A New Life - Revision history

Fredhot16 at 21:46, 11 March 2016

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	"Buddy, you have a ''really'' bad sense of timing. What do I need a refund for? I'll be dead in a week."		"Buddy, you have a ''really'' bad sense of timing. What do I need a refund for? I'll be dead in a week."

-	"Well Sir, that's exactly why you need a refund. We gave you a defective life the first time around. You never really had a shot."	+	"Well, Sir, that's exactly why you need a refund. We gave you a defective life the first time around. You never really had a shot."

	"Wait. "Defective life"? Who the hell are you? Who the hell is ''we''? What the hell do you mean by "refund"?"		"Wait. "Defective life"? Who the hell are you? Who the hell is ''we''? What the hell do you mean by "refund"?"

Fredhot16 at 15:02, 11 March 2016

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	"Well Sir, that's exactly why you need a refund. We gave you a defective life the first time around. You never really had a shot."		"Well Sir, that's exactly why you need a refund. We gave you a defective life the first time around. You never really had a shot."

-	"Wait. "Defective life"? Who the hell are you? What the hell do you mean by "refund"?"	+	"Wait. "Defective life"? Who the hell are you? Who the hell is ''we''? What the hell do you mean by "refund"?"

	"Sir, I don't have much time. Quickly pick an option."		"Sir, I don't have much time. Quickly pick an option."

Fredhot16 at 08:29, 11 March 2016

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	"Sir, I don't have much time. Quickly pick an option."		"Sir, I don't have much time. Quickly pick an option."

-	You sit up and scowl at the man. "Damn right you don't. Either explain yourself now or I'll call the nurse."	+	The faces of four people suddenly flash in your mind, so quickly that you're not sure if that actually happened. You sit up and scowl at the man. "Damn right you don't. Either explain yourself now or I'll call the nurse."

	The man in white doesn't seem perturbed by your threat. "I have no time for idle threats." His voice is a shade more annoyed and...is that fear you can hear? "Choose now."		The man in white doesn't seem perturbed by your threat. "I have no time for idle threats." His voice is a shade more annoyed and...is that fear you can hear? "Choose now."

Fredhot16 at 08:27, 11 March 2016

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	"NOW!" The man's voice suddenly...changes. His voice is loud enough to echo in the room but the echo sounds...strange. It sounds less like a actual reflection of a noise and more like the idea of what a echo should be, more...''abstract'' for lack of a better word. Somebody should have heard him yell but you're not entirely sure if the echo even counts a sound other people can hear.		"NOW!" The man's voice suddenly...changes. His voice is loud enough to echo in the room but the echo sounds...strange. It sounds less like a actual reflection of a noise and more like the idea of what a echo should be, more...''abstract'' for lack of a better word. Somebody should have heard him yell but you're not entirely sure if the echo even counts a sound other people can hear.

-	And that's only the echo. Your desires suddenly take a complete 180. You feel compelled to give this man an answer when you were about to ~~cal~~ a nurse to get him out of here. You hear yourself say...	+	And that's only the echo. Your desires suddenly take a complete 180. You feel compelled to give this man an answer just when you were about to call a nurse to get him out of here. You hear yourself say...

Fredhot16 at 08:27, 11 March 2016

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	"Well Sir, that's exactly why you need a refund. We gave you a defective life the first time around. You never really had a shot."		"Well Sir, that's exactly why you need a refund. We gave you a defective life the first time around. You never really had a shot."

-	"Wait. "Defective life"? Who the hell are you? What the hell do you mean by refund?"	+	"Wait. "Defective life"? Who the hell are you? What the hell do you mean by "refund"?"

	"Sir, I don't have much time. Quickly pick an option."		"Sir, I don't have much time. Quickly pick an option."
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	You sit up and scowl at the man. "Damn right you don't. Either explain yourself now or I'll call the nurse."		You sit up and scowl at the man. "Damn right you don't. Either explain yourself now or I'll call the nurse."

-	The man in white doesn't seem perturbed by your threat. "I ~~don't~~ have time for idle threats." His voice is a shade more annoyed and...is that fear you can hear? "Choose now."	+	The man in white doesn't seem perturbed by your threat. "I have no time for idle threats." His voice is a shade more annoyed and...is that fear you can hear? "Choose now."
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		+	"Idle threat? Buddy, if you really think I'm not-"
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		+	"NOW!" The man's voice suddenly...changes. His voice is loud enough to echo in the room but the echo sounds...strange. It sounds less like a actual reflection of a noise and more like the idea of what a echo should be, more...''abstract'' for lack of a better word. Somebody should have heard him yell but you're not entirely sure if the echo even counts a sound other people can hear.
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		+	And that's only the echo. Your desires suddenly take a complete 180. You feel compelled to give this man an answer when you were about to cal a nurse to get him out of here. You hear yourself say...

Fredhot16 at 08:16, 11 March 2016

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	"Well Sir, that's exactly why you need a refund. We gave you a defective life the first time around. You never really had a shot."		"Well Sir, that's exactly why you need a refund. We gave you a defective life the first time around. You never really had a shot."

-	"Wait. "Defective life"? Who the hell are you? What the hell do you ~~want~~?"	+	"Wait. "Defective life"? Who the hell are you? What the hell do you mean by refund?"

	"Sir, I don't have much time. Quickly pick an option."		"Sir, I don't have much time. Quickly pick an option."

Fredhot16 at 08:16, 11 March 2016

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	You sit up and scowl at the man. "Damn right you don't. Either explain yourself now or I'll call the nurse."		You sit up and scowl at the man. "Damn right you don't. Either explain yourself now or I'll call the nurse."

-	The man in white doesn't seem perturbed by your threat. "I don't have time for idle threats." His voice is a shade more annoyed and...is that fear you can hear? "~~Make up your mind~~ now."	+	The man in white doesn't seem perturbed by your threat. "I don't have time for idle threats." His voice is a shade more annoyed and...is that fear you can hear? "Choose now."

Fredhot16 at 08:07, 11 March 2016

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	"Sir, I'm here to give you a refund."		"Sir, I'm here to give you a refund."

-	You stare at him a moment	+	You stare at him a moment then smile blackly.

-	"What do I need a refund for? I'll be dead in a week."	+	"Buddy, you have a ''really'' bad sense of timing. What do I need a refund for? I'll be dead in a week."

-	"Well Sir, that's exactly why you need a refund. We gave you a defective life the first time around. You never really had a shot."	+	"Well Sir, that's exactly why you need a refund. We gave you a defective life the first time around. You never really had a shot."

-	"Who the hell are you?"	+	"Wait. "Defective life"? Who the hell are you? What the hell do you want?"

	"Sir, I don't have much time. Quickly pick an option."		"Sir, I don't have much time. Quickly pick an option."
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		+	You sit up and scowl at the man. "Damn right you don't. Either explain yourself now or I'll call the nurse."
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		+	The man in white doesn't seem perturbed by your threat. "I don't have time for idle threats." His voice is a shade more annoyed and...is that fear you can hear? "Make up your mind now."
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	*[[A college girl with a bladder problem.]]		*[[A college girl with a bladder problem.]]

Catcomb at 07:43, 1 January 2010

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	*[[A college girl with a bladder problem.]]		*[[A college girl with a bladder problem.]]
-	*[[A 10-year-old boy ~~with 3 arms.~~]]	+	*[[A 10-year-old boy]]
	*[[A middle-aged woman with a split personality.]]		*[[A middle-aged woman with a split personality.]]
	*[[I'm not sure I want any of those things.]]		*[[I'm not sure I want any of those things.]]
		+	*[[A six-year old girl with an abusive father]]

	[[Category: A New Life\|*]]		[[Category: A New Life\|*]]

Platypus at 01:08, 23 March 2008

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-	You wake up and look around your hospital room~~, it~~'s been months since you've seen anything else. A strange man is standing over you he is dressed in all white and as he notices you are awake he ~~begins to speak~~.	+	You wake up and look around your hospital room. It's been months since you've seen anything else. A strange man is standing over you. He is dressed in all white and as he notices you are awake, he speaks.

	"Sir, I'm here to give you a refund."		"Sir, I'm here to give you a refund."
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	You stare at him a moment		You stare at him a moment

-	"What do I need a refund for I'll be dead in a week."	+	"What do I need a refund for? I'll be dead in a week."

-	"Well Sir, that's exactly why you need a refund we gave you a defective life the first time around. You never really had a shot."	+	"Well Sir, that's exactly why you need a refund. We gave you a defective life the first time around. You never really had a shot."

	"Who the hell are you?"		"Who the hell are you?"

-	"Sir, I don't have much time ~~quickly~~ pick an option"	+	"Sir, I don't have much time. Quickly pick an option."

	*[[A college girl with a bladder problem.]]		*[[A college girl with a bladder problem.]]
-	*[[A 10 year old boy with 3 arms.]]	+	*[[A 10-year-old boy with 3 arms.]]
-	*[[A middle aged woman with a split personality.]]	+	*[[A middle-aged woman with a split personality.]]
	*[[I'm not sure I want any of those things.]]		*[[I'm not sure I want any of those things.]]

	[[Category: A New Life\|*]]		[[Category: A New Life\|*]]