Review:Abigail's Tale

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'''Preview''': ''Abigail gasps. "What are you trying to do?? Kill her?!"  
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'''Preview''': ''Abigail gasps. "What are you trying to do?? Kill her?!"''
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You smile "Maybe..."  
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''You smile "Maybe..." ''
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Your sister slowly starts again...  
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''Your sister slowly starts again... ''
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~One day, when the dwarf's leave, she jumps out of the window and... Lands on a golden goose. the goose squawks and um... Says "I can help you spin straw into gold, fine Alice!" Alice is scared of the talking goose and wants to run away... um...''  
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''~One day, when the dwarf's leave, she jumps out of the window and... Lands on a golden goose. the goose squawks and um... Says "I can help you spin straw into gold, fine Alice!" Alice is scared of the talking goose and wants to run away... um...''  
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'''Review: '''
The story only ever backed out to the reality when something wrong happened. Anyways, it went through a parody of certain fairy tales like the golden goose and the dwarves. Strangely, I did not find a single spelling or grammar mistake, although most stories on the site have at least 5. The story had already been completed although expanding the tale to include nursery rhyme characters could increase the length. Of course, that would spawn more redlinks. Overall, it was a fun game but not very long.
The story only ever backed out to the reality when something wrong happened. Anyways, it went through a parody of certain fairy tales like the golden goose and the dwarves. Strangely, I did not find a single spelling or grammar mistake, although most stories on the site have at least 5. The story had already been completed although expanding the tale to include nursery rhyme characters could increase the length. Of course, that would spawn more redlinks. Overall, it was a fun game but not very long.

Current revision as of 09:45, 12 November 2011

Title: Abigail's Tale

Author: Idkname

Pages:29

Preview: Abigail gasps. "What are you trying to do?? Kill her?!"

You smile "Maybe..."

Your sister slowly starts again...

~One day, when the dwarf's leave, she jumps out of the window and... Lands on a golden goose. the goose squawks and um... Says "I can help you spin straw into gold, fine Alice!" Alice is scared of the talking goose and wants to run away... um...

Review: The story only ever backed out to the reality when something wrong happened. Anyways, it went through a parody of certain fairy tales like the golden goose and the dwarves. Strangely, I did not find a single spelling or grammar mistake, although most stories on the site have at least 5. The story had already been completed although expanding the tale to include nursery rhyme characters could increase the length. Of course, that would spawn more redlinks. Overall, it was a fun game but not very long.

7/10

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