(LoK) Investigate her Arwing - Revision history

IrrelevantComment: Fixing mix of tenses

IrrelevantComment — Sat, 10 Nov 2012 23:21:02 GMT

Fixing mix of tenses

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-	It takes a little over 10 minutes to reach the source of the smoke. Sure enough, just within the edge of the forest in a newly formed crater is the remains of Krystal's Arwing. It ~~was~~ a complete wreck. One of the wings ~~was~~ bent and by the looks of it the other ~~had~~ been sheared off in the collision with the ground. The hull of the ship ~~was~~ so contorted that Krystal ~~was~~ amazed she ~~had~~ survived. She ~~did~~ everything she ~~could~~ not to think about what ~~had~~ happened to Fox. "''He'll be fine,''" she thinks, "''he might've ejected from his ship before it crashed, and even if he didn't, he's tough. If I survived, he would have too''". She ~~wasn~~'t sure she ~~believed~~ that though, and she ~~redoubled~~ her effort to focus on her situation.	+	It takes a little over 10 minutes to reach the source of the smoke. Sure enough, just within the edge of the forest in a newly formed crater is the remains of Krystal's Arwing, half buried on its side at the end of long scorch marks stretching back into the forest. It is a complete wreck. One of the wings is bent and by the looks of it the other has been sheared off in the collision with the ground. The hull of the ship is so contorted that Krystal is amazed she has survived. She does everything she can not to think about what has happened to Fox. "''He'll be fine,''" she thinks, "''he might've ejected from his ship before it crashed, and even if he didn't, he's tough. If I survived, he would have too''". She isn't sure she believes that though, and she redoubles her effort to focus on her situation.

-	The cockpit door was still open from earlier - not that it mattered as there was little left of the glass screen - and she ~~manages~~ to climb ~~into what was left~~ of the ~~cockpit~~. The front of the ship ~~had~~ been forced inwards ~~and~~ it ~~was~~ a tight fit, and the smoke and the fading light ~~didn~~'t help. Twice she ~~cut~~ herself on broken glass or steel but eventually she manages to crouch in the cockpit and look around.	+	The cockpit door was still open from earlier - not that it mattered as there was little left of the glass screen - but due to the angle and contortion of the ship she has to climb on top of the ship and drop in through a hole in the side. The front of the ship has been forced inwards making it a tight fit, and the smoke and the fading light don't help. Twice she cuts herself on broken glass or steel but eventually she manages to crouch in the cockpit and look around.

-	The console in front of her ~~was~~ busted. Between the smoke and the sparks it ~~was~~ giving off it ~~didn~~'t seem like a good idea to try to get it to switch back on, so using the ships communication system to call for help ~~was~~ out of the window. She looks around for anything that might be useful to her, but she ~~knew~~ it ~~was~~ a lost cause. It was a routine training drill, she hadn't needed food or weapons. Krystal suddenly notices how hungry she is, realising that aside from that 'soup' she hasn't eaten all day.	+	The console in front of her is busted. Between the smoke and the sparks it is giving off it doesn't seem like a good idea to try to get it to switch back on, so using the ships communication system to call for help is out of the window. She looks around for anything that might be useful to her, but she knows it is a lost cause. It was a routine training drill, she hadn't needed food or weapons. Krystal suddenly notices how hungry she is, realising that aside from that 'soup' she hasn't eaten all day.
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		+	As Krystal thinks about the meals she's missed, she notices the sound of footsteps drawing near. Her first instinct is to talk to whoever it is, but she quickly discards that idea when she hears voices talking. She can't make out the words from within the cockpit, but she recognises the deep, croaky voices of the SharpClaw.

-	As Krystal starts thinking about the meals she's missed, she notices the sound of footsteps drawing near. Her first instinct is to talk to whoever it is, but she quickly aborts that idea when she hears two voices talking. She can't make out the words from within the cockpit, but she recognises the deep, croaky voices of the SharpClaw.

	The footsteps were drawing nearer - the SharpClaw were definitely headed her way. Does she:		The footsteps were drawing nearer - the SharpClaw were definitely headed her way. Does she:
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	*[[(LoK) Watch the SharpClaw\|cautiously attempt to see what's going on?]]		*[[(LoK) Watch the SharpClaw\|cautiously attempt to see what's going on?]]
	*[[(LoK) Confront the SharpClaw\|leave the Arwing and confront the SharpClaw?]]		*[[(LoK) Confront the SharpClaw\|leave the Arwing and confront the SharpClaw?]]
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	{{Status\|Equipment=''Tribal Armour''\|Health=100\|MP=0\|Level=0}}		{{Status\|Equipment=''Tribal Armour''\|Health=100\|MP=0\|Level=0}}

	[[Category: Legend of Krystal\|Investigate her Arwing]]		[[Category: Legend of Krystal\|Investigate her Arwing]]

IrrelevantComment at 21:05, 9 November 2012

IrrelevantComment — Fri, 09 Nov 2012 21:05:29 GMT

←Older revision		Revision as of 21:05, 9 November 2012
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-	It takes a little over 10 minutes to reach the source of the smoke. Sure enough, just within the edge of the forest in a newly formed crater is the remains of Krystal's Arwing. It was a complete wreck. One of the wings was bent and by the looks of it the other had been sheared off in the collision with the ground. The hull of the ship was so contorted that Krystal was amazed she had survived. She did everything she could not to think about what had happened to Fox. "''He'll be fine~~. He~~ might've ejected from his ship before it crashed, and even if he didn't, he's tough. If I survived, he would have too''".	+	It takes a little over 10 minutes to reach the source of the smoke. Sure enough, just within the edge of the forest in a newly formed crater is the remains of Krystal's Arwing. It was a complete wreck. One of the wings was bent and by the looks of it the other had been sheared off in the collision with the ground. The hull of the ship was so contorted that Krystal was amazed she had survived. She did everything she could not to think about what had happened to Fox. "''He'll be fine,''" she thinks, "''he might've ejected from his ship before it crashed, and even if he didn't, he's tough. If I survived, he would have too''". She wasn't sure she believed that though, and she redoubled her effort to focus on her situation.
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		+	The cockpit door was still open from earlier - not that it mattered as there was little left of the glass screen - and she manages to climb into what was left of the cockpit. The front of the ship had been forced inwards and it was a tight fit, and the smoke and the fading light didn't help. Twice she cut herself on broken glass or steel but eventually she manages to crouch in the cockpit and look around.
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		+	The console in front of her was busted. Between the smoke and the sparks it was giving off it didn't seem like a good idea to try to get it to switch back on, so using the ships communication system to call for help was out of the window. She looks around for anything that might be useful to her, but she knew it was a lost cause. It was a routine training drill, she hadn't needed food or weapons. Krystal suddenly notices how hungry she is, realising that aside from that 'soup' she hasn't eaten all day.
		+
		+	As Krystal starts thinking about the meals she's missed, she notices the sound of footsteps drawing near. Her first instinct is to talk to whoever it is, but she quickly aborts that idea when she hears two voices talking. She can't make out the words from within the cockpit, but she recognises the deep, croaky voices of the SharpClaw.
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		+	The footsteps were drawing nearer - the SharpClaw were definitely headed her way. Does she:
		+	*[[(LoK) Stay in the Arwing\|stay hidden inside the Arwing?]]
		+	*[[(LoK) Watch the SharpClaw\|cautiously attempt to see what's going on?]]
		+	*[[(LoK) Confront the SharpClaw\|leave the Arwing and confront the SharpClaw?]]
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		+	{{Status\|Equipment=''Tribal Armour''\|Health=100\|MP=0\|Level=0}}
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		+	[[Category: Legend of Krystal\|Investigate her Arwing]]

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IrrelevantComment — Fri, 09 Nov 2012 20:36:26 GMT

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It takes a little over 10 minutes to reach the source of the smoke. Sure enough, just within the edge of the forest in a newly formed crater is the remains of Krystal's Arwing. It was a complete wreck. One of the wings was bent and by the looks of it the other had been sheared off in the collision with the ground. The hull of the ship was so contorted that Krystal was amazed she had survived. She did everything she could not to think about what had happened to Fox. "''He'll be fine. He might've ejected from his ship before it crashed, and even if he didn't, he's tough. If I survived, he would have too''".