with the girl who goes into the adult book store (have i mentioned that before) i am just stressed and feeling like i am wasting time. I dont want to get up in the morning... But i get up to check for your messages. Everything is crowding me in. I just am aimless. I read some stories about mind control. I find that cool...but all the stories seem to fall apart. Like they lose steam and rely on tropes. Bad ones. What would you do if you had mind control? I know I know for a fact I would use it to get people to admit stuff they are thinking but never say. Aaaaaarrrgghhh am I making sense?
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I'm following basically the same rules as you but I decided to work from Z to A under the assumption a lot of people start moving things to the pit and give up way before they get to the end. I did find a story from 2011 with less than 20 pages somewhere under 'Y' I think. -- [[User:Hellspawn|Hellspawn]] 9:00 29 May 2016 GMT
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 14:32, 22 August 2017 (UTC)
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Hey, I just wanted to say thank you for editing may talk/about me what so ever. I m just getting started with this whole "wiki" thing. ... And to prove it I nearly messed up your talk page. nearly.  --[[User:Zehir|Zehir]] 16:44, 6 June 2016 (UTC)--
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YOu and I are in the same boat. Like, THE EXACT same boat.  
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Thanks for the notes and advice.  Very much appreciated.  Really wasn't looking to get into a flame war with anyone, but also would expect more of a welcome to the site than what I got.  Hoping to simply move on and not be chased out.
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--[[User:Bardo75|Bardo75]] 02:51, 29 June 2016 (UTC)
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When you get a chance, please check out the new story I've started on.  It's called Just Say Yes.  Clearly just at the beginning stages, but would really appreciate your feedback.
 
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I took your comment about the wife having an affair and decided to run with it. Ended up taking an unexpectedly dark turn, but that's what I love about writing. You never really know where you're going to end up.
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So I am crawling out of skin. I have written a couple of pages here and there but not edited. I need to find a editor. I am going to go and make more sense of my outlines. I have let them go.  
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== Messages from Clara ==
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 00:52, 27 August 2017 (UTC)
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Hello.
 
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== From TheWriter (Female, btw) ==
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AAAARRRGGGGGHH. Okay. I have a new schedule to deal with now so I am dealing with that not so good.  I would love to help you out on whatever you need help with.  I have added anything in a couple days. but I am still thinking. :) How are you.
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 06:08, 31 August 2017 (UTC)
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I read some of your stuff. You seem  like a fun girl.
 
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Like I said, I'm attracted to you either way. I know a sex site we could possibly chat, if you're interested. Or if you're scared I'm some weirdo, that's cool too.
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I hope you get better. I know how that can be. with kid's bringing home the sickness. do I have a story for you. LOL
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== [[User:Underside|Underside]] ==
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 14:55, 11 September 2017 (UTC)
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Ah, I didn't really know the protocol. I tried reading the rules to make sure I was doing everything right. I'll revert it for now and leave a message asking about it.--Underside 14:28, 14 July 2016 (UTC)
 
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Okay so, I have writing story on a forum (kind of like a back and forth.) and last night I wrote this part that literally broke the story. I was told, the other writer was in fact upset by the part so much that they couldn't bear to write any more. (and you are going to have to believe me on this.) I was really happy that I wrote something that caused an emotional impact. but now... since I am "not me" and this is something I would never share in public as me or anyone else. Which is fine but the point of the matter is, is that I have it in me. I lacking the basics to funnel it through. I am getting lessons on how to write better. (like organizational tips and grammar so on) but I sense that I am inspiring hope. :(  I guess the point is that I have like something there. It's going to take a lot of work to dig to it.  (make sense?)
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Okay, yeah the table of contents was ugly with the linked row. I'm halfway through reverting pages again. There goes a bunch of work down the drain. :p --[[User:Underside|Underside]] 02:22, 15 July 2016 (UTC)
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 22:25, 11 September 2017 (UTC)
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I put everything back. It seemed like a good idea at the time, but I think it just ended up being needlessly complicated. :(
 
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I looked at your system for [[The Review]]. Have you considered using the story name for your link, pagecount and name of review? You could probably format the template to use one variable for all of it.--[[User:Underside|Underside]] 02:51, 15 July 2016 (UTC)
 
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Yeah, I saw that it looks the same after it parses. I'm thinking you could simplify the template though. Like: <nowiki>{{The Review|story=The End of the World|synopsis=While it may not be the end of the world, it is the end of life as we know it. Can you survive the infection ravaging your town? Can you find love or happiness if you do?}}}}</nowiki> but use the ''story'' variable to define the other links. I don't know if it's possible with the restrictions on the wiki though. You're probably way more experienced on here than I am, I've already learned a lot of things the Tutorial doesn't cover. Would you mind if I took a crack at making a more concise Review template for practice?
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Get better, I miss you.  
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I forgot to timestamp my last message, sorry. I made a quick ''[[The Review/PG-13 Stories/Adventures at Hogwarts|Adventures at Hogwarts]]'' review and tried to add to the list. It shows what I meant by more concise template. Feel free to scrap it if it doesn't fit. --[[User:Underside|Underside]] 04:18, 15 July 2016 (UTC)
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[[User:Wolfskin75|Wolfskin75]] 06:21, 14 September 2017 (UTC)
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I'm trying to give people the same amount of information by doing less typing. I'll demonstrate what I mean with the first few entries on the [[The_Review/PG-13_Stories/Page_1|PG-13 list]]. I've changed them to use the same template as my ''Adventures at Hogwarts'' review. I'm going to have to get to bed, but I've been enjoying our discussion. --[[User:Underside|Underside]] 04:56, 15 July 2016 (UTC)
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Your welcome. I'm pretty new to wikis, this being the first one I've tried editing, but I've got years of experience in a few programming languages so things like that are going to stick out for me. I'm still learning the limitations of how I can edit here. I was looking for a simple place to work on an IF story but got caught up learning all the syntax and wiki etiquette. --[[User:Underside|Underside]] 05:43, 15 July 2016 (UTC)
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== Grazie ==
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Thanks lol. This is my first story so I'm still getting the hang of all the coding and friends.

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Darth Malcolm

We don't know each other. But I appreciate you, and I thought you should know.

--Darth Malcolm 02:09, 3 December 2021 (UTC)


Teejay

Epitaph for a gunslinger:

Here lies Lester Moore

Four shots from a .44

No Les, no more.

-- Teejay

I've seen the all the problems begin with MEN on a T-shirt. I've been tempted to get it for my GF.

The Lester Moore epitaph is very famous. I'm surprised you've never seen it before.

That poem sounds like it was written by a guilt free Catholic school girl. :)

-- Teejay

A judge was doing arraignments, and the prisoners were in the holding cell of the courthouse, being called forward one by one. Four men were left in the cell when the judge looked at his next case:

State of California vs. Steven Lewon Crook

"Crook!" said the judge. "Step forward!"

All four men stepped out of the holding cell.

-- Teejay

You did a good job with it. As far as I can tell from years of practice, good oral sex when a man goes down on a woman involves being gentle, tonguing her clit, rubbing it while you slip your tongue inside her, and basically following her body's cues until she gushes on your face (and then doing it again and again.)

-- Teejay

I judge Teddy to be about 13. He'll lose interest eventually, probably sooner rather than later.

Headline spotted recently: MILF BRACES FOR FAP OFFENSIVE

My reaction: "Whiskey... Tango... Foxtrot?"

-- Teejay

Maybe they are. When I'm alone in the apartment I'll walk around in my underwear, so maybe they just don't think about it.

-- Teejay

After what happened, no terrorist will come near any of her other concerts. You know security will be ridiculously tight. Definitely go if you want to. -- Teejay

A psychiatrist and a proctologist share an office building. They put up a sign on the front: THE DEPARTMENT OF ODDS AND ENDS. -- Teejay

Your English isn't getting worse. What you're describing doesn't have a formal name.

More... h'mmm. Climb and boink, where she climbs a tree and the guys have to climb up to her and boink her. -- Teejay

In a single day, Samson slew a thousand Philistines with the jawbone of an ass. Every day, thousands of sales are killed with the same weapon. -- Teejay

Even for me, a very fast reader, that took a good chunk of time to read. You're an excellent writer and it's very well written. -- Teejay

I'm quite honored. :) -- Teejay

That's very understandable. I do the same thing with the stories I write for Literotica. It's a way of expressing myself and doing things I can't do IRL. -- Teejay

When the Angles (with the Saxons) invaded England, they settled in what became known as the Land Debatable, namely the north of England and the south of Scotland. The acute Angles went north and the obtuse ones south. -- Teejay

Very awesome band. -- Teejay

We all have hidden desires. That's one of yours. It doesn't surprise me. Hope you're doing well. -- Teejay

I'm glad you got to show off and didn't get in trouble. And you are quite attractive, especially to people who, unlike me, don't prefer women who are as wide as they are tall.

I kind of froze up on the scooter thing. Sorry. I should have handled it better.

Glad to hear that you and your husband still lust each other, in addition to loving each other. Enjoy! -- Teejay

When you used the phrase "get off my chest," it brought to mind an old Dilbert.

Dogbert: "This is the thief who took the decoy lunch...which we laced with synthetic female hormones!"

Wally: "You can't prove anything!"

Dogbert: "Is there something you'd like to get off your chest?" -- Teejay

That works. :) -- Teejay

Believe me, I understand the frustration. The (late) mother of my children and I had a spectacular love life until our first child was born. After that, it was impossible, nearly, to find time. When we did, she clearly released a lot of pent up energy. I hope you find some (safe) way of releasing yours. -- Teejay

A Republican politician is giving a speech at a large public auditorium and making all sorts of promises everyone knows are a bunch of hot air. A heckler stands up and bellows, "All that will happen when pigs fly!"

The Republican beckons the heckler onto the stage. Thrusting the microphone under the heckler's nose, he says, "Let me guess. You're a liberal."

The heckler replies with, "My grandfather was a Democrat, my father was a Democrat, and I am and always will be a Democrat."

The Republican, unfazed, responds smoothly with, "Suppose your grandfather had been a jackass and your father had been a jackass. What would that make you?"

Without missing a beat, the heckler booms, "A Republican!"

-- Teejay

Comment from an Internet comment thread:

When the deer have guns too, then and only then will hunting be considered an actual sport. -- Teejay

Those were awesome. And a little too close to my reality to make me laugh. I actually had the conversation in #14 with both my (now passed) wives. And knowing that words don't work in that situation, I ended up going down on them and after they were cummed out, sticking my head up and saying, "Did that answer your question?" -- Teejay

A classic from the Golden Age. Back when those kind of movies had actual plot. Watched both it and the original Taboo in the same week... about 22 years ago. I recommend it. -- Teejay

Technically, you'd have to ask Platypus, he's the one who created the "base" characters for SSR, but I'm on the assumption that it's no coincidence the slut neighbor is named "Debbie".

P.S. I turn 44 in October. From the information publicly available already, that I'm old enough to to have two kids one of whom is a teenager, you probably could have guessed pretty close to the correct answer. And if I watched those movies 22 years ago, well you have to be at least 18 to watch them so that would in and of itself imply at least 40. -- Teejay

They were younger children when I wrote that intro, back about 6 years ago when I first found this site :) -- Teejay

It's well written. I don't want to think about it too much because that kind of thing, even though it's only fantasy, still turns my stomach a bit. -- Teejay

Man in doctor's office: "My name is Daniel Nathan Reed. I don't initial anything." :) -- Teejay

From the late George Carlin:

Hospitals often name a new facility after the person who makes the major donation. I grew up with a neighborhood guy who is now extremely wealthy, and I'm hoping someday he'll make a big donation. I just want to drive past the hospital and see the No-Balls Malone Cancer Pavilion. -- Teejay

Can you guess what book I'm reading just from the chapter titles? :)

The Tomahawk * Good Samaritan * Earthport * The Astrogators' Guild * "...Your Money And My Know-How..." * "Spaceman" Jones * Eldreth * Three Ways To Get Ahead * Chartsman Jones * Garson's Planet * "Through The Cargo Hatch" * Halcyon * Transition * Anywhere * "This Isn't A Picnic" * "-- Over A Hundred Years --" * Charity * Civilization * A Friend In Need * "-- A Ship Is Not Just Steel --" * The Captain Of The Asgard * The Tomahawk

(Yep, the first and last chapters have the same title.) -- Teejay

Finished Starman Jones and now I'm reading an even older book, one published over 100 years ago. -- Teejay

A census worker was going house to house collecting information, and knocks on the door of an apartment. The only resident is a 25-year-old woman. After explaining why he's there, he starts to record the information. They get to the line for Occupation, and she says, "Hooker."

"I can't put that."

"Then put prostitute."

"That's not a legal occupation. I can't put that!"

"Okay, put down chicken farmer."

"Chicken farmer?"

"Yeah. Last year I raised 1,000 cocks."

-- Teejay

I know nothing about the Fallout world. But I was able to piece together enough to make the story sensible. And as always, your talent for writing shines through. -- Teejay

Also, I noticed there are still some redlinks on The Exhibitionist. Did you plan to fill those? -- Teejay

In England, there is a charitable group called the Women's Association that operates nationwide. The local branches are named for the localities (London Women's Association, Nottingham Women's Association, Sheffield Women's Association, &c.)

When the group opened a branch in the village of Ugley, the local branch -- with good reason -- did not want to be the Ugley Women's Association. So they changed their name to the Women's Association (Ugley Division.) -- Teejay

When asked to use the word "horticulture" in a sentence, Dorothy Parker instantly replied, "You can lead a horticulture but you can't make her think." -- Teejay

What movie did I just watch?

"I'm here to deliver a message from Mr. Lacombe." "Just you?" "I don't see anyone else around. Mr. Lacombe said to tell you... camel jockeys... that if you fuck with him, he's gonna cut off your balls and stick 'em up your ass. [samples food on table] You guys eat this shit?" "You are a dead man." "I'm not afraid to die... are you?" "No... Allah protects us." "Well, then... [smashes other guy's face into table] this shouldn't hurt!" -- Teejay

The movie is the 1991 film "The Hitman", starring Michael Parks, Al Waxman, Alberta Watson and Ken Pogue. -- Teejay

A biology teacher in an all girls high school decides to see if the pupils have studied the day's lesson.

"Kate, what part of the human body, when stimulated properly, expands to six times it's normal size?"

Kate blushes and stammers, "That's.... inappropriate to ask."

"Jill, what part of the human body, when stimulated properly, expands to six times its normal size?"

"The pupil of the eye, in dim light."

"Correct. Kate, three things. One, you didn't study. Two, you have a dirty mind. Three, you're going to be very disappointed."

-- Teejay

Sorry you're feeling ill. Hope you and your son recover quickly. -- Teejay

Those were good.

A brilliant young student at Trinity / Computed the cube of infinity / But the number of digits / Gave him the fidgets / He chucked math and took up divinity.

Connors said "Bet that I'll beat ya"/ To the odd-shaped mechanical creature / But it won in straight sets / And then quipped at the net / "Bjorn Cyborg's the name. Glad to meet ya."

A robot with lofty inflection / Read Stein in the poetry section / But read it "Arose / Is arose is arose" / And thought it concerned resurrection.

An epicure dining at Crewe / Found a rather large mouse in his stew / Cried the waiter, "Don't shout / And wave it about / Or the rest will be wanting one too."

-- Teejay

There once was a cook from New York / Who claimed you should always stew pork / He says he once tried / To eat some of it fried / And found he would rather chew cork.

-- Teejay

That was a good one. :) -- Teejay

A wonderful passage from the book I'm reading (and I'm wondering if you know the book...)

"When we looked to the south from this depot we saw no clouds; there was nothing but hard clear sky. The sky gave no indication of the blizzard winds that were to assail us when we reached the plateau, and after we had gone as far south as we could and retraced our footsteps to the depot, we looked back and saw the same clear sky, with a few wisps of fleecy cloud in it. We had no doubt that below those clouds the pitiless gale was still raging across the great frozen plain..."

-- Teejay

Very sorry about your cousin.

I'm glad you've found some books you like. Reading is one of life's great pleasures.

-- Teejay

You will not be punished, as you did not intentionally do anything wrong and you were honest. These things do sometimes happen. You are not in trouble.

(Hugs you tightly and gently runs my hand through your hair comfortingly)

-- Teejay

Maybe try going out with the blouse *almost* all the way unbuttoned?

I wish you lived closer. I would love for your family and mine to be real-life friends.

-- Teejay

Still not in trouble. You need comfort, not anger, right now.

(gently cradles you against my chest like a parent cradles a baby, to relax you and make you feel less stressed)

-- Teejay

I know all about real ones. Did I ever mention that my (late) father used to be a construction worker? And I'm glad you got out and managed to get some of your pent-up desire released.

-- Teejay

Freezing in place (normally in shock) is a fairly normal reaction when something like that happens... also, if it's crowded, there may not be a lot of room to move.

If "he" had instead been "she" doing the touching, how would you have reacted?

-- Teejay

If you lived close by, I'm sure I could talk my girlfriend into gently giving your rear the occasional grope. :)

-- Teejay

I'm 100% certain it's the look the cop gives everyone. It's designed to make anyone thinking about executing a crime reconsider their life choices. All cops have it and they all walk around using it. He wasn't singling you out.

Source: I used to work with cops, and my sister-in-law is married to a cop.

Your outfits are fine.

-- Teejay

I'm glad you went out and had some fun. And if the neighbors get freaked out because of what you're doing inside your own house, that's their issue.

-- Teejay

Found a great passage in a book I'm reading, and want to share.

To man has been given the grief, often, of seeing his gods overthrown and his altars crumbling; but to the wolf and the wild dog that have come in to crouch at man’s feet, this grief has never come. Unlike man, whose gods are of the unseen and the overguessed, vapors and mists of fancy eluding the garmenture of reality, wandering wraiths of desired goodness and power, intangible outcroppings of self into the realm of spirit - unlike man, the wolf and the wild dog that have come in to the fire find their gods in the living flesh, solid to the touch, occupying the earthspace and requiring time for the accomplishment of their ends and their existence. No effort of faith is necessary to believe in such a god; no effort of will can possibly induce disbelief in such a god. There is no getting away from it. There it stands, on its two hind legs, club in hand, immensely potential, passionate and wrathful and loving, god and mystery and power of all wrapped up and around by flesh that bleeds when it is torn and that is good to eat like any flesh.

-- Teejay

Ooof. Very sorry about your shower door. That sounds awful.

It's your kitchen, you can dress however you like. I often go into mine not fully dressed, either, to do things.

Glad you got a chance to spend some time with friends. A bikini in a swimming pool, that's not a big deal.

Toying yourself while the workers are there might be pushing it. Now if you were to happen to be asleep when they arrived, it's not your fault you sleep naked and you kicked off the covers because summer is approaching and it's getting hot.

-- Teejay

Care to hazard a guess what book I'm reading?

The loss of Iceland was a disaster whose dimensions were only now becoming apparent. The Soviet bombers had a clear lane to reach into the trade route. Their submarines were racing through the Denmark Strait even as the NATO navies were trying to position their submarines to re-form the barrier they had lost -- the barrier upon which the convoys depended. The Air Force and Navy would soon try to rearrange fighter coverage to harass the Backfires, but those measures were all stopgaps. Until Iceland was fully neutralized, or better yet re-taken, the Third Battle of the North Atlantic hung in an uneven balance.

-- Teejay

If you do come to the US, I hope you end up out here. I live in an area that's safe enough that I can let my 13-year-old son go biking on his own for 2-3 hours. My apartment complex has many families with kids, so you would have other parents around and your son would have potential friends right there.

And yes, that quote was from Red Storm Rising.

-- Teejay

Sorry the guy turned out to be such a jerk. Well, there will be other opportunities.

-- Teejay

What am I about to start re-reading? Chapters in order: The Idea -- Preparation -- The Start -- Chumbi -- Tibet -- The Approach to Everest -- The Way Discovered -- The North Col -- Preparing Again -- The Second Start --The Attack -- The Oxygen Attempt -- An Avalanche -- High-Altitude Life -- The Chief Result -- The Use of Oxygen -- Other Conclusions -- The Third Expedition -- Darjeeling to Rongbuk -- Up the Glacier -- Disaster Retrieved -- The Rescue -- The Assault -- The Climax -- Mallory and Irvine -- Odell -- The Great Enigma -- Honor -- The Doomed Mountain

-- Teejay

Difference Between Heaven and Hell

In Heaven, cops are Swiss, chefs Italian, lovers French, and things are done with British courtesy and German efficiency.

In Hell, there's just a few small changes... cops are German, chefs British, lovers Swiss, and things are done with French courtesy and Italian efficiency.

-- Teejay

I'm glad you're all right. I've missed you, but I figure you've got a life to live and can't be on a website all the time.

And no, I don't use discord.

-- Teejay

If you'd like to let me know the "other places" you're working on your stuff, I would not object. *grin*

-- Teejay

Fredhot16

What I was pissed off about? Eh, just the same old smutty crap on this website. I still find it contemptible but...I really can't muster any energy to gripe in the discussions. I just...there's just so much. So much crap and all my edits...I can't change a damn thing because I don't want to change it, I want to burn it to the ground and start again. That's my problem, the premises of these things.

So. How have you been?

P.S Did you write "Nudisma Terena"?---Fredhot16 18:31 (Louisiana Time), 19 May 2017

Mind if I make a few suggestions for this whole "boinking" thing? (Also, why "boink"? Why'd you choose that as a word?)

1. Truth and Boink?

2. Freeze Boink?

3. Simon Says: Boink Edition?

4. Boink Poker?

Just spitballing.

P.S Is this story a real story for you or just part of your rants? And, yes, I get the joke.--Fredhot16 17:48 (Louisiana Time), 9 June 2017

How do you think a "sexual horror" story would go?--Fredhot16 12:41 (Louisiana Time), 12 June 2017

That was one of my first thoughts: rape. But I was wondering if there are more ways to show "sexual horror" then that, more dimensions. Something more...subtle.

Why these thoughts? Well, I'm just taking genres and mixing them together, seeing what comes out.

P.S Can you help me with some category help? I'm trying to do multiple categories for my "Dungeons and Dragons" review like this:

The Review- Adult Stories| Dungeons and Dragons| Female Elf Paladin Review. --Fredhot16 12:31 (Louisiana Time), 13 June 2017

You know what? Go ahead, rewrite the scene with the spirit you described, just have her SHOW it! Have her SHOW a fucking emotion! Have some actual dialogue! I'm not asking for a total change, I'm asking for this page to actually look like a fucking book! "Present the page better" is all I'm asking. And "make it less skeevy", if that's possible.

And, for the love of god, DESCRIBE THINGS! PLEASE, I BEG OF YOU, DESCRIBE EVERYTHING! I DON'T CARE WHAT IT IS, JUST DESCRIBE IT SO PEOPLE CAN HAVE A CLEAR IDEA OF WHAT THEY'RE SUPPOSED TO BE READING! Hell, I give you permission to describe the protagonist's breasts, just give the reader SOMETHING!

Oh, and you can just ignore the whole "half-elf" thing. I don't expect you to know about them and for this instance, you don't need to. --Fredhot16 9:42 (Louisiana Time), 15 June 2017

The groping and pawing happened at the clothing shop, erm, tent.

Also, yes, I know the rest of the story makes no sense. You know my pain. --Fredhot16 17:52 (Louisiana Time), 19 June 2017

...You have automatically lost all respect from me with those lyrics.--Fredhot16 11:13 (Louisiana Time), 19 July 2017

Erm, sorry. I've been sorta busy and I kinda forgot about it. I'll try to give you my proper opinion soon but I can't do it right now because I slept pretty late last night, about 3 A.M. Going to say one thing: your page was a major fucking improvement over the last one. There was actual dialogue for fuck's sake!

You know, there's something weird about the stories on that CYOS. I don't think a lot of it was made by people who were thinking "Forgotten Realms" when they made it. It feels like generic D&D stuff with some vanilla D&D info thrown in. The mentions of Pelor, for one thing. While Pelor, the god of the Sun, is a D&D god, he's not a Forgotten Realms god. The closest there may be to Pelor is Lathander, the Morninglord, the God of spring, dawn, etc.

Edit: Huh. There's actually a table in Forgotten Realms Campaign Setting handbook that tells you which D&D deities to convert to Forgotten Realms deities. Pelor, for example, can be switched with Lathander, Ilmater, the Broken God, or Torm, the Loyal Fury.

-Fredhot16 21:27 (Louisiana Time), 13 August 2017

If you aren't busy, perhaps you could do the red links for this page: D&D: FHR: The cloaked merchant : "Let's see how far you are willing to go...."

Try it like you did for the bard page.--Fredhot16 14:12 (Louisiana Time), 14 August 2017

Going to stay away from this site for some time. Planning on sitting down and reading the handbooks for Forgotten Realms. There's a lot of interesting lore and story ideas in this stuff. And it's all on the internet, free to download! Oh, and to answer your question:

A. For D&D: Well, she can't really do it because she only has a part of the whole map right now. She needs all of them. And there's the guards behind him. Also, that creep doesn't own the shop. I think the shop owner went home for the night or something.

To be honest, I was thinking of something like that. You know, the protag somehow getting it away from the creep without putting out any more "goods". The best bet would be to get him alone and then...you know.

B. "Don't have sex!" Are you sure you weren't inspired by the manga "My Balls" where a man has to not ejaculate for a whole month to save the world? Yes, this is real. I am NOT kidding. Also, go ahead. That will be a breath of fresh air.

C. Go wild.--Fredhot16 00:18 (Louisiana Time), 15 August 2017

No. I'm not really back.

I'll be blunt: I came here a couple of years ago in 2012 because I was enamored with Choose Your Own Adventures and I thought I could practice my writing here.

However, I stopped going back here a year ago because of one question: what is the point of practicing writing here if nobody will read it or give their opinions?

Not only are there few regulars here but considering the absolute plethora of smut here, what chance is there for anybody to read anything I've crafted or even give their opinion? Practice is worthless if nobody will point to the problems in your writing.

I might contribute to random Choose Your Own Adventures if I'm bored or tempted to go back to old habits of editing on here but I don't think I'll be writing anything of my own here.

If anybody wants to talk to me, though, I'll be here for that and respond.

Heck, if you want me to look at your work for suggestions or any editing ideas, I'm always up for that.

Edit: Also, there's a Choose Your Own Adventure called "Katarina's Adventures" whose original writer seems to have disappeared so maybe you could take a look and see if you can do anything with it?

So. This is awkward and not just because it's been (checks last communication) holy shit, half a decade? Anyway, yeah, it's been a long time since we've talked.

Am I actually back this time? For the foreseeable future, yes. I do have a collaboration I want to contribute to here and that old Dungeons and Dragons CYOA to fill in with my own idea for an adventure, not just bitterly edit it. Yeah, I really was contemptuous, wasn't I?

I actually came back today to talk about a way I don't know if you're familiar with Yahtzee, a certain vulgar but hilarious reviewer on The Escapist, but he actually has longer, more drawn-out reviews called "Extra Punctuation". In one of his articles, Yahtzee talks about how he'd prefer "Heavy Rain", he would have preferred for the plot twist of the killer's identity to change depending on the decisions you made, much like Silent Hill 2 and Silent Hill: Silent Memories, whose endings changed on subtle actions that implied a different mindset like running around with frequently low health making it more likely to get the suicide ending and such.]] He's very fond of getting the gameplay to interact with and work with the story, changing and painting in the context.

I think I may have complained before about seeing this sort of thing because a CYOA is about the choices you, the main character, makes, not the choices you make the other characters make like "The man gropes you" or "The man just stares at you". Here, I think it's different because it's not so much based on making other character's choices so much as the choice you make influencing the tone and direction the story takes before it's "fully-baked", so to speak.

Like, if you choose "glare at the person at the door", the person will glare back or shoot some snide remark and the story will inform you that it's an old rival that usually tries to undermine you. If you choose "say hello in a friendly tone", they'd say hello back and shoot the shit with you, informing you that they're a casual acquittance. Another choice for signifying if they're a friend and another if they're a lover.

Or, as he put it, "the idea was, you had to make 6 choices, and each choice branched the story. The player was given as little detail as possible at the start, and each choice of action they made added detail that altered the context of the events. For example, you started off in a hospital reception area, and the first choice was whether to sit down and wait or walk down the hall to explore further. Choosing to sit implied that the player character understood the hospital to be functional, and would lead to the stories involving visiting sick friends, seeing a doctor or identifying a corpse. Choosing to explore implied that the player character was more confused about their situation, which led to stories in which the hospital was abandoned or closed, and you were there for various illicit reasons."

It's an interesting idea for how to experiment with CYOAs while still making the reader's choices the center of the piece and I'm pretty sure I saw something like that here, one choice going for a romantic tone, one for a dangerous "you were just kidnapped" tone.

...By the way, your shower is fixed, right? I remember you talking about how unsexy and rude the fixers were, not like the fixers in porn.

--Fredhot16 01:21 (Central Time), 03 December 2021

I'll admit...some of these things also turn my stomach. I once stumbled onto a page in "The Devil's Daughter" and found a scene where "garden slaves" have to lick a woman's ass clean and it described how there was wet shit still in her ass and...

I tapped out. I could not even try. I can stomach tons and tons of poorly-written smut but going into gross-out territory like this isn't worth the effort.

Sorry to hear that you don't come by anymore but go ahead, you do you. Would it be too much to ask which Discord your writings are put on?

I actually do find that way of writing Yahtzee described interesting enough to try one day. But, yanno, if ain't today...

That said, if I wanted to get your opinions on something I wrote here, would you still be willing to take a look?

--Fredhot16 01:21 (Central Time), 08 December 2021

Enier

TQ for the tips.

Also, you do not need to have a template. That was put there so you know how to make one if you want. It is not required, and is not useful if your story isn't going to use it. If it is, well, you can replace the template, but they are hard to figure out. Let me know if you need help on it.Reply:

Remind me what a template is?

Can you do combination linking?

Help with the status bar! I need an explanation clearer than the tutorial!

I want something like the table in the tutorial, but blue. can u send me the code?

TQ. How do I make A Wiki?

Platypus

Thank you for your efforts thus far. I appreciate your help, and you have my sympathy for your loss of brain cells. At some point, when I'm feeling brave, I'll tackle what remains. Hot and Horny was most written by writers that I pushed away from Smutty Sex Romp and Rampage, and much of it is pretty cringe worthy.

"I'm about to pop an egg." There should be a collection of truly, awfully bad lines somewhere. That turkey deserves special recognition for sheer awfulness. --Platypus 12:42, 14 June 2017 (UTC)

Thanks for the heads up. And good job messing with the spammer's spammy spam! --Platypus 11:54, 9 August 2017 (UTC)

Wolfskin75

did this work? --Wolfskin75


I am thinking of a several character story... And like your too graphic. I wanted to incorporate pictures. Non that have copyright but to give the reader a idea of what i am visualizing. I am trying to find a way to pitch my ideas without it being public... But i dont use anom email so...yeah. I think however, i should work on figuring out the mechanics before i start writing. And i invite you to add to were you see fit. I like your stories. (i read some.) -- Wolfskin75


Well, my idea goes like this. I want to write a two prong story: about a neighborhood of deviants that a Mom and her daughter move into. They are fresh from a divorce from a wealthy guy so he buys them a House in this neighborhood. I want to Mom to become some Wife's pet (romance themed but lots of kink Dom/sub exploring fetishes... mostly my own) the choices will be who you sub too. Whether it be a loving woman or a cruel pain master. and at the same time her daughter (totally cute emo girl) will become a Dom to one of the daughters of the town. Of course they will be men in it.. but only as a side story.. (men have no place in my fantasy world) Of course.... this is basically how the neighborhood works... they were moved there on purpose. I love reading stories where two girls find a comfortable love full of their kinks . yes... no? any tips or whatever would be nice.

Wolfskin75


Okay, I have corrected some things. I apologize for some misunderstandings. I guess I am looking for more of a mentor? someone to bounce ideas off of. None of the ideas I have are set in stone and I am still trying to even figure out how to get started. I am just more looking for some sort of communication and would like someone to collaborate with eventually. I am new here and I am just testing the waters. To see what is up.

Wolfskin75


Thank you. I am currently working on adding things to "Mom can be bad". I am going to try and class up the story a bit and learn the formatting. I have a lot to think about. You're right, some of the stories are down right stupid. you're also right and that I am more about the innocence rather than the age.. Let me digest what you wrote, it was all good .. and I very glad for your time. thank you again.

Wolfskin75

You said a couple things that I can relate. The reason I want to write this story is that, I just to chat with a bunch of real life little's. It was SOOOO great and they where all so full of life and happiness. Of course things got drama filled at times but It was something I could "feel". I wanted to be a protector. Not someone who would punish and then After care.. but ALL After care. and since I am married so I fantasize ... ALOT. but Like I said, it's not normal, (like most things I am involved in) for instance... I read rampage. and EVERY Ending I got to was a happily ever after ending. I think that say a lot of about my mind where I want to go with this story of mind. The strong protecting the weak. Someone protecting those who would be prey and letting them live in happiness. Of course there is sex and kinkiness but it's the best of all environments. safety and trust. this is more where I want my stories to go. Like I said. I am going to press on with adding to "Mom can be bad" not only warming up my writing skills and figuring out the format (like if you make one choice it effects the rest of the story sort of thing) and See what I can do. I am dealing with Lisa, 40 married and Tera 50 divorced. ( is there some sort of forum for these type of formatting questions?)


Wolfskin75


I am trying to add a page a day and see what happens. I have already ended my first thread. :)

Wolfskin75


nice, can I use that?

Wolfskin75


Very nice. I am loving making these little snippets. Even though i fantasize about it, I am not sure if i got the feeling right. Since i am not female all i have to go on is other writings and since i don't have a book length to write and develop these feelings. I don't know what its like for a straight "married" woman to get picked up at a bar by another and go with it. I will use your snippets. But i invite you to add the story. :) I am also having fun making most of the men villians.

Wolfskin75


Again. Thank you. I have a lot of editing to do amd make it all says in line. Thank you thank you. To know you are reading what i am writing...yay. I need to become a stronger writer. I am actually having some issues. 1. How do you slog through the middle stuff? I am having troubles feeling overwhelmed with stuff that has to hhappen to make the story ...er semi good rather than just the dirty parts. Do i make sense?

Wolfskin75

For instance, I was thinking about making it back to the house. I have several story points where things need to happen before the Preg story gets to the house. I add some sex parts, things in fact I would love to do. What I am having trouble with is trying to get the notion that She might not be totally okay with this and that when she gets to house she is like "what the fuck am I doing." or maybe have that moment in the car.

I really need to spend some time really trying to catch up on things.

Not every woman has DD or 38g breast, not every woman shaves ( and thank god for that.) all the woman in my stories don't have huge boobs. I fantasize about smaller breast and I am not afraid to write about pubic hair.

Wolfskin75


I am trying to get more from you... To hopefully get you to boil over into a story. :) whatever you want to tell me...please be sure i am "listening". ;).

Also i have been busy lately so i haven't had much time to respond.

Wolfskin75


I love the way you write. You include little things.. little things are always the important things right. and yes.. both of those things were great! I am going on vacation for a week. I will be back though. Hopefully I will some updated work for you

Wolfskin75


I have wrote alot ... Cant wait to post it. How have you been?

Wolfskin75


I would ask you a favor. I love what you wrote by the way... Totally totally enjoyed it. *wink* again and again...

I need you to write a lesbian sex scene between Tera and Beth. I am adding a scene...after the dancing scene she goes home drunk with Beth..could you write the sex...can be bleary and nebulous...but it would be amazing if you would...?

Wolfskin75

Will do. I will also read the links you sent. How would you like me to get that to you? Email or post it here? I will just living out a fantasy :)


Wolfskin75


Tera, 50 mother of two, I envision her being bi curious her whole life just stuck in a rut. Blond hair, dyed. To cover the grey.. Beth a mid 20's redhead in college. Loves older woman. And likes the older woman sort of a mother like girlfriend..Knows Tera ( knows her daughter and is someone's daughter that Tera will know. Tera is of the generation that doesnt shave..pubic hair i mean. Beth is smaller chested then Tera. Normal breast Tera's would slightly not perky. Beth is the predator in this case...i want to have some regert in the morning but enough to force her hand in a choice. So far she has moved slowly but she has moved forward... Thats the direction i want to head. Plus... I havent posted the next post which will go in front of this...so you have a little time


I am trying not to make something typical.

Wolfskin75


I find myself wanting to add on to other stories... But alot of them have elements i dont like and really cant further the story the way i would like with the cast as it is. I could just go and rewrite the story...but i would rather contact the author and make the change.....sigh....or just make one of my own i guess.

Wolfskin75


back home and posting again. :) figured it all out.

Wolfskin75


Any details you can provide about that...I am more than happy to read...re read .. Have my own activities..then re read again. I would like to know...especially the tying part...

Wolfskin75

I feel so lazy...i havent been writing..bad me..lol

Wolfskin75

I have a question. Do you understand my writing? Like if you had to critque it. What would be a couple of good things i could work on?

Wolfskin75 23:55, 14 July 2017 (UTC)

I added two or three more pages last night. I really need have a edit day. If I could crave out a day to JUST EDIT that would be great. *sigh*

Wolfskin75 14:35, 15 July 2017 (UTC)


Wanted to touch base. How are you doing?

Wolfskin75 20:10, 16 July 2017 (UTC)


Thank you..its awesome. It was perfect and I..thank you for your time. Family def comes first

Wolfskin75 14:31, 18 July 2017 (UTC)


I have a question for you? it's kind of private. how can I ask you?

Wolfskin75 00:23, 19 July 2017 (UTC)


I have been really tired lately, I plan to work on this weekend. I am not giving up. Life has just gotten busy, I still love the writing and I still crave the interaction. Thank you for your time and effort. I look really good, and I will get my head screwed on right promise.

Wolfskin75 15:23, 20 July 2017 (UTC)

I was finally able to read it. I am changing it all to first person. since I think, that how I wrote the rest of the story? I wasn't sure so I have copies of both just in case. I will be working on the rest of it and that's what I want to buzz you about. I think it would be easier. to use discord for our edits? and I wanted to buzz you my Discord info. As you can leave something there for days and I can see it there when every I log on. I was just thinking about it. Plus we maintain our safety and secure. :) HIGHLY HIGHLY sexy stuff!!! thank you.

Wolfskin75 07:25, 21 July 2017 (UTC)


So far it's golden. I find myself really enjoying the foreplay as I usually do in real life. As a kid in middle school I taught myself through many a bad movie to listen to a woman's body and learn how to please her without "intercourse". I LOVE FOREPLAY. and if that doesn't sound true or read true, there is no point finish the chapter. Anyway I think what you wrote actually feels real rather than what you said to the notes where the they get together and he whips his cock out stuffs it in.. and she lOVES IT! and have five orgasm. THEN, everyone thinks it's a great scene but nothing happened. Furthermore, one of the parts I find very disrespectful is that they're always written where the women is satisfied beyond the shadow of a doubt, multiple orgasm and after one time having sex, she goes from Virgin she goes to ultra slut. It's just stupid!!! In this story, I wanted to communicate softness and the importance of trust and the sexiness of vulnerability and how that plays into arousal.

as for this conversation. I would say without a DOUBT... I look forward to our interactions and AND I don't know why I hold as much as I do. but... that's a deeper discussion.

Wolfskin75 12:52, 21 July 2017 (UTC)

What do you need from me? I am feeling like I have slacked off.. TOTALLY hot scene by the way... :P

What do you use to keep track of the story? I am starting to see the limitations of your basic document editor. I losing my place pretty easily. :(

Wolfskin75 21:42, 23 July 2017 (UTC)


Did you add something? I couldnt make up what was updated?

Wolfskin75 21:17, 24 July 2017 (UTC)

Out of the three moms can be bad stories i started. Two of them end up in the same kink. Which is good but i dont want to just write the same thing. Yes i am interested in that kink and those types if relationships but... You have to be anle to expand lol. I am trying to write it from all sides. But i feel like I enjoy writing it why not...but also since I am learning....i am having a bad day and writing porn and reading your hot writing makes me happy.

Wolfskin75 23:15, 24 July 2017 (UTC)


I finally found a shit load of notes you have been leaving. I have starting up stories and just letting it go on. I would have loved to competed in that competition!!! I would have written some awesome stuff. Cream worthy if I do say. Use to take the train to work everyday.. so I had a lot of time to think about this particular thing.

What is my style? I am would have to say I am trained beginner and that my style is "evolving" I am not giving up and I will read all that you have left for me. PROMISE. I am going on vacation again so I hope to have some good pages come of this vacation. I just don't want to be a one trick pony you know.

Wolfskin75 06:34, 26 July 2017 (UTC)

Thank you for that. I am going to use it but I had to create my own account and I would have to invite you to work with me. SOOOO if you want to find out who I am really am.. cause I don't have fake email addresses.... Let me know. :) I would be more than happy to invite you onboard. :)

Wolfskin75 07:19, 26 July 2017 (UTC)

I have gotten the thingy up. I will write some more and invite when i get back form vacation. But a couple of beers and a couple hours to write do wonders?

Wolfskin75 23:24, 27 July 2017 (UTC)

I invited you. I am reading your blog. and I want to work with you on "Maso me" whenever you think I can fit. :) anyway, I will have more soon.

Wolfskin75 22:16, 29 July 2017 (UTC)


Okay.. I am going to have to make pages for us. (actually makes me happy) so we can keep better track of our various creative projects. I will have to figure how to do that and then we can add to those.

Wolfskin75 00:20, 30 July 2017 (UTC)

did you get the invite?

Wolfskin75 16:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)

Let me work on that. no idea why. I am going back through and editing. I was reading through maso me. I loved the part where they were using her in class. HOT!

Wolfskin75 04:40, 1 August 2017 (UTC)

I did figure out how to get you full access. Try it and let me know.

Wolfskin75 04:58, 1 August 2017 (UTC)

Okay. I wanted to right something about a like humiliation type scene that is being filmed, something new for the person involved but not as horrifying as she thought. (i.e. the experience as being used as a sex guide in the "training" part.) I am not sure if that would fit into that story. or even if you wanted it to be in it at all. just was really excited by the training part was all. doing things in front of people you don't know or do know. wanted to add that in. I would add that in to one of the chapters of my story as well. It was hot

Wolfskin75 15:45, 2 August 2017 (UTC)


So, I started my own story.. YAY. I will work on Lisa's story tonight (or this weekend at least) I added the beginning of the sex scenes with Tera and Beth and introduced a new character or at least named her. (Tera's friend Marla.) Anything else you would like me to do or help you with?

Wolfskin75 18:44, 4 August 2017 (UTC)


I like it. you are a really good writer and story teller. I like the way you make the story come together. I am trying to work on my story telling abilities or at least communicating them in written form. I have had writers block as of late. I have plenty of "ideas" but seemingly no time and not a lot motivation. I have been reading a bit lately, and really thinking about what kind of stories I want to tell. It's good and I am really I guess picking out a lot of the crap that I don't want in my stories that traditionally make it into porn. Love your writing, and I love reading. It's some of the most erotic writing I have read.

Wolfskin75 14:32, 10 August 2017 (UTC)


I have block. and I feel like I need to keep writing though. I want to stay productive. :( i am going to a convention next week maybe that will help me clear my head up. YAY.

Wolfskin75 15:30, 11 August 2017 (UTC)

I've been on the convention for a couple days. I have been trying to write a come up with something to write but not really pushing myself. Have you been?

Wolfskin75 12:17, 20 August 2017 (UTC)


I am back. SAME HERE!!! I have been needing a release. So I have been thinking of someone to write it out. nope... then I thought Stranger orgy. Which, seemed like a good idea. Until I realized I was a loser and could no way shape or form find one. My wife walked around the house this morning with just underwear. I want to so many things,even in front of the kids. didn't care. but...nothing. So, back to writing. Let's write something dirty ??? Stranger orgy story, two character plan to meet there not knowing what is going happen.

Wolfskin75 13:53, 22 August 2017 (UTC)

Alright, time for a rant. I am horny as all get out. Frustrated as hell. Nothing I do seems to help, it only slides me further this big swamp i am stuck in. I know kind of what I want. I have the ideas but I don't see a path to get there. But I know i don't have it all together and I have vauge ideas of what success looks like and I know a lot of time will be in the middle. Am I making sense? I enjoyed my time away at the convention but it seemed like i wasted a whole bunch of time... But it would have been only to stare at a blinking cursor on a screen. I read other erotica... It all sucks but at least they wrote it. I love yours. Specially the one with the girl who goes into the adult book store (have i mentioned that before) i am just stressed and feeling like i am wasting time. I dont want to get up in the morning... But i get up to check for your messages. Everything is crowding me in. I just am aimless. I read some stories about mind control. I find that cool...but all the stories seem to fall apart. Like they lose steam and rely on tropes. Bad ones. What would you do if you had mind control? I know I know for a fact I would use it to get people to admit stuff they are thinking but never say. Aaaaaarrrgghhh am I making sense?

Wolfskin75 14:32, 22 August 2017 (UTC)


YOu and I are in the same boat. Like, THE EXACT same boat.

Wolfskin75 06:20, 23 August 2017 (UTC)


So I am crawling out of skin. I have written a couple of pages here and there but not edited. I need to find a editor. I am going to go and make more sense of my outlines. I have let them go.

Wolfskin75 00:52, 27 August 2017 (UTC)


AAAARRRGGGGGHH. Okay. I have a new schedule to deal with now so I am dealing with that not so good. I would love to help you out on whatever you need help with. I have added anything in a couple days. but I am still thinking. :) How are you.

Wolfskin75 06:08, 31 August 2017 (UTC)


I hope you get better. I know how that can be. with kid's bringing home the sickness. do I have a story for you. LOL

Wolfskin75 14:55, 11 September 2017 (UTC)


Okay so, I have writing story on a forum (kind of like a back and forth.) and last night I wrote this part that literally broke the story. I was told, the other writer was in fact upset by the part so much that they couldn't bear to write any more. (and you are going to have to believe me on this.) I was really happy that I wrote something that caused an emotional impact. but now... since I am "not me" and this is something I would never share in public as me or anyone else. Which is fine but the point of the matter is, is that I have it in me. I lacking the basics to funnel it through. I am getting lessons on how to write better. (like organizational tips and grammar so on) but I sense that I am inspiring hope. :( I guess the point is that I have like something there. It's going to take a lot of work to dig to it. (make sense?)

Wolfskin75 22:25, 11 September 2017 (UTC)


Get better, I miss you.

Wolfskin75 06:21, 14 September 2017 (UTC)

Alison

If I delete the link in all family-friendly stories, will the story also be deleted?

What happened to all those stories on All Family-Friendly Stories? Why is there only 2?

Grazie

Thanks lol. This is my first story so I'm still getting the hang of all the coding and friends.

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